On The Horizon-(Gogyoshi)
surfing the last wave6 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I like your picture. It is perfect with your words. The poem has great flow. I would not change anything. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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I like your picture. It is perfect with your words. The poem has great flow. I would not change anything. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Thank you
Comment from Matoshka
I love your picture and the images from your words, as they ride the waves, feel the rush of salt and wind, winding up on the lone beach, beautiful. Blessings and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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I love your picture and the images from your words, as they ride the waves, feel the rush of salt and wind, winding up on the lone beach, beautiful. Blessings and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Thank you
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You are so welcome, Blessings
Comment from kiwisteveh
A pretty word picture of sunset and surfing on a secluded beach. Unfortunately that's all it is - I would hope for some extra nuance or message to go beyond the simple description.
Also (bad news) sunsets should be two words which would push you over the limit for that line....
Steve
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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A pretty word picture of sunset and surfing on a secluded beach. Unfortunately that's all it is - I would hope for some extra nuance or message to go beyond the simple description.
Also (bad news) sunsets should be two words which would push you over the limit for that line....
Steve
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Thank you
Comment from mauial
Just with a few edits you could have made it a lot briefer and still said the same thing. But you did keep it to the prompt requirements.
His image silhouetted
as sun sets
lone surfer catches
last rolling wave
towards now secluded beach
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Just with a few edits you could have made it a lot briefer and still said the same thing. But you did keep it to the prompt requirements.
His image silhouetted
as sun sets
lone surfer catches
last rolling wave
towards now secluded beach
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Thank you
Comment from OLA THOMAS
A fine complementary backup artwork that is so inviting. Good color scheme used for the presentation of the poem. I like the descriptive nature of your theme, well articulated.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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A fine complementary backup artwork that is so inviting. Good color scheme used for the presentation of the poem. I like the descriptive nature of your theme, well articulated.
ola thomas
Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Thank you
Comment from patcelaw
Good choice of words to write this poetry. It is a good poem for the prompt. Nice work, keep writing and have a good weekend.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Good choice of words to write this poetry. It is a good poem for the prompt. Nice work, keep writing and have a good weekend.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Thank you