Wanted Dead Or Alive
a story poem about the Old West14 total reviews
Comment from sibhus
Nice piece, I liked all your historical reference that where very accurate. Though I have heard it said that must guys that used two guys didn't last long. Great entry for the contest, and good luck.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2015
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Nice piece, I liked all your historical reference that where very accurate. Though I have heard it said that must guys that used two guys didn't last long. Great entry for the contest, and good luck.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2015
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Thank you for sharing "Wanted" and for your comments. Rod
Comment from Debra White
Hi RodG :)
Thank you for entering the prompt.
You did a great job with the title you chose from the list.
Great rhyme and meter to your poem and well presented - I enjoyed it very much and wish you the best of luck in the voting booth!
Kindest regards, Debra :)
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2015
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Hi RodG :)
Thank you for entering the prompt.
You did a great job with the title you chose from the list.
Great rhyme and meter to your poem and well presented - I enjoyed it very much and wish you the best of luck in the voting booth!
Kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment Written 18-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2015
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Thanks for all the great prompts, Debra. So pleased you enjoyed my "Wanted.". Rod
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You're welcome, Rod :)
Comment from Dean Kuch
Excellent poem here, Rod. It certainly captures not only the essence of the old wild, wild west, but also the state of mind of a gunslinger who could die at any moment.
Wonderfully rhymed with a smooth, even cadence.
All the best to you in the contest. ~Dean
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Excellent poem here, Rod. It certainly captures not only the essence of the old wild, wild west, but also the state of mind of a gunslinger who could die at any moment.
Wonderfully rhymed with a smooth, even cadence.
All the best to you in the contest. ~Dean
Comment Written 17-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Thank you, Dean. I'm delighted you enjoyed my first-person account of what a gunslinger might have felt. And, as always, I appreciate your kind comments. Rod
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The pleasure was all mine, Rod. :)
~Dean
Comment from Cajungirl
Great job! Your excellent poem sounds like something you would read in an old west magazine. A wonderful take on the writing prompt. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Great job! Your excellent poem sounds like something you would read in an old west magazine. A wonderful take on the writing prompt. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Thank you, Cajungirl, for your wonderful review and kind remarks. Indeed, I did model this story after old pulp western stories I collect. Rod
Comment from Nosha17
I used to love to watch the cowboy series on TV, your guy is a real gunslinger, a gun in each hand! I guess, as you wrote in your notes they didn't last long, someone always outshot them. Light-hearted look at the West, well chosen words and rhyming. Most enjoyable, if it weren't so sad! Faye
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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I used to love to watch the cowboy series on TV, your guy is a real gunslinger, a gun in each hand! I guess, as you wrote in your notes they didn't last long, someone always outshot them. Light-hearted look at the West, well chosen words and rhyming. Most enjoyable, if it weren't so sad! Faye
Comment Written 17-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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So pleased there are those out there who remember and enjoyed the TV westerns. Thank you for your very kind comments, Nosha. Rod
Comment from Just2Write
This is an excellent poem, and very believable dialogue from the speaker.
It must have been a tough life living where law and order were hard to find, and often administered by those who were living by the law of the gun as well.
Great story telling in this poem, and a pleasure to read. Rose.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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This is an excellent poem, and very believable dialogue from the speaker.
It must have been a tough life living where law and order were hard to find, and often administered by those who were living by the law of the gun as well.
Great story telling in this poem, and a pleasure to read. Rose.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much for your comments and praise, Rose. Indeed, it was a hard life for most of these gunmen even though many (maybe even most) were cold-blooded killers. This guy was an exception. Rod
Comment from owlslippers
I thought this was really good as it creates a good image and flows very well. There are no breaks or awkward pauses in this poem. However, personally I prefer rhymes as I think it helps with the flow and the affect. But, I did enjoy it.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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I thought this was really good as it creates a good image and flows very well. There are no breaks or awkward pauses in this poem. However, personally I prefer rhymes as I think it helps with the flow and the affect. But, I did enjoy it.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Thank you, owlslippers, very much for sharing my poem and your kind praise. I chose to use the ABCB rhyme pattern rather than couplets because it's more typical of cowboy poetry. Rod
Comment from mommerry
This made me think of a country song in the making. This man was forced to live the life determined by judgmental "others" and die in the way expected for a man feared by others. Good job.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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This made me think of a country song in the making. This man was forced to live the life determined by judgmental "others" and die in the way expected for a man feared by others. Good job.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Hey, have you ever heard Marty Robbins' classic album "Gunfighter Ballads"? I'd love to see someone convert this into a song. Thanks so much for sharing, mommerry, Rod
Comment from Ricky1024
I see alot of ,my western here and my reviwer for my two 'Shed a Tear Fairy Tales and Fables...
"Miss Annie Oakley!"
"Don't call me miss mister or I'll shoot your wiskers off at 1,000 paces!"
"Sorry Annie I was just reviewing this wonderful and well written western piece!" "To say the Least!"
"Pesty Annie!"
Dr. Ricky1024.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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I see alot of ,my western here and my reviwer for my two 'Shed a Tear Fairy Tales and Fables...
"Miss Annie Oakley!"
"Don't call me miss mister or I'll shoot your wiskers off at 1,000 paces!"
"Sorry Annie I was just reviewing this wonderful and well written western piece!" "To say the Least!"
"Pesty Annie!"
Dr. Ricky1024.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Ricky, I certainly want to thank you and MS Oakley for this great review and those 6 fine stars. So glad you both enjoyed the poem. Rod
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Going to give you a 5-star review because of two things I really enjoyed reading, your explanation about the events you wrote about (as I am a history buff and taught High School history in a prior life), most people do not bother to explain this kind of detail, and the efforts of your poem itself. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Going to give you a 5-star review because of two things I really enjoyed reading, your explanation about the events you wrote about (as I am a history buff and taught High School history in a prior life), most people do not bother to explain this kind of detail, and the efforts of your poem itself. Keep writing.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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It's great to hear from another former history teacher who enjoys stories of the Old West. Yes, I have discovered that FS reviewers appreciate the author's notes as much as the work itself. Thanks so much for sharing. Rod