Regrets' Light
Triolet17 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This triolet works well to show that regrets bring light to what is wrong and help you see what to do to fix things to make it right. Regrets and fixing them helps heals souls and makes them less lonely.
Keep writing.
dragonpoet
This triolet works well to show that regrets bring light to what is wrong and help you see what to do to fix things to make it right. Regrets and fixing them helps heals souls and makes them less lonely.
Keep writing.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 28-May-2015
Comment from Helena Frances
A wonderful picture that fits well with your verse.
A somber poem that tells much with few words.
Good flow and rhyme.
"the sense of light'' offers hope, and I choose hope:)
A wonderful picture that fits well with your verse.
A somber poem that tells much with few words.
Good flow and rhyme.
"the sense of light'' offers hope, and I choose hope:)
Comment Written 17-Mar-2015
Comment from Starlight's Edge
Hi, Anupam,
This is a very introspective poem with a very deep meaning.
I liked the chose repetition line and the other line you repeated twice as well.
Regrets instill the sense of light
inside a shadowed, lonely soul. -- strog and powerful lines.
When brumous thoughts eclipse insight,
regrets instill the sense of light -- but these lines are those that won me. Love them. Such an exquisite way to show how sadness and sorrow, regret can interfere with the clarity of your mind and the wish to move forward.
The best of luck :)
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2015
Hi, Anupam,
This is a very introspective poem with a very deep meaning.
I liked the chose repetition line and the other line you repeated twice as well.
Regrets instill the sense of light
inside a shadowed, lonely soul. -- strog and powerful lines.
When brumous thoughts eclipse insight,
regrets instill the sense of light -- but these lines are those that won me. Love them. Such an exquisite way to show how sadness and sorrow, regret can interfere with the clarity of your mind and the wish to move forward.
The best of luck :)
Comment Written 11-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2015
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You've got the message of this one spot-on. :) I strongly believe that regrets bring clarity in our visions. Those lines are my favorite, as well. Thanks for this insightful review and good luck wishes. I appreciate them both. Glad to see you active here. :)
Comment from flamingstar
Hi, Death. This is a remarkable piece, IMO. I learned a new word: brumous! One question occurred to me, though: did you mean to say "vanquish" as opposed to "vanish" in line 5? To ease the vacillations between right and wrong so as to bring more balance into the picture? Just curious...
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2015
Hi, Death. This is a remarkable piece, IMO. I learned a new word: brumous! One question occurred to me, though: did you mean to say "vanquish" as opposed to "vanish" in line 5? To ease the vacillations between right and wrong so as to bring more balance into the picture? Just curious...
Comment Written 10-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2015
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Thanks for reading and reviewing, flamingstar. I appreciate your kind comments. I wanted to use 'vanish' only, though 'vanquish' sounds lovely as well. :) Have a great day!
Regards,
Anupam
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hi Anupam,
At first I thought your title portrayed an oxymoron with "Regrets' Light", but as I absorb the piece, its striking meaning becomes clear. As we are pounded with regrets of past mistakes a light may still appear through the dark bringing hope to a lonely soul...truly insightful!
I loved the S consonance that floated through the piece and was impressed with the smooth flow of your words in this tricky genre.
This looks to be a strong contender for the contest, my friend...my best for its success.
Hope all is well with you, warmly, Bill
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2015
Hi Anupam,
At first I thought your title portrayed an oxymoron with "Regrets' Light", but as I absorb the piece, its striking meaning becomes clear. As we are pounded with regrets of past mistakes a light may still appear through the dark bringing hope to a lonely soul...truly insightful!
I loved the S consonance that floated through the piece and was impressed with the smooth flow of your words in this tricky genre.
This looks to be a strong contender for the contest, my friend...my best for its success.
Hope all is well with you, warmly, Bill
Comment Written 06-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2015
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Hi, Bill.
Thanks for sharing your thoughts and for the generous rating of this piece. So pleased you enjoyed this one. I appreciate your positive comments, my friend. Things are going pretty good, and I wish the same for you. :)
Regards,
Anupam
Comment from Clockwise
This poem is a gem. It's rhythm and flow are spot on. Very thought provoking and a joy to read and re-read. Thanks for sharing!!
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
This poem is a gem. It's rhythm and flow are spot on. Very thought provoking and a joy to read and re-read. Thanks for sharing!!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Hi, Clockwise.
Thanks for sharing your thoughts and the glowing stars. I'm pleased you found it worth re-reading. I appreciate your comments. Have a great day ahead! :)
Regards,
Anupam
Comment from Domino 2
Perfect adherence to the triolet rules.
Unusual pleasant surprise to enjoy the excellent flow, not often incorporated in this form.
Very insightful and poetic write with top repeated dramatic lines.
One of, if not THE, best triolet contest entry I've read.
Good luck and best wishes, Ray
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
Perfect adherence to the triolet rules.
Unusual pleasant surprise to enjoy the excellent flow, not often incorporated in this form.
Very insightful and poetic write with top repeated dramatic lines.
One of, if not THE, best triolet contest entry I've read.
Good luck and best wishes, Ray
Comment Written 06-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Hi, Ray.
Thanks for such a positive and encouraging review. It's been so long...I wish I could spend more time here, but the job keeps me engaged. I'm glad to know enjoyed this so much. I appreciate your kind comments, my friend. Happy New Year! :)
Regards,
Anupam
Comment from Jackarrie
Hi
a great triolet, with thought provoking sentiments and nice metaphors, I also like your repeating line of
Regrets instill the sense of light
inside a shadowed, lonely soul.
There is a sadness to it, but very well written. Mary
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
Hi
a great triolet, with thought provoking sentiments and nice metaphors, I also like your repeating line of
Regrets instill the sense of light
inside a shadowed, lonely soul.
There is a sadness to it, but very well written. Mary
Comment Written 06-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Hi, Mary.
Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts. I appreciate it, as always. Glad you enjoyed this one. Have a great day!
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Mr. Death. That is a very haunting little piece mate. I don't usually read short forms but this one just screamed at me to be read. Loneliness walks through it like a ghost in a graveyard. Good luck in the contest. Cheers and RIP, Fez
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
G'day Mr. Death. That is a very haunting little piece mate. I don't usually read short forms but this one just screamed at me to be read. Loneliness walks through it like a ghost in a graveyard. Good luck in the contest. Cheers and RIP, Fez
Comment Written 06-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Hi, Fez.
Thanks for this positive review. So pleased you could connect to this short piece. I appreciate your sharing of thoughts. Thanks for the good luck wishes, too. Happy New Year! :)
Regards,
Anupam
Comment from Debra White
Hi Anupam :)
Perfect adherence to format - rhyme and meter spot on, making for a smooth read.
Your poetry always makes me think and reflect. It stays with me for ages after reading. For a butterfly brain like me, that is quite something!
Good luck in the contest,
Debs x
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
Hi Anupam :)
Perfect adherence to format - rhyme and meter spot on, making for a smooth read.
Your poetry always makes me think and reflect. It stays with me for ages after reading. For a butterfly brain like me, that is quite something!
Good luck in the contest,
Debs x
Comment Written 06-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Hi, Debs. :)
Thanks for such a lovely compliment, dear friend. I think I sound too old LOL! Actually, I also have a butterfly mind. Just try to write down what I feel and observe. Thanks for this uplifting review. :)
Warm Regards,
Anupam x
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You're always welcome :)