Tall Tales and Short Stories
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Comment from daniela.albu
In this captivating writing with exotic notes you managed to create and personalize a charismatic camel that would be the delight of children. It is a nice bed time story. The story ends in a dreamy and nostalgic note.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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In this captivating writing with exotic notes you managed to create and personalize a charismatic camel that would be the delight of children. It is a nice bed time story. The story ends in a dreamy and nostalgic note.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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Thanks Daniela.albu, I appreciate your observant review and the generous rating. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Jean Lutz
Told through the eyes of a child, this one delighted me. Also it brought back fond memories of twenty years ago when I visited Israel. I swear I saw that same camel. They actually do smile. I was blessed with a toothy grin just when I did not have a camera in hand. Also I remembered the dates I smuggled home although we were really not supposed to bring food items through Customs. I thought I was busted in New York when the Customs dog stuck his head in my bag for a sniff. I guess he knew dates were healthy.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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Told through the eyes of a child, this one delighted me. Also it brought back fond memories of twenty years ago when I visited Israel. I swear I saw that same camel. They actually do smile. I was blessed with a toothy grin just when I did not have a camera in hand. Also I remembered the dates I smuggled home although we were really not supposed to bring food items through Customs. I thought I was busted in New York when the Customs dog stuck his head in my bag for a sniff. I guess he knew dates were healthy.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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Hi Jean, what a delightful review you have given 'Clara'. This short series is fun to research and write. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Benny Beeharry
Hi Carolyn
I am back again for a while until i get good news about my sister in law. She is getting a little better, very slowly.
This story of yours is very fascinating. I could feel the sincerity and deep thoughts for details. Unless you have gone to the desert and met some of these people you would not have been able to be so detailed.
Very clear, very imaginative.
Very well done
Benny
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Hi Carolyn
I am back again for a while until i get good news about my sister in law. She is getting a little better, very slowly.
This story of yours is very fascinating. I could feel the sincerity and deep thoughts for details. Unless you have gone to the desert and met some of these people you would not have been able to be so detailed.
Very clear, very imaginative.
Very well done
Benny
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Hi there, I am so blessed to hear your sister in law is better. I know that is comforting to you, your dear wife and family.
Actually Bennie, all the factual information about camels, and desert life, names, etc. is from research. The rest of the story is purely from my heart. :-) I think I will always be a kid. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. Have a great week my friend, Carolyn
Comment from Spitfire
It's wonderful to introduce children to a different culture and educate them about weather problems in other areas of the world. I loved to hear how camels protected themselves during a sandstorm. An extra eyelid-- that would come in handy. A gripping story with the hero almost suffocated by the weight of the carpet and sand. Clara to the rescue. Guess she's the real hero.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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It's wonderful to introduce children to a different culture and educate them about weather problems in other areas of the world. I loved to hear how camels protected themselves during a sandstorm. An extra eyelid-- that would come in handy. A gripping story with the hero almost suffocated by the weight of the carpet and sand. Clara to the rescue. Guess she's the real hero.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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She would seem to be. Smile. Shari, I am delighted you read and enjoyed this one. Thanks for the awesome review. :-) Carolyn
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
What a wonderful children's story this is, Carolyn!
Children will learn so much from this, and not even take note of the fact that they are being taught something, as this is written in a matter-of-fact way, in Abeed's words.
Children learn more about the camel, and learn that children in other parts of the world don't have a computer or a telephone, as evidenced by Abeed saying that there was no way of letting his cousin know that he was coming.
I loved that the gift of a compass was included in your write. What a 'practical' gift that came in handy after the sand storm.
This was very well written, and it conveys a simpler yet wonderful life elsewhere in the world.
Great job, Carolyn!
Connie
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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What a wonderful children's story this is, Carolyn!
Children will learn so much from this, and not even take note of the fact that they are being taught something, as this is written in a matter-of-fact way, in Abeed's words.
Children learn more about the camel, and learn that children in other parts of the world don't have a computer or a telephone, as evidenced by Abeed saying that there was no way of letting his cousin know that he was coming.
I loved that the gift of a compass was included in your write. What a 'practical' gift that came in handy after the sand storm.
This was very well written, and it conveys a simpler yet wonderful life elsewhere in the world.
Great job, Carolyn!
Connie
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Thank you Connie for this amazing review. I am delighted you enjoyed Clara and Abbeed. :-) Carolyn
Comment from The Death
Hi, Carolyn.
It was a very interesting chapter. Your descriptions are vivid and make the desert scenes lively.
You framed the characters well and the story was entertaining as well.
Children enjoy so much the company of animals. I don't know much about the camels, so I found it enjoyable as well.
Have a great day!
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Hi, Carolyn.
It was a very interesting chapter. Your descriptions are vivid and make the desert scenes lively.
You framed the characters well and the story was entertaining as well.
Children enjoy so much the company of animals. I don't know much about the camels, so I found it enjoyable as well.
Have a great day!
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Thank you for this great review. I am happy you liked the story and found it interesting. My hope and desire is that this will please children and all who read it. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Carolyn, this is a great post for your story unfolds easily and with a smooth read. Loved how you weave the deeper message, great images, strong content and expressive post.
Thanks for sharing it.
love
Maureen
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Dear Carolyn, this is a great post for your story unfolds easily and with a smooth read. Loved how you weave the deeper message, great images, strong content and expressive post.
Thanks for sharing it.
love
Maureen
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Maureen, I am glad you enjoyed this story. I am having fun writing about Clara. Love, Carolyn
Comment from DonandVicki
A well composed flash fiction story. Good feel and rhythm to your words as they hold the readers attention all the way through your story. Don
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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A well composed flash fiction story. Good feel and rhythm to your words as they hold the readers attention all the way through your story. Don
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Thanks Don, I am happy you enjoyed this story. I appreciate your positive comments. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Petriesan
I think we lose track of nature though devise. Cars and we don't touch horses much anymore except as a hobby generally, and then not frequently. I think we are the less for it.
Your story, made me see camels. I have never felt one though. That is sad.
Nice piece
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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I think we lose track of nature though devise. Cars and we don't touch horses much anymore except as a hobby generally, and then not frequently. I think we are the less for it.
Your story, made me see camels. I have never felt one though. That is sad.
Nice piece
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Your review is interesting to read. I am so happy you enjoyed the story. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Carolyn.
What a wonderful children's story! Your characters are excellent, inviting readers into a different world than that of North America. Your visuals are great. I could see Abbeed crouched in sands as the winds gusted during the storm. You shared such a beautiful tender moment between Abbeed and his father, a gift handed down from father to son. This is a great story for kids! Well done.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Hi, Carolyn.
What a wonderful children's story! Your characters are excellent, inviting readers into a different world than that of North America. Your visuals are great. I could see Abbeed crouched in sands as the winds gusted during the storm. You shared such a beautiful tender moment between Abbeed and his father, a gift handed down from father to son. This is a great story for kids! Well done.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Thanks so much Rosalyne, your continued support and encouragement mean so much to me. :-) Carolyn