Bonnie and Turtle Blue
When Children Smile!-Contest Entry37 total reviews
Comment from Susanjohn
Your first children's story needs to be made into a book!!!! THIS IS OUTSTANDING..and i'm NOTsaying this cause you be my friend! :-) I LOVE THIS!!! Kids will love this..it is a winner...go right now and find a publisher and submitt this.. This story has it all giong on...the cute, the sad, the scary...ALL GOING ON...and I would now, because I know hoard children's books...I can't believe I found this today In my wanderings of fanstory older gems...
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Your first children's story needs to be made into a book!!!! THIS IS OUTSTANDING..and i'm NOTsaying this cause you be my friend! :-) I LOVE THIS!!! Kids will love this..it is a winner...go right now and find a publisher and submitt this.. This story has it all giong on...the cute, the sad, the scary...ALL GOING ON...and I would now, because I know hoard children's books...I can't believe I found this today In my wanderings of fanstory older gems...
Comment Written 23-Aug-2018
Comment from writeapoem
What a great first childrens poem. The style, the flow, the images all complimented the story. The friendship for eternity expresses truth, I enjoyed the thrill of the plight of the turtles, their flee to the sea, it was an exciting poem intellectually written.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2016
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What a great first childrens poem. The style, the flow, the images all complimented the story. The friendship for eternity expresses truth, I enjoyed the thrill of the plight of the turtles, their flee to the sea, it was an exciting poem intellectually written.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2016
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Hi. Wow, this goes back aways. Sorry about the pictures, they've all expired it seems. All pictures to illustrate the story, baby turtles, etc. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this. It was so much fun writing it and I WAS surprised that I could write for children and delighted too. Maybe I'll take a look and see if I can add some more permanent artwork and see if it needs an edit here and there now that I've had more practice. Thanks a million. mikey
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Your welcome, the idea of a book might be a good project to pursue
Comment from gypsycaravan
Oh, I am miserable. I have no "sixes" left to award this delightful story poem. The pictures did not distract, only added to the enjoyment. It was written beautifully for all ages to enjoy and I'm always a sucker for child/animal relationships. The underlying "friends" theme along with the theme of "compassion" for the needy was a great combo. Thanks so much for posting this delightful effort.
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Oh, I am miserable. I have no "sixes" left to award this delightful story poem. The pictures did not distract, only added to the enjoyment. It was written beautifully for all ages to enjoy and I'm always a sucker for child/animal relationships. The underlying "friends" theme along with the theme of "compassion" for the needy was a great combo. Thanks so much for posting this delightful effort.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
Comment from Judy Couch
Excellent story in the form of a poem. It rhymes well. I think kids would love it since the good guys win in the end. I enjoyed the pictures. This could be made into a children's book.
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Excellent story in the form of a poem. It rhymes well. I think kids would love it since the good guys win in the end. I enjoyed the pictures. This could be made into a children's book.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
Comment from Green Lake Girl
What a simply delightful tale, Mikey. Love the interspersed pictures. You tell the story through verse very well. Such an amazing ending.
About five years ago this very weekend we witnessed 35 baby snapping turtles emerge from our yard. Their mother buried her eggs there several months prior. We made sure each and every baby turtle made it to the lake or the swamp.
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What a simply delightful tale, Mikey. Love the interspersed pictures. You tell the story through verse very well. Such an amazing ending.
About five years ago this very weekend we witnessed 35 baby snapping turtles emerge from our yard. Their mother buried her eggs there several months prior. We made sure each and every baby turtle made it to the lake or the swamp.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
Comment from Acquired Taste
This is just terrific and I would not think it was a first try. I liked your mix of words and photos - at first I thought it might be too busy, but it really did add to the enjoyment of the story. My wishes for very good luck in this contest. AT=/
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This is just terrific and I would not think it was a first try. I liked your mix of words and photos - at first I thought it might be too busy, but it really did add to the enjoyment of the story. My wishes for very good luck in this contest. AT=/
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
I could flood you with a million words. Awesome!!!!! I love the pictures and the poem. I see why you got an ATB! This is exceptional, in a new league.I really enjoyed this beauty. Great imagination and penned smoothly. Pictures paint a thousand words. Count your doubloon, Mai Ke Er, Mikey
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I could flood you with a million words. Awesome!!!!! I love the pictures and the poem. I see why you got an ATB! This is exceptional, in a new league.I really enjoyed this beauty. Great imagination and penned smoothly. Pictures paint a thousand words. Count your doubloon, Mai Ke Er, Mikey
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
Comment from lancellot
Well, honestly the first part I don't think kids would like, attacking birds at baby turtles won't bring many smiles. You work hard at maintaing the form you want but, it does flow smoothly. And too many photos, some are nice, but the work should paint the picture in the mind.
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Well, honestly the first part I don't think kids would like, attacking birds at baby turtles won't bring many smiles. You work hard at maintaing the form you want but, it does flow smoothly. And too many photos, some are nice, but the work should paint the picture in the mind.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your poem is great and, I am not a kid. It had great flow. I love the pictures intermingled with the words. They are not distracting. I could "feel" the beat although I did not know what it was called. This would make a great children's book including pictures. I see nothing to change. You did a great job. I really would make this into a children's book. I was not expecting this when I chose to read it. However, I am glad I did read it. I like everything about it. Thanks for sharing.
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Your poem is great and, I am not a kid. It had great flow. I love the pictures intermingled with the words. They are not distracting. I could "feel" the beat although I did not know what it was called. This would make a great children's book including pictures. I see nothing to change. You did a great job. I really would make this into a children's book. I was not expecting this when I chose to read it. However, I am glad I did read it. I like everything about it. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
Comment from granny goes viral
Oh my...no more sixes this week. No more sixes. If I had a seven, I give you two. This is so lovely, so well done, the whole thing. I raced through it. Totally surprised where it went. Great job.
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Oh my...no more sixes this week. No more sixes. If I had a seven, I give you two. This is so lovely, so well done, the whole thing. I raced through it. Totally surprised where it went. Great job.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014