A Picture's Worth a Thousand Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "My Ceremony"A compilation of pictapoems from my portfolio
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Comment from paulah60
Suicide personified? The ugly voice of hopelessness, indeed 'a vile manner of creature' that resides in the deepest, darkest reaches of the human psyche. It's perhaps THE most painful of all human emotions, but one that we'd all do well to grant an audience to (challenging as that is) so that it doesn't have governance over us, and so that we might uncover REALISTIC hope, instead of clinging to the fairy tale hope that society seduces us with.
And what better way to depict this ugliness than in a horror poem; and what better person to address it than the ghoul-meister himself, and I mean that in the nicest way, Dean (though I did have to mute the music. There's only so much my sensibilities can take LOL!). Anyway, this is what I took from this well-written piece. Now I can turn the volume on my comp back up, and get off this page!
Cheers
Paula
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Suicide personified? The ugly voice of hopelessness, indeed 'a vile manner of creature' that resides in the deepest, darkest reaches of the human psyche. It's perhaps THE most painful of all human emotions, but one that we'd all do well to grant an audience to (challenging as that is) so that it doesn't have governance over us, and so that we might uncover REALISTIC hope, instead of clinging to the fairy tale hope that society seduces us with.
And what better way to depict this ugliness than in a horror poem; and what better person to address it than the ghoul-meister himself, and I mean that in the nicest way, Dean (though I did have to mute the music. There's only so much my sensibilities can take LOL!). Anyway, this is what I took from this well-written piece. Now I can turn the volume on my comp back up, and get off this page!
Cheers
Paula
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
Comment from Heidixoxo
Wow....this was an amazing read my friend!! I wish I had six stars left. This deserves it for sure!! Best of luck in the upcoming contest. This is going to be a hit. Thank you for sharing with us all....xoxo
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Wow....this was an amazing read my friend!! I wish I had six stars left. This deserves it for sure!! Best of luck in the upcoming contest. This is going to be a hit. Thank you for sharing with us all....xoxo
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
Comment from visionary1234
Wow, you REALLY let it all hang out here, Dean. This prompt is right up your alley and I doubt anyone will come close to your top class ikkiness! I think you need an 'e' on the end of 'betroth' though? I'm sure you'll sweep the pool with this blockbuster.
:)Sharyn
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Wow, you REALLY let it all hang out here, Dean. This prompt is right up your alley and I doubt anyone will come close to your top class ikkiness! I think you need an 'e' on the end of 'betroth' though? I'm sure you'll sweep the pool with this blockbuster.
:)Sharyn
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from Rainbowsofhappiness
Wow what an intense resonating piece of horror poetry and the music makes it even creepier! The photo included and the strongly worded stanzas create intense images for the reader of the glistening blood and the end did offer a bit of a surprise twist as I thought it would have been a murder poem when in fact it discussed suicide. Well done in creating a imagery laden piece of literature that chills to the bone! The flow of the stanzas was excellent as a result of the rhythmic rhyming pattern of aabb that is maintained throughout the piece. I loved the incorporation of old English in the use of words such as "T'was and tho" since they aren't seen very often in poems nowadays. I only wish I hadn't read this before bed! I think the poet has hit their mark when it comes to this contest as this music, image and scary dialogue have totally unsettled me! Great use of dialogue in this poem as well! The stanzas transition seamlessly from one to the next increasing in intensity and build up to the final line that really reverberates in the mind of the reader. Now I need to go read some cute happy poem to make me be able to sleep! :)
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Wow what an intense resonating piece of horror poetry and the music makes it even creepier! The photo included and the strongly worded stanzas create intense images for the reader of the glistening blood and the end did offer a bit of a surprise twist as I thought it would have been a murder poem when in fact it discussed suicide. Well done in creating a imagery laden piece of literature that chills to the bone! The flow of the stanzas was excellent as a result of the rhythmic rhyming pattern of aabb that is maintained throughout the piece. I loved the incorporation of old English in the use of words such as "T'was and tho" since they aren't seen very often in poems nowadays. I only wish I hadn't read this before bed! I think the poet has hit their mark when it comes to this contest as this music, image and scary dialogue have totally unsettled me! Great use of dialogue in this poem as well! The stanzas transition seamlessly from one to the next increasing in intensity and build up to the final line that really reverberates in the mind of the reader. Now I need to go read some cute happy poem to make me be able to sleep! :)
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from Karen B.
