Short Form Poetry
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Comment from Dean Kuch
A very pertinent, poignantly worded poem for the times which we are living in today. And while I prefer my heart to remain within my ribcage, I would certainly force both of my feet to move in the direction of an abuse victim, if I was aware of it.
Good luck to you in the contest...
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A very pertinent, poignantly worded poem for the times which we are living in today. And while I prefer my heart to remain within my ribcage, I would certainly force both of my feet to move in the direction of an abuse victim, if I was aware of it.
Good luck to you in the contest...
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
Comment from victor 66
I've never written a Clarity Pyramid poem using seven 7 lines. Fascinating format. I can't think of anything worse than a child molester or predator. This poem is very 'sobering'. Good job.
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I've never written a Clarity Pyramid poem using seven 7 lines. Fascinating format. I can't think of anything worse than a child molester or predator. This poem is very 'sobering'. Good job.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
Comment from rouskin
Memorable entry:"some are flesh and blood, some cold clay"
I enjoyed reading it and wish you the best of luck in the contest Blessings, Rouskin
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Memorable entry:"some are flesh and blood, some cold clay"
I enjoyed reading it and wish you the best of luck in the contest Blessings, Rouskin
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
Comment from Debra White
Hi :) This is a great entry to the contest with good adherence to syllable count, structure and capitalisation of the first line. The final line should be in quotations though as per prompt guidelines...
Loved your presentation - excellent message - cleverly rhymed, nice alliteration in cold clay.
Very well written. Good luck in the booth. Kindest regards, Debra :)
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Hi :) This is a great entry to the contest with good adherence to syllable count, structure and capitalisation of the first line. The final line should be in quotations though as per prompt guidelines...
Loved your presentation - excellent message - cleverly rhymed, nice alliteration in cold clay.
Very well written. Good luck in the booth. Kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Wonderful encouraging review. So very appreciated. I forgot completely about the quotes. Thank you so much. I've added them now. I never would have remembered had you not reminded me!!
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You're more than welcome! I wish you all the best in the contest... you're in the lead so far! x
Comment from ProjectBluebook
The image captures the eye and imagination. I especially like the first quatrain of three. I like predators beguiling. Nice job, Mikey. wackydo
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The image captures the eye and imagination. I especially like the first quatrain of three. I like predators beguiling. Nice job, Mikey. wackydo
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
It doesn't get any better than this. What a perfect piece you have written here. I was polite in my contest remarks. You destroyed the competition. Nothing close to this. Well done. Good luck. NG
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It doesn't get any better than this. What a perfect piece you have written here. I was polite in my contest remarks. You destroyed the competition. Nothing close to this. Well done. Good luck. NG
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
Comment from Jackarrie
A well written Clarity Pyramid about the dreadful abuse that is inflicted on mainly women and children.
I enjoyed reading this poem because if its important message.
Well done and good luck in the contest. Mary
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A well written Clarity Pyramid about the dreadful abuse that is inflicted on mainly women and children.
I enjoyed reading this poem because if its important message.
Well done and good luck in the contest. Mary
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
Comment from akulkumol
Heart felt sentiments and emotions flowing in every word of the poem. We expect so much from the surroundings but most of the times we get disheartened. This is called life. Loved reading it and thanks for sharing.
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Heart felt sentiments and emotions flowing in every word of the poem. We expect so much from the surroundings but most of the times we get disheartened. This is called life. Loved reading it and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014