Rebirth
The sound of a new day lapping at the receding night.9 total reviews
Comment from tbacha58
Swallowed
The loneliness
Born of a moonless night
As high-tide slaps morning awake
Rebirth.
This verse is a winner, each word is so well placed to form a deep beautiful subject, called rebirth. The picture projects also the real meaning meant in this verse. Loneliness, then rebirth. Terry
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Swallowed
The loneliness
Born of a moonless night
As high-tide slaps morning awake
Rebirth.
This verse is a winner, each word is so well placed to form a deep beautiful subject, called rebirth. The picture projects also the real meaning meant in this verse. Loneliness, then rebirth. Terry
Comment Written 01-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in excellent syllable count for the cinquain
excellent use of personification as high tide slaps the morning awake :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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Your poem is in excellent syllable count for the cinquain
excellent use of personification as high tide slaps the morning awake :-) Brooke
Comment Written 01-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, mystery writer, I enjoyed reading this one, my fabvorite line--slapped the morning awake. I wish you the best of luck in the contest
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014
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this is an excellent write, mystery writer, I enjoyed reading this one, my fabvorite line--slapped the morning awake. I wish you the best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 29-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014
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Thanks for the kid review.
Comment from mikemagine
A new chapter. All wreckage cleared away. Looking ahead because it's a new day, new opportunities. A man gets out of prison...he's done his time. He now has options...
Fired from one job only to be hired at a better one...
Mike
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014
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A new chapter. All wreckage cleared away. Looking ahead because it's a new day, new opportunities. A man gets out of prison...he's done his time. He now has options...
Fired from one job only to be hired at a better one...
Mike
Comment Written 29-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014
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Thanks for reviewing.
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Surely!!
Comment from Neonewman
Doesn't get any better than the ocean for me, I love the picture as well as the captivating work you poured out for us to read. Good luck in the contest and God Bless!
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014
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Doesn't get any better than the ocean for me, I love the picture as well as the captivating work you poured out for us to read. Good luck in the contest and God Bless!
Comment Written 29-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014
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thanks for reviewing.
Comment from gypsymoth
What thought you must have spent on this excellent piece
of work. The words "swallowed the loneliness" makes the reader sense how much you would long for dawn. The picture
of the light house exemplifies the loneliness. Perfectly done. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsymoth
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014
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What thought you must have spent on this excellent piece
of work. The words "swallowed the loneliness" makes the reader sense how much you would long for dawn. The picture
of the light house exemplifies the loneliness. Perfectly done. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsymoth
Comment Written 29-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014
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Thanks for the great review.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is amazing! You tell such a vivid story in your well chosen words. The imagery is lovely and you meet all of the contest requirements flawlessly making this a very strong contender. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014
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This is amazing! You tell such a vivid story in your well chosen words. The imagery is lovely and you meet all of the contest requirements flawlessly making this a very strong contender. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014
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Thanks for the stellar review.
Comment from LIJ Red
Another form I had not considered. Well, by the notes it seems you have adhered to the prompt. As the words also
have a message I understand-excellent.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014
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Another form I had not considered. Well, by the notes it seems you have adhered to the prompt. As the words also
have a message I understand-excellent.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Good to see the cinquain make a rare appearance in our contests list.
Yours is a good one, unsentimental and using the poerful rebirth motif as a strong concluding line.
Your fourth line in particular is very effective, echoing both the aves slapping on the beach and the slap given to a ne-born to start him breathing.
Good luck.
Steve
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014
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Good to see the cinquain make a rare appearance in our contests list.
Yours is a good one, unsentimental and using the poerful rebirth motif as a strong concluding line.
Your fourth line in particular is very effective, echoing both the aves slapping on the beach and the slap given to a ne-born to start him breathing.
Good luck.
Steve
Comment Written 29-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014
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Thanks for the great review and getting it.