Writing Prompt Entries 2014
Viewing comments for Chapter 70 "Don't Stop Me Now"The clue is in the title!
30 total reviews
Comment from Jay Leeward
Quite enjoyable, and kudos for snagging not one, but two! of the prompt titles. I fully sympathize with "genes can't be beat" as I'm a fat-bottomed guy who can't say no to chocolate, whether it be cake, candy, or ice cream.
A well done contest entry, and a delight to read.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Quite enjoyable, and kudos for snagging not one, but two! of the prompt titles. I fully sympathize with "genes can't be beat" as I'm a fat-bottomed guy who can't say no to chocolate, whether it be cake, candy, or ice cream.
A well done contest entry, and a delight to read.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Thank you Jay for your great feedback :) Kindest regards, Debra
Comment from S.Yocom
This is a very cute poem, Debra. And its story is oh so true. It is very difficult to lose weight, even though one tries to eat correctly. (I voted for you.)
Sally
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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This is a very cute poem, Debra. And its story is oh so true. It is very difficult to lose weight, even though one tries to eat correctly. (I voted for you.)
Sally
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Hi Sally :) Thank you so much for your lovely feedback and your vote! I truly appreciate both! Kindest regards, Debra
Comment from rrabinow
I enjoyed reading your poem. Great job writing a poem to go along with the title choices. I like the rhyme scheme that you use. I like that you are motivated. Great job. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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I enjoyed reading your poem. Great job writing a poem to go along with the title choices. I like the rhyme scheme that you use. I like that you are motivated. Great job. Best of luck.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you rrabinow for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment from Judy Couch
This is a good poem. It rhymes well. It traces the path that temptation takes from being very resistant to letting people talk you into trying a little bit to finally giving up and just rationalizing away the things you are doing to contribute to the problem. Great job.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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This is a good poem. It rhymes well. It traces the path that temptation takes from being very resistant to letting people talk you into trying a little bit to finally giving up and just rationalizing away the things you are doing to contribute to the problem. Great job.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Hi Judy :) Thank you for your great feedback! Kindest regards, Debra
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Debra:)
All the way to the last line one question crossed my mind,"Who's this fatty think she's fooling." It may be too late to stop her now,
Great contest entry.
Roger Then came the last line of the poem and the truth came out. She creates a good story in a poem, but the last line tells the truth.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Hi Debra:)
All the way to the last line one question crossed my mind,"Who's this fatty think she's fooling." It may be too late to stop her now,
Great contest entry.
Roger Then came the last line of the poem and the truth came out. She creates a good story in a poem, but the last line tells the truth.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you Roger for your great feedback, from Fatty! LOL!
Comment from Jackarrie
an excellent poem you have written with the prompt so many will identify with it. "Don't stop me now"
Great rhyming in aabb style, a great entry into the contest.
good luck
Mary
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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an excellent poem you have written with the prompt so many will identify with it. "Don't stop me now"
Great rhyming in aabb style, a great entry into the contest.
good luck
Mary
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you Mary for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kind regards...:)
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your well chosen words allow the reader to see and feel the effort one has put into losing wait but feel she is a fat bottomed girl
good visual to portray message
good enjambment to allow flow in sentences
good rhyme theme through out couplets not forced
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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good luck in the contest
your well chosen words allow the reader to see and feel the effort one has put into losing wait but feel she is a fat bottomed girl
good visual to portray message
good enjambment to allow flow in sentences
good rhyme theme through out couplets not forced
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you Smoothiecool for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kind regards...:)
Comment from seaglass
This a funny poem with playful rhyme. Gene affect even more than our taste buds but this reveals that other stumbler, that favorite treat. for me it's cookiee.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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This a funny poem with playful rhyme. Gene affect even more than our taste buds but this reveals that other stumbler, that favorite treat. for me it's cookiee.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you seaglass for your great feedback, kindest regards, Debra :) ps I'm partial to a cookie or 6 every now and again too! x
Comment from Erik McGinley
I had a friend for year in the online game lord of the rings and when she quit to look after real life I was quite devasteated.
But we are also friends on facebook and I have watched her over the last few years as she went from couch potato to mere bag of crisps.
Last I saw she had a model like figure and I felt so proud of her.
It's not that media image, it's the self respect!
A woman with self respect expects her husband and kids to have it too.
Nice thought, Debbie :)
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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I had a friend for year in the online game lord of the rings and when she quit to look after real life I was quite devasteated.
But we are also friends on facebook and I have watched her over the last few years as she went from couch potato to mere bag of crisps.
Last I saw she had a model like figure and I felt so proud of her.
It's not that media image, it's the self respect!
A woman with self respect expects her husband and kids to have it too.
Nice thought, Debbie :)
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Cheers Erik :) Can't ever see me having a model-like figure, (its not in my genes!) but I'm trying to tone up and improve my overall fitness - shame I like baking, and eating!
Debbie x
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Tht's how Sin started!
"I can't see me ever losing weight!"
Next thing .. she's a sexy elf and I'm thinking she's awesome!
You can do it!
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Lol!
Comment from Selina Stambi
Oh, how you made me smile, Debra!
Your poem is lighthearted, jaunty, sassy and quite delightful.
Here's to all those fat-bottomed girls - the world wouldn't be the same without them.
Hope the little one is completely well.
Love,
Sonali
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Oh, how you made me smile, Debra!
Your poem is lighthearted, jaunty, sassy and quite delightful.
Here's to all those fat-bottomed girls - the world wouldn't be the same without them.
Hope the little one is completely well.
Love,
Sonali
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Hi Sonali :) Thank you so much for your lovely feedback and for enquiring about Katie :) She is very well thank you and all the molluscum has now cleared up :D
Lots of love, Debra x
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Hurrah! So pleased to hear that! Will check her off my 'list'. :)
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No no, keep her on your list please Sonali! Pray that she stops telling fibs... she makes so much up, I never know if I can believe what she's telling me! Funny now, but not funny if she maintains the habit :( Hugs, Debra x
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I will, dear. Is she a very imaginative child? It could be her creativity playing tricks on her. I knew a little girl who told the tallest stories and she was labeled a liar - it turned out she was just a very imaginative little thing who found the real world a little boring.
I'll keep her on the list - don't worry! Love,
Sonali