The Chosen Muse
Short Story-Contest Entry-Shakespeare's Muse29 total reviews
Comment from pegesusunicorn
I always wondered where our muse had originated, now, thanks to your poem, My question had been answered, Thank you. Now for your poem. You have out done yourself, The muses must have been visiting you as a babe. They did their job well, for now you are an accomplished poet with many awards. Good write. Thank you for allowing me to share reading your words
Peg
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2016
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I always wondered where our muse had originated, now, thanks to your poem, My question had been answered, Thank you. Now for your poem. You have out done yourself, The muses must have been visiting you as a babe. They did their job well, for now you are an accomplished poet with many awards. Good write. Thank you for allowing me to share reading your words
Peg
Comment Written 09-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2016
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Oh my, Peg. Where did you find this? This happens to be one of my favorite little things I wrote way back when. I'm just thrilled you found it and you enjoyed it so much. Thanks so much. mikey
Comment from Jean Lutz
Whatever part of the mind that understands metrical poetry short circuited in mine. Yet I am thinking of attempting a class on this site. So far the muse is fleeing. Congratulations on the win with this one. Well deserved.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2014
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Whatever part of the mind that understands metrical poetry short circuited in mine. Yet I am thinking of attempting a class on this site. So far the muse is fleeing. Congratulations on the win with this one. Well deserved.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2014
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I know exactly what you mean! I have the worst time with meter. They say it just clicks all of a sudden. Once in a while it does with me. Then, it clicks right back off!! Thank you for the kind words. I did like this little story myself. mikey
Comment from rama devi
Enjoyed this one a lot!
Great line: Every time a child is born, The Muses meet.
Love this line: It is the nature of a muse to tickle and cajole.
*But, rules are debatable and open to interpretation.
suggest removing the comma.
Nice simile:
For the Muses, debating and interpretation flowed through their beings as naturally as an invisible breeze through the copse where lovers meet.
Eloquent diction here:
"Ha! Perhaps the rest of you wish to see such a fire consumed by its own indulgence, but I for one fear such a volatile liaison.
I like the concept of gardening as an art. Well played!
NICE: It is all connected. They and we are all part of one thing. No one creates something wholly original.
Nice imagery:
Slide down the moonbeam- water is smiling
Fresh-misted air surrounds you beguiling
Starlight gleams dancing on lashes
Entering swift, awaking with splashes
Love this:
William Shakespeare slept the sweet sleep of the aware. He felt light dancing in his reverie and it brought him comfort. His mind longed to burst forth connecting one star to another. He dreamed of things that made him smile. He pondered the sadness of some dreams, trying to find the solace to soothe his aching heart. He slept the great sleep of potential. He longed to awaken.
Nice closing line too.
An inspired, uplifting write, M! Thanks for sharing. I can see why you're fond of this one.
Warm Smiles, rd
PS Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Enjoyed this one a lot!
Great line: Every time a child is born, The Muses meet.
Love this line: It is the nature of a muse to tickle and cajole.
*But, rules are debatable and open to interpretation.
suggest removing the comma.
Nice simile:
For the Muses, debating and interpretation flowed through their beings as naturally as an invisible breeze through the copse where lovers meet.
Eloquent diction here:
"Ha! Perhaps the rest of you wish to see such a fire consumed by its own indulgence, but I for one fear such a volatile liaison.
I like the concept of gardening as an art. Well played!
NICE: It is all connected. They and we are all part of one thing. No one creates something wholly original.
Nice imagery:
Slide down the moonbeam- water is smiling
Fresh-misted air surrounds you beguiling
Starlight gleams dancing on lashes
Entering swift, awaking with splashes
Love this:
William Shakespeare slept the sweet sleep of the aware. He felt light dancing in his reverie and it brought him comfort. His mind longed to burst forth connecting one star to another. He dreamed of things that made him smile. He pondered the sadness of some dreams, trying to find the solace to soothe his aching heart. He slept the great sleep of potential. He longed to awaken.
Nice closing line too.
An inspired, uplifting write, M! Thanks for sharing. I can see why you're fond of this one.
