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The clue is in the title!

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Comment from Petriesan
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good luck in the contest

I hate this phrase: because I'm 'just' a wife and mum,
hmm, where is the end og God's creation? I think I have seen it a couple of times, but what is your opinion?


 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014


reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
    Hi Petriesan :) Thanks for your feedback... not sure where the end of God's creation is, but it's as far away from me as possible!
    I hate the phrase you pointed out too... nothing riles me more than to be defined by my role in life. I'm Debra White.... I just happen to be a wife and mother - there's much more to me than that!
    Cheers! Debra :)
Comment from Karen B.
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That would be a wonderful superpower to have, indeed. :) Well-written and great presentation. Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2014


reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
    Thank you Karen for your great feedback and good luck wishes :) Kindest regards, Debra
Comment from Cedar
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I really enjoyed your entry for the contest, it gave me a good laugh. I'm going to let my wife read this one, she'll get a kick out of it. However, I looks like none of us will even come close to the leader and it's written about a spider! Take care. Bill

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2014


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
    LOL Bill! Thanks for your great feedback :) Have a great weekend yourself - the weather is gorgeous here for a change, looks like spring finally sprung! Kindest regards, Debra x
Comment from J. Dark
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I love this, Debs, and think it is a clever twist on a superpower that I can really relate to and would definitely like to have. Women have so many roles and talents and being labelled purely as housewife negates so many of the remarkable roles we deal with every day. Thank you for standing up for the girls! Loved it!

Kindest of regards,

Julie :0)

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2014


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
    Hi Julie, hope you are well lovely lady :)
    Thank you for your great comments, I appreciate it. I recharge my zapper every night it gets so much use!
    Love and hugs, Debra :)
Comment from misscookie
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You captured my attention from the first line to the last.
I can relate to your poem. From being a mother, grandma to a nana.
You think I had so wisdom. I Felt more upset when I had my strokes. Everyone thought I was just plain dumb. ZAP and double Zap!

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2014


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
    LOL! Thank you miss cookie for your great feedback :) Kindest regards as always, Debra
Comment from Lulube
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lol you kill me. lol I've got a few spells on file I could find you one to rid of these a-holes. lol You zap, and I flush. I actually do this, You have to say it out loud and pull your arm down from above your head in a flushing manner - Flush and it really helps to rid of anything, mostly people. lol it's free too!!!

lulube

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2014


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
    Hi Lulube :) If my zapper breaks down, I'll give flushing a go! Thanks for the great feedback :) love Debra x
reply by Lulube on 11-Apr-2014
    welcome anything to make life easier.

    lulube
Comment from Jay Squires
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Yeah! Yeah! No argument from me. No Zap needed. You've discovered the voodoo power of the written word it appears!

Good luck with your writing.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2014


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
    Hi Jay :) Thank you for your great feedback! Kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment from Leineco
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LMAO - that'll teach 'em!

Okay, so I lost my bet - much better than cloning - the ability to
to make vexation disappear (literally)! I think I'll trade my super-power in!

Cute write :-)

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2014


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
    Hi lorraine :) Thanks for your great feedback... a clone of me would be handy though! Cheers, Debs x
Comment from Connie C
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Well, I guess you're telling all those who treat you like you are "just a mom" a thing or two. Good for you! The way I see it: being a mom is the most important "job" a woman ever has. Nice rhyme throughout. My best to you, Debra, in the contest.
Huge Hugs,
Connie

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2014


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
    Hi Connie :) Thank you for your great feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Wish I really did have a zapper lol! Hugs back at you :) Debra x
Comment from Val Crisson
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I'm not sure what contest this is in, but I'm thinking "flash?" None the less, you really got your point across. I've been in the same shoes, as I had a career and chose to stay home with my two children. Suddenly, I was an "idiot" of sorts. I applaud your grit. It's really a choice as so many are.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2014


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
    Hi Val :) Thank you for your great feedback. You get exactly where I'm coming from. I chose to 'give up' my career as an Intelligence Officer so that I could raise my children instead.... that doesn't make me stupid! Tired and hassled yes, but never stupid! I wish I DID have a zapper sometimes! Kindest regards as always :) Debra