haiku (ripe red apple)
contest entry - haiku19 total reviews
Comment from giovannimariatommaso
Yes, the old bugger the Apple did put a cinch in the old get-along as a way of equality for everybody w/o prejudice! A good poem, right number of syllables, about fruit, & good luck in contest.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Yes, the old bugger the Apple did put a cinch in the old get-along as a way of equality for everybody w/o prejudice! A good poem, right number of syllables, about fruit, & good luck in contest.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much for such a "fun" review
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Comment from kiwijenny
Eden's demise...did you know the Bible does not specify the fruit ..it might have been a peach plum or pomegranate...but apple has been used down the ages...there is something enticing about a red apple that promises crunch delight and so disappoints when it s mushy...and ...well...our demise
God bless
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Eden's demise...did you know the Bible does not specify the fruit ..it might have been a peach plum or pomegranate...but apple has been used down the ages...there is something enticing about a red apple that promises crunch delight and so disappoints when it s mushy...and ...well...our demise
God bless
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Thank you for the very interesting review
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I won't lie, apples are just okay for me. If I was Eden I would have been fine. I think it's the skin on the apple that turns me off. Great job though and good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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I won't lie, apples are just okay for me. If I was Eden I would have been fine. I think it's the skin on the apple that turns me off. Great job though and good luck in the contest
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Thank you for the review!
Comment from Charlene0513
A good and has useful qualities about them when used properly.
Certainly not to condemn you of sin when enjoying a homemade pie or applesauce.
Charlene
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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A good and has useful qualities about them when used properly.
Certainly not to condemn you of sin when enjoying a homemade pie or applesauce.
Charlene
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Thank you for the review
Comment from ravim
Apple has the seductive charm. Your lines and the picture captured it perfectly. Edens demise is a killer. In three lines you've killed the apple sweet and sour.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Apple has the seductive charm. Your lines and the picture captured it perfectly. Edens demise is a killer. In three lines you've killed the apple sweet and sour.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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I didn't mean to kill the apple, but thank you for the review. LOL
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Well done, but did you mean Eve's demise?
Your syllable count is good, the picture is perfect.
Good luck in the contest.
Carolyn
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2014
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Well done, but did you mean Eve's demise?
Your syllable count is good, the picture is perfect.
Good luck in the contest.
Carolyn
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2014
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No, I meant Eden's, as Eve was just one of the participants. And in the end, The Garden of Eden was gone. At least this is my perception, we can't blame it all on Eve. Where is Adam's responsibility????
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Good explanation.. :-)
Comment from jandeck
The apple, perfect instrument of seduction. Thanks for the timely reminder of our ties to Eden. Perfect picture to complement with the one red apple on the tree.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2014
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The apple, perfect instrument of seduction. Thanks for the timely reminder of our ties to Eden. Perfect picture to complement with the one red apple on the tree.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2014
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Thank you!
Comment from 4hisglory
Yes, I like this poem. The enemy always temps us with something that looks good, but turns out to be detrimental to us.
Wonderful job on this contest. Blessings, LaVonne
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2014
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Yes, I like this poem. The enemy always temps us with something that looks good, but turns out to be detrimental to us.
Wonderful job on this contest. Blessings, LaVonne
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2014
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Thank you!
Comment from acerisestory
Nice fruit haiku! I very much like your satori. . . very clever.
Your accompanying artwork is a perfect enhancement for your words. Good luck! Alana
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2014
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Nice fruit haiku! I very much like your satori. . . very clever.
Your accompanying artwork is a perfect enhancement for your words. Good luck! Alana
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2014
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Thank you!
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
You have met the contest requirements nicely. This is a very creative approach to the apple and you tied it into the theme of temptation beautifully. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2014
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You have met the contest requirements nicely. This is a very creative approach to the apple and you tied it into the theme of temptation beautifully. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2014
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Thank you!