Dean, Wow, that ending snuck up on me. "I am the peacefulness that lied" is too often how a depressed person sees self-inflicted death. Very well done, as always, with the perfect artwork to go with it.
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Dean, Wow, that ending snuck up on me. "I am the peacefulness that lied" is too often how a depressed person sees self-inflicted death. Very well done, as always, with the perfect artwork to go with it.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from write hand blue
Here you are again Dean, doing what you do best. Horror!
I like the direct wording this is well written and overlaid on a suitable picture.
Nice to see this experimental work, pushing the boundaries, and most important of all accepted.
:) mel.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Here you are again Dean, doing what you do best. Horror!
I like the direct wording this is well written and overlaid on a suitable picture.
Nice to see this experimental work, pushing the boundaries, and most important of all accepted.
:) mel.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Thanks, mel, and that's me, alright. A real boundary pusher, LOL! I really appreciate your opinion and kind comments.
Comment from Genya
This poem really un nerved me. It brought out such thought provoking moments as I read it. Excellent words. The poem had a very deep meaning and was very sad and painful. Excellent picture for this horror poem as well. The last line really brought home the full message of this work. Genya
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This poem really un nerved me. It brought out such thought provoking moments as I read it. Excellent words. The poem had a very deep meaning and was very sad and painful. Excellent picture for this horror poem as well. The last line really brought home the full message of this work. Genya
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from ravenblack
Excellent personification of suicide. You kept me guessing until the end, really the only clue the grounding line, "...pools upon the tile" as I began to see death by razor in the bathroom. Having been around suicide (I lost a friend and an uncle) I do have difficulty with seeing it as an evil, diabolical act...it is an act of desperation. I do not condone suicide, but do not believe that a loving creator would compound the pain that drove a person to suicide by condemning them to eternal pain. As for the picture ( addressing your profile thought)- your words do not rely on the picture and would be just as powerful on their own. It is a balancing act. When words cannot be divorced from the picture- that is where the problem comes in. And it is not a problem here. The pic kept me thinking Lilith...which really gave your final word a deeper impact.
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Excellent personification of suicide. You kept me guessing until the end, really the only clue the grounding line, "...pools upon the tile" as I began to see death by razor in the bathroom. Having been around suicide (I lost a friend and an uncle) I do have difficulty with seeing it as an evil, diabolical act...it is an act of desperation. I do not condone suicide, but do not believe that a loving creator would compound the pain that drove a person to suicide by condemning them to eternal pain. As for the picture ( addressing your profile thought)- your words do not rely on the picture and would be just as powerful on their own. It is a balancing act. When words cannot be divorced from the picture- that is where the problem comes in. And it is not a problem here. The pic kept me thinking Lilith...which really gave your final word a deeper impact.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from Kingsrookviii
Your command of language with feeling is outstanding. This is a great work and hits home with me. A friend of mine committed suicide a few weeks ago. We were all drinking beer, having fun and two days later .... ?
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Your command of language with feeling is outstanding. This is a great work and hits home with me. A friend of mine committed suicide a few weeks ago. We were all drinking beer, having fun and two days later .... ?
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from pipersfancy
Ok - so I actually DID read this one last night... creepy music kept me up long after I'd turned the lights off. (Thanks...)
On a serious note, I think this is truly horrific and works that way because of how close it hits home for most of us (all of us). The truth is, I think, we all know that the greatest danger to ourselves is... ourself.
PF
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Ok - so I actually DID read this one last night... creepy music kept me up long after I'd turned the lights off. (Thanks...)
On a serious note, I think this is truly horrific and works that way because of how close it hits home for most of us (all of us). The truth is, I think, we all know that the greatest danger to ourselves is... ourself.
PF
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014