Brave Robert
A Cautionary Tale56 total reviews
Comment from michaelcahill
This is heart wrenching. The personal reference really brings it home. This is a personal thing if not directly then indirectly. But, it is always directly for someone and when you take the numbers it becomes an overwhelming amount of grief for a world to bear all the time. That last stanza is heart breaking especially when read while looking at that stone monument. Wow. Great piece. mikey
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
This is heart wrenching. The personal reference really brings it home. This is a personal thing if not directly then indirectly. But, it is always directly for someone and when you take the numbers it becomes an overwhelming amount of grief for a world to bear all the time. That last stanza is heart breaking especially when read while looking at that stone monument. Wow. Great piece. mikey
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Mikey. Glad it found a place in your heart!
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Tony - This is such a heartfelt poem for all soldiers who have served.
My grandfather never spoke of his time either, and I have always had a deep passion for history. Yet still his silence lived on, I was never sure either...though I was a child, I always have wondered about his time and his legacy that seems somewhat lost with him....Loved your poem, well penned, great word choices, strong rhyming throughout it.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
Dear Tony - This is such a heartfelt poem for all soldiers who have served.
My grandfather never spoke of his time either, and I have always had a deep passion for history. Yet still his silence lived on, I was never sure either...though I was a child, I always have wondered about his time and his legacy that seems somewhat lost with him....Loved your poem, well penned, great word choices, strong rhyming throughout it.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Maureen. An overwhelming number of responses have mentioned a parent or grandparent this could relate to. I hadn't expected it to strike such a common chord. So glad that you, too, we're able to relate to it. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
What a great poem. I love everything about it. The story is so sad, yet so true. I see no changes needed. I believe it is the way war changes a person. My father never spoke of his time in war. It must have been horrible. I love history and reading about historical things Thanks for sharing such a personal piece.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
What a great poem. I love everything about it. The story is so sad, yet so true. I see no changes needed. I believe it is the way war changes a person. My father never spoke of his time in war. It must have been horrible. I love history and reading about historical things Thanks for sharing such a personal piece.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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Thanks very much for the empathy you have shown in writing your review, Jannypan. Much appreciated!
Comment from Eric1
Hi Tony, this is a wonderful tribute to the 'Brooding soldier' to your Father and all those men who died in the war to end all wars!. beautifully written with a flow that is so smooth it could slide off the page.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
Hi Tony, this is a wonderful tribute to the 'Brooding soldier' to your Father and all those men who died in the war to end all wars!. beautifully written with a flow that is so smooth it could slide off the page.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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Thanks very much for your review, Eric, and compliments.
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You are so welcome Tony.
Comment from Irish Rain
Totally awesome, from the boy playing a toy war, to the game progressing to real tanks and equipment, to the dry drowning, of one taught not to cry. Most painful, are the tears we never shed...just so beautiful! Blessings...Judy
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
Totally awesome, from the boy playing a toy war, to the game progressing to real tanks and equipment, to the dry drowning, of one taught not to cry. Most painful, are the tears we never shed...just so beautiful! Blessings...Judy
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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What a lovely review, July. Thank you so much for it and for your six star rating.
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Wonderful poem!
Comment from lalajovanoski
What beautiful imagery in this. Great use of calm and peaceful words to show your images. I loved the feeling of a dream like state while absorbing nature around you. Great job on this.! Exquisitely composed. Love, L J
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
What beautiful imagery in this. Great use of calm and peaceful words to show your images. I loved the feeling of a dream like state while absorbing nature around you. Great job on this.! Exquisitely composed. Love, L J
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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Many thanks for your review, LJ
Comment from livelylinda
Tony: salute to the WWWI soldiers, so young, and salute to you for keeping history alive for us all. Great writing as usual. Linda
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
Tony: salute to the WWWI soldiers, so young, and salute to you for keeping history alive for us all. Great writing as usual. Linda
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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Many thanks, Linda.
Comment from Tegan1311
This is a very well written poem. Your words flow well and your descriptions are easy to understand and visual. The emotion in this is wonderful. Really well done.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
This is a very well written poem. Your words flow well and your descriptions are easy to understand and visual. The emotion in this is wonderful. Really well done.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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Many thanks, Tegan
Comment from Loren (7)
Simply beautiful and hauntingly true. We think we do so much good by those words, buck up, be brave, but the aftermath is too often summed up in your closing line. Loren
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
Simply beautiful and hauntingly true. We think we do so much good by those words, buck up, be brave, but the aftermath is too often summed up in your closing line. Loren
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much for this lovely six-star review, Loren.
Comment from acerisestory
I like your story, Tony, with an impactful about the need for boys to be brave and hold back those tears.
Your poem is a wonderful read with a nice flow. You've made good use of alliteration and enjambment. I like the first line with its repetition:
Such tears of laughter tear of joy
Thank you for sharing a well written poem, Tony. Alana
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
I like your story, Tony, with an impactful about the need for boys to be brave and hold back those tears.
Your poem is a wonderful read with a nice flow. You've made good use of alliteration and enjambment. I like the first line with its repetition:
Such tears of laughter tear of joy
Thank you for sharing a well written poem, Tony. Alana
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Many thanks, Alana. I appreciate your kind review!
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You are welcome, Tony! Alana