Writings From the Heart
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Comment from TKField
Well deep, I thought this was fairly deep. A cautionary tale, what? Nicely imagery and good all around angst-fest. This doesn't betray much, but what it does reveal, is deeply unfathomable and brow-knitting, what with the gnashing of teeth and the cold, cold heart, the midnight train to palooka-ville. I coulda been someone, Charlie...I coulda been a contenda, instead of a bum, which is what I am. The end is always near, I remember once I was drunk off my keister in Juarez in la zona rosa when......
Anyway, good bummer poem.
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Well deep, I thought this was fairly deep. A cautionary tale, what? Nicely imagery and good all around angst-fest. This doesn't betray much, but what it does reveal, is deeply unfathomable and brow-knitting, what with the gnashing of teeth and the cold, cold heart, the midnight train to palooka-ville. I coulda been someone, Charlie...I coulda been a contenda, instead of a bum, which is what I am. The end is always near, I remember once I was drunk off my keister in Juarez in la zona rosa when......
Anyway, good bummer poem.
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Comment from thedreampeddler
Great poem. I think that we all have a poem like this. Mine is called 'The First'.
This style of poem is easy to relate to, so it paints a strong picture.
Very well done.
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Great poem. I think that we all have a poem like this. Mine is called 'The First'.
This style of poem is easy to relate to, so it paints a strong picture.
Very well done.
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Comment from giovannimariatommaso
It's a sad state of affairs when love goes south & there is no one there to acknowledge it; in this case, it seems that there was, & that can't be an easy thing. I didn't see any grammatical or spelling errors.
I might have used a period after truth & one after gone & one after loved & a semi-colon after on, dividing the thoughts more definitely & dramatically. The punctuation allows for a definite pounce; an end leading up to the 'gw'. Not necessary though. The 'gw' gives a great effect.
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It's a sad state of affairs when love goes south & there is no one there to acknowledge it; in this case, it seems that there was, & that can't be an easy thing. I didn't see any grammatical or spelling errors.
I might have used a period after truth & one after gone & one after loved & a semi-colon after on, dividing the thoughts more definitely & dramatically. The punctuation allows for a definite pounce; an end leading up to the 'gw'. Not necessary though. The 'gw' gives a great effect.
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Comment from Raphael Montonaro
Hmmmmmmmm....a poem about "faking it", Wow! that was very unusual. Nicely written with good form and good content. Great job!
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Hmmmmmmmm....a poem about "faking it", Wow! that was very unusual. Nicely written with good form and good content. Great job!
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Comment from boxergirl
A truer message never spoken. I know it hurts when love ends, but like Garth Brooke said, "I'm glad we had this dance." Good job! 8-)
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A truer message never spoken. I know it hurts when love ends, but like Garth Brooke said, "I'm glad we had this dance." Good job! 8-)
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Comment from billscott
Who doesn't know this kind of after love effect?
Amazingly powerful in such a short space.
Loved the emotion I was left with...as if to revisit a situation like this in my past again...and heal a little more.
Thank you!
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Who doesn't know this kind of after love effect?
Amazingly powerful in such a short space.
Loved the emotion I was left with...as if to revisit a situation like this in my past again...and heal a little more.
Thank you!
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Comment from mauial
It's best if the changed feelings of love toward someone comes before the bonds of marriage and children. To often today its an excuse to bail on marriage.
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It's best if the changed feelings of love toward someone comes before the bonds of marriage and children. To often today its an excuse to bail on marriage.
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Comment from Muffins
A moving poem which expresses with straight clarity the reality of the end of a relationship. We like to believe this person is the one but growth, circumstances and discover does not always make is so.
The poem is able to transform heartache with great detail and emotion.
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A moving poem which expresses with straight clarity the reality of the end of a relationship. We like to believe this person is the one but growth, circumstances and discover does not always make is so.
The poem is able to transform heartache with great detail and emotion.
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Comment from janxavier
Beautiful written story of meeting and parting. Written in a very short sweet way. Amazin. Can u plz tell me wat gw means?
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Beautiful written story of meeting and parting. Written in a very short sweet way. Amazin. Can u plz tell me wat gw means?
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Comment from Louise Michelle
It really is sad when we stop loving someone, but people have to move on to others sometimes for a variety of reasons. It's best not to be clingy. Hugs, Lou
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It really is sad when we stop loving someone, but people have to move on to others sometimes for a variety of reasons. It's best not to be clingy. Hugs, Lou
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