Comment from rama devi

Excellent

LOL--This is a fun entry for the contest with a clever rhyme trio. The artowkr and poem both enhance each other well. However, the poem does not maintain the same meaning when considered without the artwork, so that's my critique. otherwise, super good entry! Good message in few words (plus image).

To fix the issue, you might mention tortoise in line two, so that the picture is not mandatory for interpretation.

Lots of Love,
rd

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2014

Hi rama :)
Thank you for your lovely comments and suggestion - always appreciated :)
Kindest regards as always, Debra x

reply by rama devi on 02-Oct-2014

Kindest Regards to you too, dearest Debra! Hugs, rd

Comment from Caressa_08

Excellent

A great pic for what your poem reads...Quite a lot expressed with the requirements. I enjoyed reading your clever entry, Debra.

Caressa

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2014

Thank you Marilyn for your kind comments. I hope all is well with you... love Debra :)

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

fun pairing of photo and poem, which is in excellent 1/6/1 syllable count
strong rhyming of the three lines
amusing humor :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014

Hi Brooke :)
Thank you very much for your positive feedback - really lovely of you to comment for no reward! Kindest regards as always, Debra :) x

Comment from Judy Couch

Excellent

This is funny and cute. The picture is perfect however, you need the picture for the poem to make sense. The syllable count is accurate.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014

Thank you, Judy :) Kind regards, Debra

Comment from gypsycaravan

Excellent

This is a cute and clever 1-6-1. You chose great artwork. All the turtle needed was racing stripes on his shell. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014

Thank you for your great feedback and good luck wishes, I appreciate both! :) Kindest regards as always, Debra

Comment from emrpoems

Excellent

Whoah!
Aren't you supposed to go
slow?!

Excellent syllable count for the prompt 1-6-1
love the choice of topic and the presentation
good luck in te contest

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014

Thank you for your great feedback :) Kindest regards, Debra

Comment from Lovinia

Excellent

Hi Mystery Poet

Love the dry wit inspired by your image. I've had a huge chuckle. Great presentation and an excellent entry for the contest. I wish you the best of luck.
Warm Regards - Lovinia xoxo

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014

Hi Lovi :) Thank you for your great feedback. As always, I'm glad to share a chuckle with you :) Love Debra xx

reply by Lovinia on 24-Sep-2014

Hi Debra


You always provide that chuckle without fail. I love your sense of humour .... at least we can still laugh. :)))

This is hysterical ... and the perfect image to boot!! LOL I'm laughing again just remembering your poem. Take care sweetie ... I hope all is well. Love & hugs - Lovi xoxoxo

Comment from NurseBarb

Excellent

I really like your 1-6-1 entry and especially like all the punctuation you use with the question mark followed by the explanation mark. Attractive presentation and love the words you chose to use to describe the image. To me, the message is more- slow down and enjoy life. Great job.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014

Thank you NurseBarb for your great feedback :) Kindest regards, Debra

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

Very well expressed. I like the way you have presented this and the rhymes are done well.Great choice of artwork. Good job!

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014

Thank you RYME4U for your great feedback :) Kindest regards, Debra

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is a cute write, mystery writer, this made me smile, although I really had to look hard at the picture. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014

Thank you sweetwoodjax for your great feedback :) Kindest regards, Debra