Blaze of Glory
A short baseball story36 total reviews
Comment from patcelaw
It is a funny story and me as a lady should not know about such things, but I had 5 brothers so I know a lot about a lot of things. Had many male teachers. Blessings and good luck in the contest. Patricia
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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It is a funny story and me as a lady should not know about such things, but I had 5 brothers so I know a lot about a lot of things. Had many male teachers. Blessings and good luck in the contest. Patricia
Comment Written 20-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Phew, with 5 brothers you grew up a psmpered princess or extremely tough having to fight for your share...
Thanks for the great review. John
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I grew up one tough coolie as my youngest brother 3 years younger was always picking on me and I learned to fight.
Comment from Cajungirl
Very well=written descriptive story. You have done and exceptional job making your reader feel the story. Ouch, I can only imagine the pain. LOL
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Very well=written descriptive story. You have done and exceptional job making your reader feel the story. Ouch, I can only imagine the pain. LOL
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Whoa... A six star! Thank you. I'm glad that you really enjoyed this.
I sincerely appreciate the reward. John
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I did, tremendously.
Comment from Gloria ....
Love the way you've shown the heat waves emanating from the sun as giggles. That's a lot of fun, John and it's most apropos to seamlessly link withthe title.
I really, really like this haibun type flavoured story and the thwack, grunt is most effective in punctuating the scene.
Great job, my friend.
Gloria
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015
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Love the way you've shown the heat waves emanating from the sun as giggles. That's a lot of fun, John and it's most apropos to seamlessly link withthe title.
I really, really like this haibun type flavoured story and the thwack, grunt is most effective in punctuating the scene.
Great job, my friend.
Gloria
Comment Written 19-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015
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Thank you, Gloria. I sincerely appreciate you stopping over and I'm glad you enjoyed it. John
Comment from Janet Foor
This is hilarious. Thankfully, I will never know the pain involved. A great short story told with vivid imagery.
Each thwack give me the shivers. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015
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This is hilarious. Thankfully, I will never know the pain involved. A great short story told with vivid imagery.
Each thwack give me the shivers. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 19-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015
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Thank you very much, Janet. I appreciate the review, John
Comment from rspoet
Painful story, but very good writing. Seems heredity runs strong in that family. The coach would probably be kicked out the league for abuse today. I like the strong descriptive beginning and the dialogue.
Excellent, for writing.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015
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Painful story, but very good writing. Seems heredity runs strong in that family. The coach would probably be kicked out the league for abuse today. I like the strong descriptive beginning and the dialogue.
Excellent, for writing.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015
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Kicked out and brought up on charges!
Thanks for the review. John
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YTou've got that right.
Comment from thee-name
Excellent story. Seen no mistakes. Keep on writing.
Dog days of summer. August barked humidity and sweltering heat.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
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Excellent story. Seen no mistakes. Keep on writing.
Dog days of summer. August barked humidity and sweltering heat.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
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Thank you for stopping by. John
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thank you!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I bet that hurt! I have no idea how much, thank goodness, we women suffer enough pain! LOL. Loved this one, John, I haven't tried writing one of these. I must look out for them. I thought you used the 'Blaze of Glory' title, to perfection! Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
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I bet that hurt! I have no idea how much, thank goodness, we women suffer enough pain! LOL. Loved this one, John, I haven't tried writing one of these. I must look out for them. I thought you used the 'Blaze of Glory' title, to perfection! Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
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Sandra, trust me, I don't envy you women...
Thanks for reading and commenting.
Always appreciated. John
Comment from Walu Feral
OUCH! G'day John, that would have been so funny if I wasn't an ex Aussie rules football player or if I were a woman LOL. That would take a brave man. Great work mate, cheers Fez
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
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OUCH! G'day John, that would have been so funny if I wasn't an ex Aussie rules football player or if I were a woman LOL. That would take a brave man. Great work mate, cheers Fez
Comment Written 19-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
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Fez, great to hear from you. Thanks for the super review. I appreciate it.
John
Comment from Sonaleeka
Awesome writing.I enjoy every piece of it ..Definitely Enjoyable read ,easy to connect with charters.Keep writing my friend.
God bless!
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
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Awesome writing.I enjoy every piece of it ..Definitely Enjoyable read ,easy to connect with charters.Keep writing my friend.
God bless!
Comment Written 19-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
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Sonaleeka, thank you for a great review. John
Comment from dmt1967
This story was told very well. Although, I was wondering, if the father was the coach who hit his son in the balls with the bat or the balls. Anyway, I liked it. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2015
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This story was told very well. Although, I was wondering, if the father was the coach who hit his son in the balls with the bat or the balls. Anyway, I liked it. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2015
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Thank you dmt. Your reviews are always appreciated.
John