An attic of memories.
Free verse.14 total reviews
Comment from zanya
Quite a lot of nostalgia and lifetime growing up memories behind this door - a life lived to the full - with a complimentary pic
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
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Quite a lot of nostalgia and lifetime growing up memories behind this door - a life lived to the full - with a complimentary pic
Comment Written 15-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my poem
Comment from flora loucheur
I enjoyed the whole idea of your poem. My favorite lines were 'trunks of rusty recollections' and 'dreams that paddled the canoe of youth'.Beautiful sentiments. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014
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I enjoyed the whole idea of your poem. My favorite lines were 'trunks of rusty recollections' and 'dreams that paddled the canoe of youth'.Beautiful sentiments. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much for taking time and reading and reviewing my poem.
Comment from LoannaLois
Nice..nice movement in this! I love it when your reading goes on a journey through many thoughts and details. This picture is just awesome.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014
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Nice..nice movement in this! I love it when your reading goes on a journey through many thoughts and details. This picture is just awesome.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much for reading and giving this beautiful review.
Comment from Charlene0513
If only our hearts could hold all the memories we gather together not at all for seeeing the future but happy that love still flourishes behind that closed door.
Charlene
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014
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If only our hearts could hold all the memories we gather together not at all for seeeing the future but happy that love still flourishes behind that closed door.
Charlene
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014
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true. thank you very much for reading and reviewing my poem.
Comment from in777wr#
This was a very well written poem. I also loved the title of your poem. Lots of memories are stored away in attics and garages. This poem brings memories back to me as well. Nicely written.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014
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This was a very well written poem. I also loved the title of your poem. Lots of memories are stored away in attics and garages. This poem brings memories back to me as well. Nicely written.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much for this beautiful review.
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you're welcome.
Comment from MarjorieAnne
This list poem weaves sensory images, alliteration, parallels and emotions in a personal memoir-type frame of reference. I would make the last two lines another stanza. If Mickey and Donald are capitalized then Mouse and Duck must be as well. So as not to repeat "that" I'd suggest "Shells echoing...". The word "lead" should be "led" for past tense.
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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014
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This list poem weaves sensory images, alliteration, parallels and emotions in a personal memoir-type frame of reference. I would make the last two lines another stanza. If Mickey and Donald are capitalized then Mouse and Duck must be as well. So as not to repeat "that" I'd suggest "Shells echoing...". The word "lead" should be "led" for past tense.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014
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Thank you verymuch for pointing out the mistakes and giving the suggestion.i have accepted them all.
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You're welcome
Comment from rouskin
Good flow and imagery throughout the poem:Melodies once lifted the heart so high Now asleep in the unused chords
A gentle whiff of nostalgia Would often open the closed door. Nice contest entry Best of luck
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014
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Good flow and imagery throughout the poem:Melodies once lifted the heart so high Now asleep in the unused chords
A gentle whiff of nostalgia Would often open the closed door. Nice contest entry Best of luck
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much for this thoughtful review.
Comment from Ekim777
The poem is handsomely listed but we can't help wishing for a suggestion of the unexpected, something scandalous perhaps. The first verse is engaging, especially its last line but too sentimental. The poem warms up as we romp along. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014
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The poem is handsomely listed but we can't help wishing for a suggestion of the unexpected, something scandalous perhaps. The first verse is engaging, especially its last line but too sentimental. The poem warms up as we romp along. -Ekim777
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much .
Comment from jmdg1954
Nicely written nostalgic look at memories stuffed away behind closed doors. I viewed this as not "actual" doors, but what's locked away in a parents memory of their child growing up.
Enjoyed this, thank you. John
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014
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Nicely written nostalgic look at memories stuffed away behind closed doors. I viewed this as not "actual" doors, but what's locked away in a parents memory of their child growing up.
Enjoyed this, thank you. John
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much for reading and enjoying my poem
Comment from Clancy25
Such powerful words. You paint a mental picture so that the reader can actually see the faded memories of the past. Vivid details in your verses "with a gentle whiff of nostalgia which often would open the closed door", is just perfect for your beautiful title. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014
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Such powerful words. You paint a mental picture so that the reader can actually see the faded memories of the past. Vivid details in your verses "with a gentle whiff of nostalgia which often would open the closed door", is just perfect for your beautiful title. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014
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Thank youn very much for your beautiful,encouraging words.