Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 52 "Soldier response to Dear John."A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from Tonulak
I got a birthday card saying I should go to the clinic and get tested for STD, that's about the worst I can say.
A letter such as this must be crushing for a soldier to get, especially while on active dutyThanks for an interesting write--Ted
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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I got a birthday card saying I should go to the clinic and get tested for STD, that's about the worst I can say.
A letter such as this must be crushing for a soldier to get, especially while on active dutyThanks for an interesting write--Ted
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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thanks Ted
Comment from Fridayauthor
Beautifully written piece with the feeling strongly expressed. One could easily visualize the scenes describe and perhaps catch the hints of negativity...snoring, you got drunk,...
Very strong ending, that makes you wonder...
Nicely done.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Beautifully written piece with the feeling strongly expressed. One could easily visualize the scenes describe and perhaps catch the hints of negativity...snoring, you got drunk,...
Very strong ending, that makes you wonder...
Nicely done.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
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thank you Friday for this
Comment from lauriesummer
I love the imagination of this piece of writing. We have all heard about "Dear John" letters, but this piece takes us a step further, to imagining the soldier's response. I love the language of how he describes their life together. Beautifully worded. If there is anything I would change, it might be working a bit on the wording at the end, but overall, it is a very strong piece.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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I love the imagination of this piece of writing. We have all heard about "Dear John" letters, but this piece takes us a step further, to imagining the soldier's response. I love the language of how he describes their life together. Beautifully worded. If there is anything I would change, it might be working a bit on the wording at the end, but overall, it is a very strong piece.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
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thank you
Comment from Goodauthor
What a beautiful piece of Prose poetry. I wonder how many women think about the pain they cause when they choose this way to tell their husbands that the marriage is over. Your story flows smoothly from line to line, and proper grammar makes the message you are trying to relay come alive in the reader's mind.
This letter might have been the difference between life and death for this soldier. Losing hope, causes living heroes to make mistakes that mean death for them. Good luck.
Linda
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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What a beautiful piece of Prose poetry. I wonder how many women think about the pain they cause when they choose this way to tell their husbands that the marriage is over. Your story flows smoothly from line to line, and proper grammar makes the message you are trying to relay come alive in the reader's mind.
This letter might have been the difference between life and death for this soldier. Losing hope, causes living heroes to make mistakes that mean death for them. Good luck.
Linda
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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thank you Linda for this review and your six
Gary
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You're welcome.
Comment from KC
This is so emotive and a beautiful piece of craftsmanship in a poem. The angst, the sorrow, the lost love in this situation is very well written and explained in poetic form. Deserving of all the plaudits and prizes!
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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This is so emotive and a beautiful piece of craftsmanship in a poem. The angst, the sorrow, the lost love in this situation is very well written and explained in poetic form. Deserving of all the plaudits and prizes!
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
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thank you KC for this and the six
Gary
Comment from pbroussard209
What a sad story, I often feel anger towards women who send dear John letters to men in war Zones. But then again, I wouldn't be here if it wasn't for such a letter sent to my dad, by my mom's next door neighbor. Who promptly felt bad about what she had done and convinced my mom to start writing him. Their story had a happy ending but I know that wasn't the case for many of the men left abandon on the battle Zones.
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What a sad story, I often feel anger towards women who send dear John letters to men in war Zones. But then again, I wouldn't be here if it wasn't for such a letter sent to my dad, by my mom's next door neighbor. Who promptly felt bad about what she had done and convinced my mom to start writing him. Their story had a happy ending but I know that wasn't the case for many of the men left abandon on the battle Zones.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
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thank you for this
Gary
Comment from dragonpoet
This is so sad. It shows the depth of his love and how sometimes absence doesn't make the heart grow fonder. This might make her feel guilty but I don't think that was the odject. I like the metaphorical death that might lead to a physical death in the end.
You write like you know how it feels.
Perfect picture.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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This is so sad. It shows the depth of his love and how sometimes absence doesn't make the heart grow fonder. This might make her feel guilty but I don't think that was the odject. I like the metaphorical death that might lead to a physical death in the end.
You write like you know how it feels.
Perfect picture.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
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Thanks Joan
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Any time, Gary.
Joan
Comment from arnie47
The 180 degree most loves travel these days, but the heartbreak of the ones who travel while the other is away are the most sad. I think you captured this heartbreak as the soldier delivers his counter punch, but it will never deliver the power he would like it to, because it's meant for a heartless woman who has only herself on her mind. Very good.
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The 180 degree most loves travel these days, but the heartbreak of the ones who travel while the other is away are the most sad. I think you captured this heartbreak as the soldier delivers his counter punch, but it will never deliver the power he would like it to, because it's meant for a heartless woman who has only herself on her mind. Very good.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
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Thank you
Comment from Hareem.S
A soldiers life is indeed very difficult. And you have penned down a good narrative/poem about a soldier who had to live without his partners letters for a while. Enjoyed reading it.
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A soldiers life is indeed very difficult. And you have penned down a good narrative/poem about a soldier who had to live without his partners letters for a while. Enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
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Thank you
Comment from Auroraboreal800
Wonderful piece! Love the choice of words, and the deep and strong message. This says it all. I think the format is interesting too and even leaves an impression of longevity, as does a life-time...
Great poem!
:)
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Wonderful piece! Love the choice of words, and the deep and strong message. This says it all. I think the format is interesting too and even leaves an impression of longevity, as does a life-time...
Great poem!
:)
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
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Thank you