Haiku (Banana Sundae)
contest entry4 total reviews
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I love the picture but the sad thing is is that it never looks like that, which is why it's good that your poem is there because just the description is Yum! Great job and good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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I love the picture but the sad thing is is that it never looks like that, which is why it's good that your poem is there because just the description is Yum! Great job and good luck in the contest
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Thank you
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your syllable count spot on
your title needs to be change so you don't get disqualified
should be haiku (banana sundae)
good visual image to portray message
hope you get this before the committee reads your entry
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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good luck in the contest
your syllable count spot on
your title needs to be change so you don't get disqualified
should be haiku (banana sundae)
good visual image to portray message
hope you get this before the committee reads your entry
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Thank you-I will change it now
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most welcome ..SC
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
You have met the contest requirements nicely BUT the title is not as requested by the sponsor as it should be haiku (banana sundae). You express the tempting deliciousness of the banana split beautifully, but the satori is a little weak as it is more a statement than a revelation. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2014
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You have met the contest requirements nicely BUT the title is not as requested by the sponsor as it should be haiku (banana sundae). You express the tempting deliciousness of the banana split beautifully, but the satori is a little weak as it is more a statement than a revelation. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2014
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Thank you
Comment from rjuselius
"banana sundae
chocolate, ice cream and nuts
scrumptious, fun dessert"
this is a appetite growing delicious treat. we used to eat these always when we were kids. a nice reminder:)
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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"banana sundae
chocolate, ice cream and nuts
scrumptious, fun dessert"
this is a appetite growing delicious treat. we used to eat these always when we were kids. a nice reminder:)
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
Comment Written 16-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Thank you
Comment from Domino 2
Thank goodness I don't have a sweet tooth, as if I did, I'd probably explode, in view of your mouth-watering artwork and words. :-)
Top entry.
Good luck and best wishes, Ray.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Thank goodness I don't have a sweet tooth, as if I did, I'd probably explode, in view of your mouth-watering artwork and words. :-)
Top entry.
Good luck and best wishes, Ray.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Thank you