Writing Prompt Entries 2014
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Cherry Blossom In Your Hair"The clue is in the title!
11 total reviews
Comment from juliaSjames
A delightful triolet.
The carefree nature of the write resonates with me. Yesterday I went blossom viewing in DC with friends from out of town. Still a little early - most trees are in bud, so I'll have to return.
The children were running around, filled with the joy of a beautiful spring day.
Your poem captures the spirit of the season.
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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A delightful triolet.
The carefree nature of the write resonates with me. Yesterday I went blossom viewing in DC with friends from out of town. Still a little early - most trees are in bud, so I'll have to return.
The children were running around, filled with the joy of a beautiful spring day.
Your poem captures the spirit of the season.
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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Hi Julia, thank you so much for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both and hope you enjoy your 2nd viewing of the blossom! Kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment from Leineco
Thank you so much for join my contest prompt :-)
Everyone did a great job, and I am thrilled with the diverse
ways everyone approached the topic.
I love this vision of a typical high-spirited little girl
dancing through spring - reveling in her youthful
innocence :-)
Great/fun write :-)
Good adherence to the form too!
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much for join my contest prompt :-)
Everyone did a great job, and I am thrilled with the diverse
ways everyone approached the topic.
I love this vision of a typical high-spirited little girl
dancing through spring - reveling in her youthful
innocence :-)
Great/fun write :-)
Good adherence to the form too!
Comment Written 07-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014
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Hi Lorraine, thank you for your lovely feedback and for sponsoring such a great prompt. Kindest regards as always, debs :)
Comment from healfromwithin
cute, carefree, and light; simple and enjoyable
fun images of almost "hippie days" were brought to my mind
the contest guidelines were met, with a fun attitude.
Good luck on the voting.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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cute, carefree, and light; simple and enjoyable
fun images of almost "hippie days" were brought to my mind
the contest guidelines were met, with a fun attitude.
Good luck on the voting.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards...:)
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
you have vivid images to allow the reader to see and feel the carefree nature to live life as one pleases while there is cherry blossom in ones hair
good enjambment to allow free flow
your rhyme scheme works well
good alliteration in
living, life
grubby, glasses, grass
living, life
running, round
flows well easy read
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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good luck in the contest
you have vivid images to allow the reader to see and feel the carefree nature to live life as one pleases while there is cherry blossom in ones hair
good enjambment to allow free flow
your rhyme scheme works well
good alliteration in
living, life
grubby, glasses, grass
living, life
running, round
flows well easy read
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards...:)
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most welcome..SC
Comment from bard owl
How fun. Cherry blossom time in the life of a child. "living life the way you please" - I found that free spirit take on the contest very appealing. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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How fun. Cherry blossom time in the life of a child. "living life the way you please" - I found that free spirit take on the contest very appealing. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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Hi bard owl, thank you so much for your great feedback, 6star rating and good luck wishes. I truly appreciate it! Kindest regards...:)
Comment from zanya
This is such an endearing reflection on precious childhood time which seems to be growing ever shorter as we hasten to have our darlings grow up- carefree and fun
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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This is such an endearing reflection on precious childhood time which seems to be growing ever shorter as we hasten to have our darlings grow up- carefree and fun
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much zanya for your lovely feedback. Kindest regards...:)
Comment from RodG
I do get a vivid image of the Speaker's daughter in this poem, a girl who is definitely her own person. A triolet is a perfect format for emphasizing this quality.
Good use of G-alliteration to describe her glasses and her knees.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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I do get a vivid image of the Speaker's daughter in this poem, a girl who is definitely her own person. A triolet is a perfect format for emphasizing this quality.
Good use of G-alliteration to describe her glasses and her knees.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much for your great feedback. You sum Katie up perfectly! Kindest regards...:)
Comment from RYME4U
This triolet is well done. It describes an independent and adventurous child. I like the attitude here and the rhyme pattern is well done, Nicely presented,
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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This triolet is well done. It describes an independent and adventurous child. I like the attitude here and the rhyme pattern is well done, Nicely presented,
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much for your lovely feedback. Kindest regards...:)
Comment from mfowler
I like this as you've used the cherry blossom prompt to write about your daughter's free playing spirit. The triolet format works well here. I think that repeated line of 'cherry blossom in her hair' is really memorable and evocative of the child with pink flowers adorning.
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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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I like this as you've used the cherry blossom prompt to write about your daughter's free playing spirit. The triolet format works well here. I think that repeated line of 'cherry blossom in her hair' is really memorable and evocative of the child with pink flowers adorning.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much for your lovely feedback. Kindest regards...:)
Comment from Pegcook
The author's portrayal of this little girl is absolutely priceless. The reader instantly can see the child doing all of the things children do, and this reader is filled with nostalgia and longing to be able to enter the child's world and be part of the joy.
The meter and rhymes maintain themselves, making it easy for the reader to relax and take in the joy and beauty of this poem. Thank you for sharing with us this glimpse of your little girl.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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The author's portrayal of this little girl is absolutely priceless. The reader instantly can see the child doing all of the things children do, and this reader is filled with nostalgia and longing to be able to enter the child's world and be part of the joy.
The meter and rhymes maintain themselves, making it easy for the reader to relax and take in the joy and beauty of this poem. Thank you for sharing with us this glimpse of your little girl.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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Hi :) thank you so much for your delightful feedback and 6star rating. I truly appreciate both! Kindest regards...:)