Comment from RodG

Excellent

This 3-5-3 describes a child's birthday "blow" perfectly.
That wonderful moment as their eyes stare at the cake and their young minds stir thoughts and wishes around.

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014

Hi Rod :) Thank you so much for your great feedback! Kindest regards...:)

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

Like how you end and start this. As you know, the sound and rhythm add a lot to a poem. Great flow too. Enjoyed immensely. Good luck with the contest. Les

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014

Hi Les :) Thank you for your great feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards...:)

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Happy birthday....I I love this simple little poem...which gives us hope every year......airborne wish...................this is great.....great photo too
Well done
God bless...................

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014

Thank you kiwi jenny for your lovely feedback :) Kindest regards...

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

Love it. In such a small space, so many things are said here. Very nostalgic for someones who's been a kid; oh everyone. We all know about that emotion of antcicpation, and that word delicious is so well placed with the cake coming. And the connection to air is wonderful in 'airborne wish'. A very clever response. Good luck.

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014

Thank you so much for your great feedback :) You got everything out of the 3-5-3 I intended for the reader to get - so I'm really happy! Very much appreciated, kindest regards...:)

Comment from Lovinia

Excellent

Hi Mystery Poet

A clever and original take on the "Air" Poem prompt. I want to go and vote right away .... though I guess not fair to the other entries, so I will view them all. Great presentation. "airborne wish" ... so absolutely "delicious". Your poem reads like a lovely fantasy puff of sweet air. Well done. Good luck in the contest. Warm Regards - Lovinia xoxox

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014

Hi Lovi :) Thank you so much for your wonderful feedback. Really pleased you enjoyed this one - kindest regards as always...:)

reply by Lovinia on 29-Aug-2014

My pleasure person of mystery. :)) Did I say, I could feel that "airborne wish" .... I hope it comes true. :)

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Very nice, mystery poet. A 3-5-3 entry with substance, and one that made perfect sense in a realistic way. Your final line was excellent.

Good luck to you!

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014

Thank you Dean for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards...:)

reply by Dean Kuch on 29-Aug-2014

Your very welcome, Debra.

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Comment from Smoothiecool

Excellent

good luck in the contest

your syllable count spot on

your few words portray the delicious anticipation for the cake as one makes a wish

good visual

cheers smoothiecool

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014

Thank you Smoothiecool for your feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards...:)

reply by Smoothiecool on 29-Aug-2014

most welcome..SC >.Faye

Comment from LateBloomer

Excellent

Hello author, Great 3-5-3 'Air' Poem decorated with a wee bit of senryu humor ... airborne wish which made me smile.
Good format. Great artwork choice. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014

Thank you LateBloomer for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards...:)

Comment from seaglass

Excellent

This is a great choice to respond to this prompt. Breath, a very important example of air. The birthday theme serves well, describing the 'blowing out of BD candles"

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014

Thank you seaglass for your great feedback :) Kindest regards...

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

Short but sweet and fulfilling the air theme nicely in that final line with the much anticipated blowing out of the candles on the birthday cake.

Good luck.

Steve

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014

Thank you Steve for your feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards...:)