Writing Prompt Entries 2014
Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "Lie"The clue is in the title!
9 total reviews
Comment from suep
You've done an excellent job with your Clarity poem, and this is a great entry. You meet all of the contest requirements. I enjoyed how you based it on the old Fable ... such wisdom and truth to that. Nice internal rhyme in the last line. Great photo choice. Excellent work ... Best wishes in the contest! :)
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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You've done an excellent job with your Clarity poem, and this is a great entry. You meet all of the contest requirements. I enjoyed how you based it on the old Fable ... such wisdom and truth to that. Nice internal rhyme in the last line. Great photo choice. Excellent work ... Best wishes in the contest! :)
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Thank you sue for your great feedback and good luck wishes, I appreciate both! Kindest regards...:)
Comment from Dean Kuch
I used to love Aesop's Fables as a kid growing up. Them, and Mother Goose & Grimm. Your presentation and Clarity poem work in perfect conjunction with each other. You message is clever, concise and well received.
Good work, and best of luck to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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I used to love Aesop's Fables as a kid growing up. Them, and Mother Goose & Grimm. Your presentation and Clarity poem work in perfect conjunction with each other. You message is clever, concise and well received.
Good work, and best of luck to you in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much Dean for your great feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards,,, :)
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You're quite welcome.
Comment from victor 66
I've never written a Clarity Pyramid poem using seven 7 lines. Fascinating format. I think old lessons remembered are always good. It is sincere and expresses an appreciation of the damage of a lie. Good job.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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I've never written a Clarity Pyramid poem using seven 7 lines. Fascinating format. I think old lessons remembered are always good. It is sincere and expresses an appreciation of the damage of a lie. Good job.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your great feedback :) Kindest regards...
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You are most welcome.
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
you have followed the prompt for the contest
your few words allow the reader to see the lie and its meaning
good alliteration in
Shepherd, swears
that, telling, the . truth
this, time
flows well
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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good luck in the contest
you have followed the prompt for the contest
your few words allow the reader to see the lie and its meaning
good alliteration in
Shepherd, swears
that, telling, the . truth
this, time
flows well
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Thank you Smoothiecool for your great feedback and good luck wishes, I appreciate both! Kindest regards...:)
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most welcome...SC
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in excellent syllable count and structure for the Clarity Pyramid
I like the internal rhyme in your closing/quote line
you deliver the moral of this old tale in good poetic form
Brooke
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Your poem is in excellent syllable count and structure for the Clarity Pyramid
I like the internal rhyme in your closing/quote line
you deliver the moral of this old tale in good poetic form
Brooke
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Thank you Brooke for your great feedback :) Kindest regards...
Comment from mbagby23
Our word is our bond. When we kill it with lies we kill the bond and Hurst we want people to have wish us. Always watch what we say. Like the interpitation of the old bed time story.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Our word is our bond. When we kill it with lies we kill the bond and Hurst we want people to have wish us. Always watch what we say. Like the interpitation of the old bed time story.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your great feedback. Kindest regards...:)
Comment from Ben Colder
Better than the lie that broke the dam and everyone drown. Good poem and the photo really enhances the moment. Luck to you in the contest. Shalom.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Better than the lie that broke the dam and everyone drown. Good poem and the photo really enhances the moment. Luck to you in the contest. Shalom.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Thank you Ben for your great feedback :) Kindest regards...
Comment from Tootsie
I remember this story from when I was a child. Haven't heard about it for so long. Well done you said it all in so few words and we can understand it clearly. I must admit sometimes I don't get poetry.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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I remember this story from when I was a child. Haven't heard about it for so long. Well done you said it all in so few words and we can understand it clearly. I must admit sometimes I don't get poetry.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Thank you Tootsie for your great feedback. Sometimes I don't get poetry either! Glad you got this one ;) Kindest regards... x
Comment from Eternal Muse
I never had to write a Clarify Pyramid. It's an interesting style, and you adhered to it well.
Love the picture. Loved your subtle wit which put a smile on my face. Well done.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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I never had to write a Clarify Pyramid. It's an interesting style, and you adhered to it well.
Love the picture. Loved your subtle wit which put a smile on my face. Well done.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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Thank you Yeltel for your great feedback :) Kindest regards...