Warm Smiles, rd
PS Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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I am so pleased you enjoyed this. What a wonderful encouraging and detailed review. Yes, I did like it very much myself! Some excellent entries in my little contest. The writing is the winner for a change. But, I could use some pretend money too!! mikey
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This is a wonderful entry--likely to win! Good luck. Warmly, rd
Comment from Eigle Rull
This piece is very well written, my friend. Your words make it easy to read and understand. The storyline is great. It is excellent, in my opinion.
Always with respect,
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This piece is very well written, my friend. Your words make it easy to read and understand. The storyline is great. It is excellent, in my opinion.
Always with respect,
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
Comment from emrpoems
We speak of the muse sometimes I think too lightly but without a muse no one writes. Those who write will tell you that at the most indiscreet hour it wakes you with a thought and urges you until you jot down the idea or even nags until you write. Those are usually the best writings.
a beautifully penned piece on the muse of Shakespeare.
Wish you the very best in the contest
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We speak of the muse sometimes I think too lightly but without a muse no one writes. Those who write will tell you that at the most indiscreet hour it wakes you with a thought and urges you until you jot down the idea or even nags until you write. Those are usually the best writings.
a beautifully penned piece on the muse of Shakespeare.
Wish you the very best in the contest
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a daunting work to peruse and connect with the prompt. The connection to Shakespeare seems to be a bit tacit, at least to me, in one reading. It is, without doubt, a strong literary example of your power with words and imaging.
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This is a daunting work to peruse and connect with the prompt. The connection to Shakespeare seems to be a bit tacit, at least to me, in one reading. It is, without doubt, a strong literary example of your power with words and imaging.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
Comment from Ekim777
Shakespeare was a most even handed and balanced man. He had his hand on the very pulse of all humanity. Did he not have an uncanny sense of good and evil. I like your interpretation of his muse.
Need we mention the freshness he brought to the English language.
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Shakespeare was a most even handed and balanced man. He had his hand on the very pulse of all humanity. Did he not have an uncanny sense of good and evil. I like your interpretation of his muse.
Need we mention the freshness he brought to the English language.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
Comment from A Matter Of Words
The Chosen Muse is such a beautifully written piece. You can tell when the writer's heart has found a place in the work he/she writes. The sentiments of the day and era Shakespeare lived in provided a fertile ground for his seeds of genius to grow. I wish you the very best with this entry...Stephanie
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The Chosen Muse is such a beautifully written piece. You can tell when the writer's heart has found a place in the work he/she writes. The sentiments of the day and era Shakespeare lived in provided a fertile ground for his seeds of genius to grow. I wish you the very best with this entry...Stephanie
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
Comment from Leineco
Very nicely done :-) It has the feel of a fairy tale - but at the same time a sort of grand master's painting of greek goddesses meeting to make decisions about the fate of favored humans. I could almost feel Lurinda seething, and Fuschia's condescension. And what a powerful ending. . .young infant William, stirring to the call of his muse :-)
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Very nicely done :-) It has the feel of a fairy tale - but at the same time a sort of grand master's painting of greek goddesses meeting to make decisions about the fate of favored humans. I could almost feel Lurinda seething, and Fuschia's condescension. And what a powerful ending. . .young infant William, stirring to the call of his muse :-)
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
Comment from leslief1952
I very much do like it. I love Shakespeare. I remember how excited I was to talk to my youngest son about the writer. It was the first intellectual conversation I remember having with him. It was great.
Also, just curious. Does muse strike you? I have felt muse come in the night, and I had to get up immediately and capture what I was inspired to write. It actually kind of scares me.
One more thing: "She lightly set down by his shoulder and near the ear into which she would whisper as long as he lived." Should be "sat" instead of "set". (I'm sorry. Just thought maybe it was a typo or something and you missed it.)
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I very much do like it. I love Shakespeare. I remember how excited I was to talk to my youngest son about the writer. It was the first intellectual conversation I remember having with him. It was great.
Also, just curious. Does muse strike you? I have felt muse come in the night, and I had to get up immediately and capture what I was inspired to write. It actually kind of scares me.
One more thing: "She lightly set down by his shoulder and near the ear into which she would whisper as long as he lived." Should be "sat" instead of "set". (I'm sorry. Just thought maybe it was a typo or something and you missed it.)
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014