Short Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "haiku (dying whale draws crowd)"A Collection Of Short Form Poetry
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Comment from amada
Congratulations in winning this contest. Your short lines tells so well the sad and dramatic event in the balance of nature. Compelling.
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Congratulations in winning this contest. Your short lines tells so well the sad and dramatic event in the balance of nature. Compelling.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
Comment from adewpearl
Congratulations on your contest win :-)
You paint a vivid and dramatic picture of the beached whale with a compelling melancholic tone
Your message is strong, that even something as depressing as a dying whale has its purpose in the cycle of life because with one less whale we end up with more brine shrimp, the balance of nature restored
Brooke
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Congratulations on your contest win :-)
You paint a vivid and dramatic picture of the beached whale with a compelling melancholic tone
Your message is strong, that even something as depressing as a dying whale has its purpose in the cycle of life because with one less whale we end up with more brine shrimp, the balance of nature restored
Brooke
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
Comment from Dean Kuch
Very good imagery, Mikey, showing how nature works in harmonious balance to preserve the natural order of things. Lions kill and eat other game, spiders feast on the fidgeting flesh of countless quivering insects...nature at her finest.
Well done.
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Very good imagery, Mikey, showing how nature works in harmonious balance to preserve the natural order of things. Lions kill and eat other game, spiders feast on the fidgeting flesh of countless quivering insects...nature at her finest.
Well done.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku stays true to the idea of nature and it covers the instructed syllable count and connects the obvious situation with the less obvious shrimp population as a result.
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This haiku stays true to the idea of nature and it covers the instructed syllable count and connects the obvious situation with the less obvious shrimp population as a result.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Back to the basics, I do believe. I believe whales eat kreel too. I like sea tales. Of course, you have followed all rules. Looks shipshape to me. The mizzen, lugsail is aback sails. "There she blow!" A contender for sure.
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Back to the basics, I do believe. I believe whales eat kreel too. I like sea tales. Of course, you have followed all rules. Looks shipshape to me. The mizzen, lugsail is aback sails. "There she blow!" A contender for sure.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
This is way more like it! Pictures with words. I can see the poor whale brathing his last, a symbol for his kind. Elswhere the food source increases with less whales to eat it. Then your point hits home. The whale dying is humanity. Its death the only hope for earth to once again thrive. It does not get better. Excellent. NG
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This is way more like it! Pictures with words. I can see the poor whale brathing his last, a symbol for his kind. Elswhere the food source increases with less whales to eat it. Then your point hits home. The whale dying is humanity. Its death the only hope for earth to once again thrive. It does not get better. Excellent. NG
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
Comment from Charlene0513
A dying breed it has become while the incessant increase on other sea or ocean crustaceans are in great demand.
It reminds me of a whale they found just recently on the shores of Ontario.
Charlene
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A dying breed it has become while the incessant increase on other sea or ocean crustaceans are in great demand.
It reminds me of a whale they found just recently on the shores of Ontario.
Charlene
Comment Written 03-Jun-2014
Comment from royowen
This is a very good entry in its haiku contest! I like the environmental slat you have in this entry! It's difficult to hit the nail on the head with this poetic form, but this is ok! Well done, blessings, Roy.
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This is a very good entry in its haiku contest! I like the environmental slat you have in this entry! It's difficult to hit the nail on the head with this poetic form, but this is ok! Well done, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2014
Comment from TAB_that's me
great subject matter for the haiku prompt and it follows all of the rules outlined. Good luck to you in the contest.
Teresa
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great subject matter for the haiku prompt and it follows all of the rules outlined. Good luck to you in the contest.
Teresa
Comment Written 03-Jun-2014
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your syllable count spot on
all other guidelines followed
yes as the whale dies the shrimp will multiply as not being eaten
cheers ..Smoothiecool
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good luck in the contest
your syllable count spot on
all other guidelines followed
yes as the whale dies the shrimp will multiply as not being eaten
cheers ..Smoothiecool
Comment Written 03-Jun-2014