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Along the Jericho Road

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Murder Mystery

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Comment from A Matter Of Words
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The sights (and smells) a detective is exposed to in the course of their work, must at times be unbearable. This is one such scenario. The descriptions and dialogue are very well written. Excellent.

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
    Thank you so much for your generous and encouraging review AMOW. I appreciate you stopping by! :0) Bev
reply by A Matter Of Words on 26-Jan-2014
    You are very welcome. The pleasure was mine. Good writing draws one in to a topic they would otherwise just glance over.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
    So gracious! Thank you... Bev
Comment from amahra
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Hi Bev:

You continue to entertain and inform your readers with this story. Find chapter with great insight to what the law has to encounter. Great dialogue as usually.

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
    Amahra, thank so much for the support and encouragement. :0) Bev
Comment from Green Lake Girl
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A great chapter, Bev. The people in law enforcement have to face horrific scenes in their careers. You do a very good job of describing what they encounter and their reactions. Stredwick's narcissism is exposed, and local law enforcement comes out on top. This chapter contains a lot of action and your story is moving forward very quickly. I love the pace! Very well done, as usual, Bev.

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
    Thanks so much, Marietta. I'm thrilled you liked the chapter and felt the pace was good. That's what I was striving for, so that means a lot. Your very generous rating and wonderful encouragement mean so much to me. Hugs, Bev
Comment from Auroraboreal800
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I like this Mystery and Crime Fiction, because of the strong dialogues and great story line. This is very enjoyable. The tale held my interest from start to finish.
Very well written chapter!
:)




 Comment Written 26-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
    Thank you, A. I really appreciate your gracious review. :0) Bev
Comment from Dom G Robles
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Nice detective story filled with lots of surprises. The detectives are trying to gather evidences in order to
find out what went wrong and who was the culprit. In so doing, they try to uncover and discover what were under the rugs which may reveal some hints to uncover the cause of the murder. Nice chapter and the succeeding would be more interesting to read. Congratulations.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
    Thank you so much, Dom. I have a special feeling for my detectives in this story. I feel most law enforcement people are real heroes. Appreciate your generous and encouraging review. :0) Bev
Comment from RGstar
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This was a nice even write, Bev.

So true of yesteryear where priests and homosexuality went hand in hand.
It was widespread knowledge within circles both at churches and otherwise. It was secretive but surprisingly accepted with hush.

Things have changed rapidly throughout the world, but once in time synonymous with young boys.

A nice write, Bev, the storyline coming on fine. Good interactive dialogue between characters and subject matter spot on.

Wanna see some action heating this one up, Bev.

Best wishes,

RG

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
    Thanks so much, Roy. It's great to hear from you and get your unique insights. I appreciate your generosity, my friend. :0) Bev
reply by RGstar on 25-Jan-2014
    Best wishes, Bev, congratulation for your finish for the book of the month. You are both up there.
    RG
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
    You're so sweet, Roy. Thank you...
Comment from Showboat
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Oh Bev, I just loved this one. Whew, I'm out of breath, that went so fast.

Great dialogue and enjoyed the word play in particular.

You rock,

Hugs,
Gayle

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
    Thanks so much, Gayle. What a delightfully generous review! Hugs, Bev
Comment from chasennov
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Along The Jericho Road. 'Napha Moon - Part Two.' Yes, just when you think you've seen the worst.. I found this chapter as good as all your other chapters. Well done.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
    Thanks so much, C. I appreciate your generosity and support. :0) Bev
reply by chasennov on 25-Jan-2014
    You are most welcome, Bev.
Comment from DALLAS01
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Hi, Bev.
You created a bone chilling scenario, when you opened that bedroom door. I am guessing that the body in the freezer is Gertrude. I hadn't given much thought until now, as to why the victims are all elderly? Could it be because collectively they shared info that would incriminate the murderer?

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
    Hi, Dallas. Well now, you might just be on to something. Thanks, as always, for encouragement and support. :0) Bev
reply by DALLAS01 on 25-Jan-2014
    :.)
Comment from JB Lynn
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Excellent work, as always. I appreciated the scene where you show us the detective having to "shut down" his emotions before he could look at the crime scene. I think, too often, it's easy to write these characters as super-tough and able-to-take-anything...but they're only human, and when you show them falter, or have a strong emotional reaction to something, it lets us relate to them a bit more. Wonderful dialogue, it sounded very conversational.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
    Hi, JB. Thanks so much for this superb review. You are right on track with the insights into the law enforcement people. I want to portray them the way I often see them in the non-sensationilized detective programs I watch. Most of them really care. They've been the ones to tell the families and see, not only the brutality of death but the terrible grief of those left behind. I really appreciate you taking time to read.

    Warm regards, Bev