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The clue is in the title!

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Comment from Cedar
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This is a very romantic love poem and I thought it should have won. According to howmanysyllables.com "really" has 3 syllables, making your last line 6 syllables. That may have cost you the win, it's still a great entry. Have a nice day my friend. Bill

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2014


reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
    Hi Bill :) Thank you so much for your great comments. I never thought to check my syllables with a website! I will next time - I always thought 'really' had 2 syllables! We live and learn! Have a great day yourself - school holidays here so I have my 3 little monkeys to contend with lol! Luckily its a great day and we have a big back garden :)
    Bye for now, Debra :)
Comment from nelliesellie
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I love the picture. It reminds me of my husband and I. Old and wrinkled but in love for thirty years. Even after death, he is still the handsome red head with the crooked smile. Love is blind .Great work. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2014


reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
    Hi Ellie :) Thank you for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards as always, Debra :) x
Comment from Karen B.
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I love this 5-7-5 and can definitely relate. :) This shows what love should be. Love the picture you've used with it, also. Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2014


reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
    Thank you Karen for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment from juliaSjames
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A delightful write. It would make an excellent anniversary card.

I read your author notes and I want to congratulate you on keeping love alive - requires effort, forgiveness and the ability to laugh together.

Best of luck in the contest. This is one of the poems that took note of the directives to write a love story.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2014


reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
    Hi Julia :) Thank you for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment from Bill Schott
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This five - seven - five reminds me of the type of relationships that we used to take for granted in our society. These long-term marriages were not the stuff of Hollywood, but of the desire to preserve a family's integrity and strength. Nice.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2014


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
    Thank you Bill for your great feedback :) Kindest regards...
Comment from daniela.albu
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A good choice for a happily ever after love story. You managed to express the truth of constant love within the constraints of the 5-7-5 format. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
    Thank you so much for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards... :)
Comment from TAB_that's me
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This is a very sweet 5-7-5 love poem for the prompt. It is written with the perfect syllable count. Good luck to you.
teresa

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014


reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
    Thank you Teresa for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes :) Kindest regards...
Comment from crystal brandon
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hi my name is crystal Brandon.i really liked and loved your poem about love.will you please checkout my love poem on my profile at crystalbrandon/fanstory its called true loves first kiss my other poem is longlost princess of Scotland,.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014


reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
    Hi Crystal, thank you for your feedback. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem so much - you say you 'liked and loved' it! Please can you tell me what improvements you feel are necessary? You graded it 4 stars... this implies that it needs improvement.
    Thank you in anticipation of your reply. :)
Comment from risktaker
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The picture illustrate the love and joy that the couple has for one another. It is very clear that they are happy to be together. I can infer many days of laughter, support, teamwork, and commitment between them. They never gave up on their relationship, and as a result They have a history of many, many, years to celebrate and remember. What a blessing. Great poem. thanks

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014


reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
    Hi risktaker :) Thank you so much for your great feedback. I appreciate it! Kindest regards...:)
reply by risktaker on 12-Apr-2014
    You are welcomed.
Comment from barleygirl
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I love this simple expression of love, which draws a much larger picture of a long-lasting love. What makes your message so interesting is that many people really DO doubt "Happily Ever After", so your example is a shining example for the naysayers. Great job & good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2014


reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
    Hi barleygirl :) Thank you for your great feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards...:)