Writings From the Heart
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Comment from Jay Squires
This is one helluva poem, deepwater. And you couldn't have picked a better photo to depict the desolation.
behind the wire and trenches they lay. [You are using the present tense here, and should use "lie" instead of "lay" (past tense). Don't suppose you could use "stay" or "decay"?
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This is one helluva poem, deepwater. And you couldn't have picked a better photo to depict the desolation.
behind the wire and trenches they lay. [You are using the present tense here, and should use "lie" instead of "lay" (past tense). Don't suppose you could use "stay" or "decay"?
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
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thanks Jay
Comment from Shirley B
Dear deepwater, This is a beautiful tribute to the people who served in WW1. The imagery in your poem was just heartbreaking. The artwork you chose was also an excellent choice. I know it was called "The war to end all wars." Isn't it sad that it isn't true? Great job. Thanks for sharing, Shirley
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Dear deepwater, This is a beautiful tribute to the people who served in WW1. The imagery in your poem was just heartbreaking. The artwork you chose was also an excellent choice. I know it was called "The war to end all wars." Isn't it sad that it isn't true? Great job. Thanks for sharing, Shirley
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thank you Shirley for this
Comment from emrpoems
Well my mother was a young child when WW1 raged and she still remembered all the food shortages , loss of homes and the death of the many young soldiers. Told us the stories while she was alive. Very good reminder of the the tragedies of war.
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Well my mother was a young child when WW1 raged and she still remembered all the food shortages , loss of homes and the death of the many young soldiers. Told us the stories while she was alive. Very good reminder of the the tragedies of war.
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thank you
Comment from bilzo
Thank you for this very poignant picture of the sad realities of all wars. When I was a small boy in the 50's I had a great uncle that had fought in the trenches of WWI. His olfactory senses were all but eliminated by the gas attacks and for most of his life he hadn't really tasted or smelled much of anything. Sadly the last smell he could really recall was he smell of death, which haunted him continually some thirty years later.
Excellent. Bill
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Thank you for this very poignant picture of the sad realities of all wars. When I was a small boy in the 50's I had a great uncle that had fought in the trenches of WWI. His olfactory senses were all but eliminated by the gas attacks and for most of his life he hadn't really tasted or smelled much of anything. Sadly the last smell he could really recall was he smell of death, which haunted him continually some thirty years later.
Excellent. Bill
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Thank you for this Bill
Comment from Aplgwest
From what I understand WW1 was a terrible time with hand to hand combat that made for thousands of casualties. Your poem is a fine tribute to those fighters. --Elaine
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From what I understand WW1 was a terrible time with hand to hand combat that made for thousands of casualties. Your poem is a fine tribute to those fighters. --Elaine
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Thank you Elaine
Comment from Maggieluv
Your passage struck me as one of the finest I have read for some time. The words convey the smells and despair and the picture is excellent. What a great introduction to your work. Impressed!
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Your passage struck me as one of the finest I have read for some time. The words convey the smells and despair and the picture is excellent. What a great introduction to your work. Impressed!
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Again thank you for this Maggie
Comment from ravenblack
Good telling of the ravages of World War One, really of any war, the best line ". The beast we have tempered today, but tomorrow a new morn". In other words, more of the same the following day.
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Good telling of the ravages of World War One, really of any war, the best line ". The beast we have tempered today, but tomorrow a new morn". In other words, more of the same the following day.
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Thank you
Comment from livelylinda
deepwater: all wars bring about such sadness and drastically change so many lives forever. Whether it is sitting in the mud or nursing "trenchfoot", burying the dead who a minute ago was your friend, or surviving the war only to go home carrying horrible demons in your head or the family who welcomes home a stranger created by the war. This picture could be of my grandfather, age l6, who survived WWI. History is certainly not all glory! livelylinda
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deepwater: all wars bring about such sadness and drastically change so many lives forever. Whether it is sitting in the mud or nursing "trenchfoot", burying the dead who a minute ago was your friend, or surviving the war only to go home carrying horrible demons in your head or the family who welcomes home a stranger created by the war. This picture could be of my grandfather, age l6, who survived WWI. History is certainly not all glory! livelylinda
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Thanks again for this Ms Linda
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a short but poignant ode to those young soldiers who died in Yres and who still die in wars today. The scene probably doesn't change much from war to way as to the pile of dead. It is so sad we have to lose so many young men and women to war.
The picture shows strong emotion and lack of hope in the desolation.
Keep writing.
dragonpoet
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This is a short but poignant ode to those young soldiers who died in Yres and who still die in wars today. The scene probably doesn't change much from war to way as to the pile of dead. It is so sad we have to lose so many young men and women to war.
The picture shows strong emotion and lack of hope in the desolation.
Keep writing.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
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Thank you
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You're welcome.
Joan
Comment from gypsycaravan
This entire piece, words and photo are poignant and mesmerizing. I am so glad I read it. War is such a useless event. This is a reminder of all the lost lives because of the criminal minds of some greedy foreign leaders. Thank you so much for posting this.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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This entire piece, words and photo are poignant and mesmerizing. I am so glad I read it. War is such a useless event. This is a reminder of all the lost lives because of the criminal minds of some greedy foreign leaders. Thank you so much for posting this.
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thank you