Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "The Elusive butterfly "A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from poetbear
Beautifully written.
Reads and flows well.
Makes you think.
Make sense and is an out of the box write.
Incredibly creative and original.
Well done.
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Beautifully written.
Reads and flows well.
Makes you think.
Make sense and is an out of the box write.
Incredibly creative and original.
Well done.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
Comment from amada
This is a great metaphorical work. It held my attention; very innovative and very imaginative as well, a good thing. My fave line "Elusive butterfly drawn to sugar only to dance at the devil's fire by night..."
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This is a great metaphorical work. It held my attention; very innovative and very imaginative as well, a good thing. My fave line "Elusive butterfly drawn to sugar only to dance at the devil's fire by night..."
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
Comment from thedreampeddler
Every poem I read of yours is excellent. This one is no different. You are a supremely talented poet.
No flaws, anywhere. Fantastic job.
thedreampeddler
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Every poem I read of yours is excellent. This one is no different. You are a supremely talented poet.
No flaws, anywhere. Fantastic job.
thedreampeddler
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
Comment from royowen
It's true that mankind is, to a large degree completely and utterly different to God and its only by renewal that we have any connection, it says tat we are made in the image of God but separated by sin, and even when we're renewed in God, that we can only be slowly moulded by Him to be like Him! Excellently written, well composed, it flows nicely! Well done, blessings, Roy.
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It's true that mankind is, to a large degree completely and utterly different to God and its only by renewal that we have any connection, it says tat we are made in the image of God but separated by sin, and even when we're renewed in God, that we can only be slowly moulded by Him to be like Him! Excellently written, well composed, it flows nicely! Well done, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
Comment from mermaids
I like the list of words in the first line and then the second line states they are foreign to the butterfly's world. Strong images and emotions comes forth. I also like the ending line in which the butterfly finds fresh victims,again an image one does not think of when viewing butterflies. I also like the prose/poetic form of your words.
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I like the list of words in the first line and then the second line states they are foreign to the butterfly's world. Strong images and emotions comes forth. I also like the ending line in which the butterfly finds fresh victims,again an image one does not think of when viewing butterflies. I also like the prose/poetic form of your words.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
Comment from Bill Schott
The identity of the butterfly seems satanic for some reason (the image used). I get the sense that the butterfly is alluring and provides a distraction that is quickly abandoned and leaves the ones who follow its flight far from where they ought to be. Interesting.
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The identity of the butterfly seems satanic for some reason (the image used). I get the sense that the butterfly is alluring and provides a distraction that is quickly abandoned and leaves the ones who follow its flight far from where they ought to be. Interesting.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
Comment from jjstar
Elusive is right...I'm a little confused because I was prepared to read a script with characters, setting, etc. and all the elements of a script.
I say elusive because aside from that I found myself saying, "Yeah, I guess that's right." Not everyone may equate butterflies with beauty as you make your point that the one who flew so high and close to the fire showed another evil side. All in all the visuals and comparisons were well written with bold, vivid language. Just don't understand where the script came in..
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Elusive is right...I'm a little confused because I was prepared to read a script with characters, setting, etc. and all the elements of a script.
I say elusive because aside from that I found myself saying, "Yeah, I guess that's right." Not everyone may equate butterflies with beauty as you make your point that the one who flew so high and close to the fire showed another evil side. All in all the visuals and comparisons were well written with bold, vivid language. Just don't understand where the script came in..
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
Comment from Raphael Montonaro
Interesting poem. The photo fit. Good form and good content.
You obviously know a great deal about writing poetry...good job and keep writing!
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Interesting poem. The photo fit. Good form and good content.
You obviously know a great deal about writing poetry...good job and keep writing!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
Comment from Spitfire
I don't understand why you labeled this is script. No characters, dialogue, or setting among other things. Butterfly seems to be a metaphor hope or perhaps blind faith. Then again, it could be Death.
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I don't understand why you labeled this is script. No characters, dialogue, or setting among other things. Butterfly seems to be a metaphor hope or perhaps blind faith. Then again, it could be Death.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
Comment from Charlene0513
This poem captures the true essence of one's soul. To be caught in sin or despair and only to confront your fears
Metaphoric statement with a twist: Elusive butterfly drawn to sugar only to dance at the devil's fire by night
*I find it hard to see Heaven and Hell categorized in the same statement abounding in grace.{but each to his own}
Charlene
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This poem captures the true essence of one's soul. To be caught in sin or despair and only to confront your fears
Metaphoric statement with a twist: Elusive butterfly drawn to sugar only to dance at the devil's fire by night
*I find it hard to see Heaven and Hell categorized in the same statement abounding in grace.{but each to his own}
Charlene
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014