Captive
a haiku contest entry16 total reviews
Comment from Janet Foor
raven in bare tree
unable to flee or caw
moonstruck just like me
Great contest entry. I love the thought of the raven being moonstruck like we get.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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raven in bare tree
unable to flee or caw
moonstruck just like me
Great contest entry. I love the thought of the raven being moonstruck like we get.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Thank you for sharing my poem and for your most encouraging review.
Comment from rouskin
raven in bare tree unable to flee or caw moonstruck just like me Nice contest entry with excellent artwork Best of luck and be blessed
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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raven in bare tree unable to flee or caw moonstruck just like me Nice contest entry with excellent artwork Best of luck and be blessed
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Thank you for sharing my poem and your best wishes.
Comment from Leineco
raven in bare tree
unable to flee or caw
moonstruck just like me
gorgeous imagery - startling final line!
what a great 5-7-5!!!
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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raven in bare tree
unable to flee or caw
moonstruck just like me
gorgeous imagery - startling final line!
what a great 5-7-5!!!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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I am extremely pleased you enjoyed this poem so much. Thank you!
Comment from ennahanid
Top drawer picture choice for your lone raven write. All around picture perfect presentation and a super entry for the contest.
I wish you luck in the contest - Dinah
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Top drawer picture choice for your lone raven write. All around picture perfect presentation and a super entry for the contest.
I wish you luck in the contest - Dinah
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, Dinah, for your most encouraging review and best wishes.
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The poem flowed and connected well. The
first two lines flow and connect well. The last line puts the poem all together! The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Excellent Poem! The poem flowed and connected well. The
first two lines flow and connect well. The last line puts the poem all together! The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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I am delighted the poem worked so well for you, harmony 13. It was fun to write. Thank you for sharing.
Comment from barleygirl
Love your poem! Wow! It goes with the picture, but this isn't the strength of the poem. The personification of the raven, with the narrator feeling the same, this is a very brilliant touch. This connection is what makes the poem. Thanks for sharing & good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Love your poem! Wow! It goes with the picture, but this isn't the strength of the poem. The personification of the raven, with the narrator feeling the same, this is a very brilliant touch. This connection is what makes the poem. Thanks for sharing & good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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I am so pleased you appreciate the connection I was trying to make between the bird and the speaker. Thank you for your wonderful review.
Comment from juliaSjames
A most evocative write. The idea of a moonstruck raven places the bird in the context of its natural world.
But then the final line underscores the affinity between bird and man.
Thus completing the circle.
The touch of rhyme adds a pleasing lilt when the poem is read aloud. Liked the restraint of avoiding mono-rhyme by the placement of "flee" in the middle of the second line.
Enchanting artwork that adds to the mystique of the write, as befits the magic associated with the raven in many cultures.
Best of luck in this fun contest.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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A most evocative write. The idea of a moonstruck raven places the bird in the context of its natural world.
But then the final line underscores the affinity between bird and man.
Thus completing the circle.
The touch of rhyme adds a pleasing lilt when the poem is read aloud. Liked the restraint of avoiding mono-rhyme by the placement of "flee" in the middle of the second line.
Enchanting artwork that adds to the mystique of the write, as befits the magic associated with the raven in many cultures.
Best of luck in this fun contest.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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I could not be more delighted with a review! You saw everything I hoped to suggest in this short poem. Thank you so much for sharing and your kind praise.
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Comment from l.raven
A very smart bird the Raven...but always was a scary bird to me...your poem is very well written...and the perfect picture......
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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A very smart bird the Raven...but always was a scary bird to me...your poem is very well written...and the perfect picture......
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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i am delighted you enjoyed the poem/picture combo. Thank you for sharing my poem.
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you are so welcome...xxoo
Comment from in777wr#
This was a very good poem. The thought of an moonstruck raven was very creative. The poem reads well, and the message is clear. Your 5-7-5 syllable count is in good order. Nicely written.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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This was a very good poem. The thought of an moonstruck raven was very creative. The poem reads well, and the message is clear. Your 5-7-5 syllable count is in good order. Nicely written.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Indeed the picture inspired the poem. Thank you so much for sharing both and your kind praise.
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is a great bird 5-7-5 poem for the prompt written with the perfect syllable count. Good luck to you in the contest:)
Teresa
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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This is a great bird 5-7-5 poem for the prompt written with the perfect syllable count. Good luck to you in the contest:)
Teresa
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Thank you, Teresa, for sharing my poem and for your encouragement.