Final Reckoning
5-7-5 contest entry Bye Bye Blackbird19 total reviews
Comment from 24chas
Now this is true poetry, mikey. A different way of looking at things and expressing it so eloquently. I'm trying to catch up with your work. I've been away for a while.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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Now this is true poetry, mikey. A different way of looking at things and expressing it so eloquently. I'm trying to catch up with your work. I've been away for a while.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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Glad you liked this one. I did too. Thank you much, mikey
Comment from w.j.debi
Now this is thought-provoking verse. Excellent pairing of words and picture in your presentation to get your message across. I see you won the contest. Congratulations.
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Now this is thought-provoking verse. Excellent pairing of words and picture in your presentation to get your message across. I see you won the contest. Congratulations.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Congratulations on winning this contest, Mikey. Very powerful poem. You are a very good poet. I enjoyed this immensely. Great job!
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Congratulations on winning this contest, Mikey. Very powerful poem. You are a very good poet. I enjoyed this immensely. Great job!
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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I swore I would retire if I ever won a 5-7-5 contest. Oh well, I'm a liar. Hahaha. Glad you liked it. I was kind of shocked when I wrote it. I looked at and thought, "Hey, that's pretty good." Thank you kindly, mikey
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Oh, what the heck, go ahead and retire!
Comment from amanda98653
An awesome write, Mikey. I was rooting for you to win:)
(In my opinion) I think it's the creativity that really stood out. The personification is linked to the soul in the body. It could signify the human desire to escape gravity and the inability to do so.
hugs
Amanda
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An awesome write, Mikey. I was rooting for you to win:)
(In my opinion) I think it's the creativity that really stood out. The personification is linked to the soul in the body. It could signify the human desire to escape gravity and the inability to do so.
hugs
Amanda
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
Comment from SValencia0178
Never ceases to amaze me how so many authors are able to follow such strict writing rules, and still create something so beautiful, and thought provoking. Really enjoyed this one.
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Never ceases to amaze me how so many authors are able to follow such strict writing rules, and still create something so beautiful, and thought provoking. Really enjoyed this one.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
Comment from Janet Foor
borne on eagle's wings
deemed too heavy I'm thrown free
justice waits below
Yikes! This is very creative. I don't have an answer to your interesting question.
Good luck in the contest
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borne on eagle's wings
deemed too heavy I'm thrown free
justice waits below
Yikes! This is very creative. I don't have an answer to your interesting question.
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
Comment from juliaSjames
Dear Mystery Writer
This is a powerful write about the prospect of divine justice for those who are evil.
The structure is excellent as the final line is like a counterweight to the first.
Love the use of " thrown free" in the second line. The irony is made clear as the poem ends - freedom is an illusion. And the sound of the long vowels in "free" subtly suggests a scream of terror.
Now about the bird.
The first line conjures up images from the LOR trilogy that show the nobility and power of the eagle.
I read your author notes with interest since I'd never heard of the myth of souls soaring to heaven on eagle's wings.
It's a wonderfully creative take on the prompt guidelines. Perhaps it could be judged to be more about the fate of the wicked than about the magnificent eagle. It's a question of interpretation.
Best of luck.
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Dear Mystery Writer
This is a powerful write about the prospect of divine justice for those who are evil.
The structure is excellent as the final line is like a counterweight to the first.
Love the use of " thrown free" in the second line. The irony is made clear as the poem ends - freedom is an illusion. And the sound of the long vowels in "free" subtly suggests a scream of terror.
Now about the bird.
The first line conjures up images from the LOR trilogy that show the nobility and power of the eagle.
I read your author notes with interest since I'd never heard of the myth of souls soaring to heaven on eagle's wings.
It's a wonderfully creative take on the prompt guidelines. Perhaps it could be judged to be more about the fate of the wicked than about the magnificent eagle. It's a question of interpretation.
Best of luck.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
Comment from reconciled
wish I had a six.....this is the best 5-7-5 I've read for some time....yes what of them...."vengeance is mine sayeth the Lord"....will confirmation be seen in my own life time...restoring faith lost in swamps of iniquity handmade by "imps" of satan. Old testament burns within until its quenching. alright....shwww...how are ya...? who are you...? love Michael
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wish I had a six.....this is the best 5-7-5 I've read for some time....yes what of them...."vengeance is mine sayeth the Lord"....will confirmation be seen in my own life time...restoring faith lost in swamps of iniquity handmade by "imps" of satan. Old testament burns within until its quenching. alright....shwww...how are ya...? who are you...? love Michael
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, I guess it's all over for me. Hardly pure and rarely decent, I'd fall like an iron weight in a vacuum.
Great, thought provoking writing, however. I loved the contemporary composition and presentation of this.
Nicely done.
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Well, I guess it's all over for me. Hardly pure and rarely decent, I'd fall like an iron weight in a vacuum.
Great, thought provoking writing, however. I loved the contemporary composition and presentation of this.
Nicely done.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
Comment from rouskin
Very interesting point of view that could be interpreted in so many ways Strong contest entry I wish you the best of luck in the contest
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Very interesting point of view that could be interpreted in so many ways Strong contest entry I wish you the best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014