Writing Prompt Entries 2014
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "What's She Done?"The clue is in the title!
13 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
She is such a cutie!!!
Your poem is in excellent Whitney syllable count and structure.
I love the optional use of rhyme.
Great use of questions to engage the reader.
Imp is the perfect word choice :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014
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She is such a cutie!!!
Your poem is in excellent Whitney syllable count and structure.
I love the optional use of rhyme.
Great use of questions to engage the reader.
Imp is the perfect word choice :-) Brooke
Comment Written 14-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014
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Hi Brooke :) Thank you for your lovely feedback, I'm glad you enjoyed my take on the Whitney. Kindest regards as always, Debra :) x
Comment from honeytree
The art work is superb the words told a lot in a few words.
We were all children once
Having lots of fun and maybe into some mischief.
Honey tree
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014
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The art work is superb the words told a lot in a few words.
We were all children once
Having lots of fun and maybe into some mischief.
Honey tree
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014
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Thank you honey tree for your lovely feedback :) Kindeset regards...
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I am glad you liked the review.
Annie
Comment from flora loucheur
I thought the 5-7-5 was tough! A Whitney could be real problem, but you did a great job. Your little girl? Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014
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I thought the 5-7-5 was tough! A Whitney could be real problem, but you did a great job. Your little girl? Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014
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Thank you Flora for your lovely comments and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Yes, the little imp in the picture is my 3yr old daughter Rebecca :) Kindest regards...
Comment from in777wr#
Yes, no telling what happens behind closed doors. LOL. This whitney poem was well written, and the message was clear. I also loved the picture you chose with this poem. Nice job.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Yes, no telling what happens behind closed doors. LOL. This whitney poem was well written, and the message was clear. I also loved the picture you chose with this poem. Nice job.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Thank you for your lovely review, glad you enjoyed the poem :) Kindest regards...
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is charming, and written in well done Whitney form. The presentation is likewise appealing, with the picture of the little imp behind the door. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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This is charming, and written in well done Whitney form. The presentation is likewise appealing, with the picture of the little imp behind the door. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Thank you Jeanie for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards...:)
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Mystery Poet
A delightful image of a cheeky little imp ... so perfect for your poem. I have enjoyed your use of the whitney .. I haven't read one for ages. :)
Cute, funny .... or maybe not for the cleaner-upper. lol I recognise the humour in this witty little ditty and wish the poet the best of luck in the contest. Sure to be popular at the polls. :))) Great poetic technique, spot on syllable count, love the allit in "done/door", Trashed/toys" and 'l' consonance in "all/floor/Little/guilty", enjambment used well to keep the flow, 'i' assonance in "Little/imp's and near sound of 'i' in guilty", add a dash of 'o' assonance and the poet has achieved rhyme as well. OMG ... is there anything you left out? Superb entry for the contest. I have enjoyed and laughed my head off .... oh, the memories. Hahaha! Warm Regards - Lovinia xoxoxo
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Hi Mystery Poet
A delightful image of a cheeky little imp ... so perfect for your poem. I have enjoyed your use of the whitney .. I haven't read one for ages. :)
Cute, funny .... or maybe not for the cleaner-upper. lol I recognise the humour in this witty little ditty and wish the poet the best of luck in the contest. Sure to be popular at the polls. :))) Great poetic technique, spot on syllable count, love the allit in "done/door", Trashed/toys" and 'l' consonance in "all/floor/Little/guilty", enjambment used well to keep the flow, 'i' assonance in "Little/imp's and near sound of 'i' in guilty", add a dash of 'o' assonance and the poet has achieved rhyme as well. OMG ... is there anything you left out? Superb entry for the contest. I have enjoyed and laughed my head off .... oh, the memories. Hahaha! Warm Regards - Lovinia xoxoxo
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Hi Lovi :) thank you so much for your great feedback :) I appreciate the time you put into your review! Kindest regards...;) xx
Comment from rouskin
A real life story:Trashed her toys all o'er the floor?
Little imp's on guard for sure...Seen that guilty look before! Nice contest entry Best of luck and be blessed
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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A real life story:Trashed her toys all o'er the floor?
Little imp's on guard for sure...Seen that guilty look before! Nice contest entry Best of luck and be blessed
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Hi rouskin, thank you so much for your great feedback and good luck wishes :) I appreciate both! Kindest regards...
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hah, any parent out there can surely relate to this one! Oh, the mischief the little ones can get up to, huh?
I liked the lighthearted style & words you've chosen for this entry. It was really fun to read.
Very cute...good luck to you!
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Hah, any parent out there can surely relate to this one! Oh, the mischief the little ones can get up to, huh?
I liked the lighthearted style & words you've chosen for this entry. It was really fun to read.
Very cute...good luck to you!
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Hi Dean, thank you so much for your great feedback and good luck wishes :) I appreciate both! Kindest regards...
Comment from jmdg1954
What's she done
behind the door?
Trashed her toys
all o'er the floor?
Little imp's
on guard for sure...
Seen that guilty look before!
And a guilty look that for all intents and purposes melts your heart.
One of the better entries I've read... John
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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What's she done
behind the door?
Trashed her toys
all o'er the floor?
Little imp's
on guard for sure...
Seen that guilty look before!
And a guilty look that for all intents and purposes melts your heart.
One of the better entries I've read... John
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Hello John :) Thank you for your lovely feedback, I appreciate it! Kindest regards...:)
Comment from chicken scratch love
I enjoyed this style in rhyme MUCH more than NOT rhyming. Very nicely done! I wish you the best of luck and thanks for the share!
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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I enjoyed this style in rhyme MUCH more than NOT rhyming. Very nicely done! I wish you the best of luck and thanks for the share!
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Thank you SCL for your great comments and good luck wishes :) I appreciate both! Kindest regards...
ps. I agree, the unrhymed whitney isn't as nice a form (in my humble opinion!)