Comment from Smoothiecool

Excellent

good luck in the contest

your syllable count spot on

in three lines your few words portray the thunder from the proud clouds

good visual

good rhyme

cheers Smoothiecool

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Everything about your poem is super. I see nothing to change. I love storms as long as I am safe inside. Great job. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

Comment from rrabinow

Excellent

I like the line thunder-claps come from proud. Great use of description. Great rhyme scheme. And the syllable count is on. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014

Thanks for the wonderful review and that you saw the connection between thunder-claps and proud. Appreciate all your comments.
Cheers ... ;o)

Comment from Acquired Taste

Excellent

Interesting point that clouds are proud - on the other hand - being out in a strong thunderstorm will make a believer out of most skeptics. Definitely proud and shows it off with great ability. Best of luck in the contest. AT=/

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

Comment from victor 66

Excellent

I do like the concept of "saying a great deal in a very few words". A thunderstorm reminds us of how fragile we truly are. I find a good storm both exciting and humbling. A nice 1-6-1. Good luck.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

excellent pairing of photo and poem, which is in good 1/6/1 syllable count for this contest
strong rhyming of all three lines
good alliteration in claps come/clouds
excellent personification
and a powerful scene
Brooke

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014

Thanks for the wonderful, detailed review, Brooke. Appreciate you pointing out all the poetic devices used in this very short poem. Glad you liked the scene. Cheers ... ;o) Art

Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens

Excellent

Now that is what short poetry is all about. Loud, and proud clouds, paint a vivid picture in this readers mind. A thunder storm is fast approaching. Well done, good luck
Carolyn

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014

Thanks! Glad you liked it. Appreciate the comments ... ;o)

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

Wonderfully rhymed. Not forced at all. Never thought of clouds as being proud. A good one. Hope you do well on the contest. Thanks for sharing. Les

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014

Thanks, Les. Glad you liked the rhymes. Appreciate the comments ... ;)

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi,

I like the simple black and white photo and formatting - it enhances your poem. Words were chosen carefully, effectively.

Nice presentation. Good luck in the contest.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*-*)

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014

Thanks, Jax - Glad you liked the photo and word choices.
Appreciate all your comments.
Cheers ... ;o)

Comment from CHIGYSISKI

Excellent

NICE IMAGERY. NICE ENTRY FOR THIS PROMPT.GREAT RHYMING BUT I WISH YOU COULD DISPENSE WITH THE 'S' IN CLOUDS.CAN'T SUGGET ANY ALTERNATIVE THOUGH.WELL DONE AND BEST OF LUCK IN THE CONTEST!

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014

THANKS! GLAD YOU LIKED IT. APPRECIATE ALL YOUR COMMENTS.
CHEERS ... ;O)