The Attitude - Part 2
Cynthia continues to struggle with her ego16 total reviews
Comment from Kashif Ali Abbas
This is captivating, interesting and very special style
Cynthia scurried through the crowded hallway and pushed through the double doors to the gym. Seeing her name on the scoreboard panel and the smell of the freshly waxed floor was enough to raise her heartrate and get the adrenaline flowing. Becca met her near the dressing room door. "Coach Hall wants to see you in her office."[[ nice ending too]]
K
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
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This is captivating, interesting and very special style
Cynthia scurried through the crowded hallway and pushed through the double doors to the gym. Seeing her name on the scoreboard panel and the smell of the freshly waxed floor was enough to raise her heartrate and get the adrenaline flowing. Becca met her near the dressing room door. "Coach Hall wants to see you in her office."[[ nice ending too]]
K
Comment Written 15-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much. 8-)
Comment from MIKECON
Good stuff,enjoyed the second piece in this story,cant wait to read the next chapter.Well wtitten and interesting.I have a fear that this story is going down the sad road????Hope not.God Bless take care
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
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Good stuff,enjoyed the second piece in this story,cant wait to read the next chapter.Well wtitten and interesting.I have a fear that this story is going down the sad road????Hope not.God Bless take care
Comment Written 15-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much. Part 3 coming soon.
Comment from Nosha17
This is a well written story, it has all the ingredients, topical sports theme and characters who should be doing better if they only got focussed. The narrative and descriptions were well written and the dialogue was nice and lively. Most enjoyable. Faye
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
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This is a well written story, it has all the ingredients, topical sports theme and characters who should be doing better if they only got focussed. The narrative and descriptions were well written and the dialogue was nice and lively. Most enjoyable. Faye
Comment Written 15-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much Faye. 8')
Comment from Spitfire
A great story, but I'm glad you're breaking it up. More to look forward too. Looks as if Cynthia could be headed for a drug problem. The thought also crossed my mind that maybe she's feels pressure from her dad to match her mother's talent. On tip of this is her alienating friends. Sounds like a great YA read especially. Can't wait to see what Coach says.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2014
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A great story, but I'm glad you're breaking it up. More to look forward too. Looks as if Cynthia could be headed for a drug problem. The thought also crossed my mind that maybe she's feels pressure from her dad to match her mother's talent. On tip of this is her alienating friends. Sounds like a great YA read especially. Can't wait to see what Coach says.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2014
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Thanks, Shari. Yes, I know I enjoy reviewing a story when it's broken up. I'm glad you are enjoying this one and you may be right on the money in your assumptions. :-)
Comment from BlueFlag
no ribbons yet as in the 1st one
but you will get it
very good read as well
worthy of my 5 star review
keep it going
have a good day
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2014
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no ribbons yet as in the 1st one
but you will get it
very good read as well
worthy of my 5 star review
keep it going
have a good day
Comment Written 14-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2014
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Thanks again for reviewing. 8-)
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your welcome boxergirl
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Karen.
This second chapter is great. You've picked up well from where you left off. Your characters and dialogue make it easy to visualize each character. You have really portrayed teen behaviour so well, including the attitude and even sadly, sneaking a parent's prescription. Great ending, leaving the reader hungry for more.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Hi, Karen.
This second chapter is great. You've picked up well from where you left off. Your characters and dialogue make it easy to visualize each character. You have really portrayed teen behaviour so well, including the attitude and even sadly, sneaking a parent's prescription. Great ending, leaving the reader hungry for more.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Thanks my friend for the encouraging review. 8-)
Comment from jmdg1954
"Coach Hall wants to see you in her office." Whoa... That's not fair to leave us hanging like that. This can go any number of ways.
Nicely written capturing the mood of the girls and bringing in those damn prescription drugs young ones take that don't belong to them. A serious issue in today's society.
Well done, BG, John
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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"Coach Hall wants to see you in her office." Whoa... That's not fair to leave us hanging like that. This can go any number of ways.
Nicely written capturing the mood of the girls and bringing in those damn prescription drugs young ones take that don't belong to them. A serious issue in today's society.
Well done, BG, John
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Thanks John. I will try not to leave you hanging too long. 8-)
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About 40 years ago I could hang from the rim when I was able to dunk. I think I can still touch the net... Haha
Comment from James Dooney
wow. You have really opened my eyes to this. What I sense here is a young lady that is trying to protect herself so much that she is shunning those she needs help from. I like how you have described that in this story. great job here.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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wow. You have really opened my eyes to this. What I sense here is a young lady that is trying to protect herself so much that she is shunning those she needs help from. I like how you have described that in this story. great job here.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, James.
Comment from adewpearl
typo - elgible to play
You get into her innermost thoughts and feelings effectively as her nerves get the best of her and her unhappiness with her coach and friends causes her to lash out
excellent dialogue
Brooke
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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typo - elgible to play
You get into her innermost thoughts and feelings effectively as her nerves get the best of her and her unhappiness with her coach and friends causes her to lash out
excellent dialogue
Brooke
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, Brooke. 8-)
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
I like the fact that you are breaking it up AND where you break it is very well done from a reader's perspective. I may be wrong, but self-absorption and the quest for fame never provides true happiness - slumping indicates she knows that too. Well written and nicely done. Thank you so much for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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I like the fact that you are breaking it up AND where you break it is very well done from a reader's perspective. I may be wrong, but self-absorption and the quest for fame never provides true happiness - slumping indicates she knows that too. Well written and nicely done. Thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much. I appreciate you reviewing my story.8-)