The Rainbow-(clarity pyramid)
dreaming when a rainbow appears2 total reviews
Comment from Justin Chopin
I loved the fact that you were able to personalize your feelings of melancholy at gazing at what I take is an endless rainy sky. I always like that you juxtaposed that rather dreary emotion with a more optimistic emotion that some day during the week the rain will decimated by the rays of the sun and the rainbow and beauty of spring will be bestowed to you and the rest of humanity all over again. Exceptional job with the poetry it was a pleasure to read.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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I loved the fact that you were able to personalize your feelings of melancholy at gazing at what I take is an endless rainy sky. I always like that you juxtaposed that rather dreary emotion with a more optimistic emotion that some day during the week the rain will decimated by the rays of the sun and the rainbow and beauty of spring will be bestowed to you and the rest of humanity all over again. Exceptional job with the poetry it was a pleasure to read.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Thank you very much
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is an interesting little poem that pictures dreams of a pretty rainbow on a cold winter day. The reason for the 4-star rating is that the form is not followed as stated in the contest criteria:
First line should be in all caps.
You have an extra line (should be a total of 7 lines instead of 8).
Syllable counts are not as required.
Final line should be in quotations marks.
Since form is a big deal in the instructions, it seems important.
I think you have plenty of time to fix the poem. It's such a pretty presentation over all, I hope it ends up doing well. Best wishes, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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This is an interesting little poem that pictures dreams of a pretty rainbow on a cold winter day. The reason for the 4-star rating is that the form is not followed as stated in the contest criteria:
First line should be in all caps.
You have an extra line (should be a total of 7 lines instead of 8).
Syllable counts are not as required.
Final line should be in quotations marks.
Since form is a big deal in the instructions, it seems important.
I think you have plenty of time to fix the poem. It's such a pretty presentation over all, I hope it ends up doing well. Best wishes, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your review
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Hi fixed everything up-for some strange reason I had it in my mind 8 lines were required. Thank you for your review again.