Expressing Myself
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "A Strange Comfort"Writing my way out of depression / mental illness
11 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
You have followed the rules for this new form stated in the author notes well
I really like the characterization of a cemetery as a garden of white headstones
green grass/groomed/garden/grief - good alliterative grouping
haunting expression of soulful emotion in a stunning setting
Brooke
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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You have followed the rules for this new form stated in the author notes well
I really like the characterization of a cemetery as a garden of white headstones
green grass/groomed/garden/grief - good alliterative grouping
haunting expression of soulful emotion in a stunning setting
Brooke
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much Brooke, for your kindness and encouragement!
Comment from zanya
An interesting reflection in this Codary - we are forever reminded of our 'destiny' as Humans but never more so than when we pause to reflect on a cemetery
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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An interesting reflection in this Codary - we are forever reminded of our 'destiny' as Humans but never more so than when we pause to reflect on a cemetery
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much zanya for your kind and encouraging review!
Comment from OLA THOMAS
This is a fine poetic form called Codary. You chose a deep theme that gives you adequate room to manoeuvre your thoughts for a good final delivery. Well done
ola thomas
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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This is a fine poetic form called Codary. You chose a deep theme that gives you adequate room to manoeuvre your thoughts for a good final delivery. Well done
ola thomas
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much ola Thomas, for this kind and encouraging review!
Comment from gazzagodbod
wow that is a tidy cemetry nice to see and i thought your pice was excellent well done my friend and thank you for sharing xxgazzagodbodxx
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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wow that is a tidy cemetry nice to see and i thought your pice was excellent well done my friend and thank you for sharing xxgazzagodbodxx
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Thank you gazzagodbod, for this kind and encouraging review!!
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi playinaround,
Nicely told story in this format, which doesn't look as if it's so easy to do. Complimentary photo is a nice touch to the overall work.
Very well put together. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Hi playinaround,
Nicely told story in this format, which doesn't look as if it's so easy to do. Complimentary photo is a nice touch to the overall work.
Very well put together. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Thank you Jax, for your kind and encouraging review!!
Comment from Majormajormajormajor
Well written - opened a can of worms (not funny). Seriously, though I got 5-7-5's spinning but I can't post them b/c I maxed out today. Isn't it strange that a bald patch in the park, or a puddle in the outfield, we tolerate unthinkingly as the marks on the earth of life being lived. But we would see the se lapse I'm landscaping as obscene if it was in a current graveyard. Those places which cause us to avert our gaze as your poem says every day. Like our guilt at wanting nothing to do with the physical remains of out former remains compel a higher expectation from their wards while so we can comfortably forget.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
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Well written - opened a can of worms (not funny). Seriously, though I got 5-7-5's spinning but I can't post them b/c I maxed out today. Isn't it strange that a bald patch in the park, or a puddle in the outfield, we tolerate unthinkingly as the marks on the earth of life being lived. But we would see the se lapse I'm landscaping as obscene if it was in a current graveyard. Those places which cause us to avert our gaze as your poem says every day. Like our guilt at wanting nothing to do with the physical remains of out former remains compel a higher expectation from their wards while so we can comfortably forget.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
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Wow, Major, I am humbled by your rating and your words. You are a deep thinker and I always enjoy your work too. Thank you so much for this highly insightful and encouraging review! J
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Apparently I was deep thinking instead of proof reading when writing the review. But I hope that underscores the work's immediate impact as proof that there was not a stage managed review. Good stuff
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Thanks Major..
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I love the poem. We are never alone when in a grave yard. There is grief coming from every stone. Strangers leave trails of their grief behind. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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I love the picture. I love the poem. We are never alone when in a grave yard. There is grief coming from every stone. Strangers leave trails of their grief behind. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Thank you nelliesellie, for such a kind and encouraging review and for the wonderful six stars! I am honored!
Comment from ClarkLady
I like the colors of this poem: the green, the white. I was a little confused by "Surrounded by a world of grief". The stone was surrounded or the story? That line was a little too ambiguous for me.
I love the imagery of this poem, but I also thought the last line could have been (2) lines. Overall though, nice work here, and a strong feeling of not being alone.
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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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I like the colors of this poem: the green, the white. I was a little confused by "Surrounded by a world of grief". The stone was surrounded or the story? That line was a little too ambiguous for me.
I love the imagery of this poem, but I also thought the last line could have been (2) lines. Overall though, nice work here, and a strong feeling of not being alone.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Thank you ClarkLady!
Comment from judester
Great codary. I like this style. Your poem creates a very clear image of the setting and mood.The color and illustation you chose were perfect. The only thing I would say, is not to use green twice. Bravo, Judester
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Great codary. I like this style. Your poem creates a very clear image of the setting and mood.The color and illustation you chose were perfect. The only thing I would say, is not to use green twice. Bravo, Judester
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Thank you Judester, for your kind and encouraging review!
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this codary poem , excellent imagery and emotion presented in your words. I liked the second couplet the best--each had their own story. good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this codary poem , excellent imagery and emotion presented in your words. I liked the second couplet the best--each had their own story. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Thank you sweetwoodjax, for your kind review and I am honored by the six stars!