Life, Love, and Other Disasters
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Travel Advisory"A collection of poems on these themes
21 total reviews
Comment from Deborah Marie
Well penned poem for the contest you entered. Good luck... Nice progression, rhythm and flow and photo too... Cleverly used wording. Keep 'em coming, Deb
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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Well penned poem for the contest you entered. Good luck... Nice progression, rhythm and flow and photo too... Cleverly used wording. Keep 'em coming, Deb
Comment Written 13-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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Thanks, Deb!
Steve
Comment from Just2Write
Ahh, the collective They. They are nowhere to be found. They don't exist, and yet, and yet, They do!
I liked your time line of travel from your start to finish.
This gives us much to think about.
Rose.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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Ahh, the collective They. They are nowhere to be found. They don't exist, and yet, and yet, They do!
I liked your time line of travel from your start to finish.
This gives us much to think about.
Rose.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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Thanks, Rose. Interesting to see the different ideas different readers take from this...
Steve
Comment from TAB_that's me
Interesting little free verse giving me something to think about - the ticket of life. Good luck Steve in the contest.
Teresa
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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Interesting little free verse giving me something to think about - the ticket of life. Good luck Steve in the contest.
Teresa
Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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Thanks, Teresa.
Steve
Comment from adewpearl
love the pairing of illustration and poem
excellent use of enjambment
I love the asides
love the imagery - the story line is both intriguing and smile inducing - this is one I will read again to soak in more :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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love the pairing of illustration and poem
excellent use of enjambment
I love the asides
love the imagery - the story line is both intriguing and smile inducing - this is one I will read again to soak in more :-) Brooke
Comment Written 11-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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Don't soak too long - you might start to understand it!
Thanks for reviewing...
Steve
Comment from Spitfire
This day may not be too far away. Imagine traveling to another planet. Great small but important details--short wait for the bathroom, emergency life-jacket and bedpan. Love the casual tone of this in contrast to the horror awaiting at the end of the journey.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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This day may not be too far away. Imagine traveling to another planet. Great small but important details--short wait for the bathroom, emergency life-jacket and bedpan. Love the casual tone of this in contrast to the horror awaiting at the end of the journey.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from krys123
Steve; On thing I did finding your poetry is that there is no round-trip journey to this adventure. So this is intended to be metaphorically written with an I could see where life's journey is only has it is up one has to relieve themselves from all the internal excrement that we take during our lifetime. Usually life is just a one-man trip and no need to have others in your journey and miss you need them or want them. Interesting conception and perception on life or at least that's what I think in a relative manner. Thanks for sharing and posting and may you have a good one and good luck in the contest.
Alex
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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Steve; On thing I did finding your poetry is that there is no round-trip journey to this adventure. So this is intended to be metaphorically written with an I could see where life's journey is only has it is up one has to relieve themselves from all the internal excrement that we take during our lifetime. Usually life is just a one-man trip and no need to have others in your journey and miss you need them or want them. Interesting conception and perception on life or at least that's what I think in a relative manner. Thanks for sharing and posting and may you have a good one and good luck in the contest.
Alex
Comment Written 11-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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You're right, Alex, this is definitely a one-way trip!
Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from amada
Reading your work gave me a feeling of euphoria and movement; like galloping a horse, great! I must say that the lines in parenthesis are very original, such a breath and a smile. Great.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2015
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Reading your work gave me a feeling of euphoria and movement; like galloping a horse, great! I must say that the lines in parenthesis are very original, such a breath and a smile. Great.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2015
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Thanks for the kind words. Free verse is not really my cup of tea, so I am very pleased to hear this got through to you...
Steve
Comment from poetbear
There are so many lyrics that fit this write.
It is original and very clever. Flows well and many will relate to it.
Great visual and very well executed.
I like the feeling and vibe here.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2015
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There are so many lyrics that fit this write.
It is original and very clever. Flows well and many will relate to it.
Great visual and very well executed.
I like the feeling and vibe here.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2015
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Thanks so much for the warm review and the six stars.
Steve
Comment from granny goes viral
I find this very interesting. Interesting is good. Makes me think. What is this really about? Thinking is good. Anything that stops me for a second, and makes me think gets at least a 5. Good one.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2015
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I find this very interesting. Interesting is good. Makes me think. What is this really about? Thinking is good. Anything that stops me for a second, and makes me think gets at least a 5. Good one.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2015
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Thanks, Granny!
Steve
Comment from Adri7enne
Pretty ironic and close enough to the truth to make me uncomfortable. LOL! The bathroom line was long enough to require diapers. I suppose the same will be true at the other end of the line. Sigh! Was it worth the ticket? Good luck in the contest, Steve.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2015
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Pretty ironic and close enough to the truth to make me uncomfortable. LOL! The bathroom line was long enough to require diapers. I suppose the same will be true at the other end of the line. Sigh! Was it worth the ticket? Good luck in the contest, Steve.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2015
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Well the journey better be worth it, because apparently there's not much happening at the destination!
Thanks for stopping in.
Steve