The first time
A childs look at spousal abuse8 total reviews
Comment from Master Philip
I almost wrote a lengthy review of this as it hits rather close to home, for me. However, I thought better of it at the last moment and decided to congratulate you instead.
Good job,
Master Philip
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
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I almost wrote a lengthy review of this as it hits rather close to home, for me. However, I thought better of it at the last moment and decided to congratulate you instead.
Good job,
Master Philip
Comment Written 22-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
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If you ever want to talk about the way this hit close to home Philip, I am here, ok. Thank you so much for the sixer and your friendship.
Always,
Missy
Comment from marylou4
Your story sent chills up my spine. I appreciate that your viewpoint was that of the eight year old child and not an adult in retrospect.
Your words are honest and convey the grim reality of that time. Your inner strength was obvious at that time and it radiates from your works of art today.
Thank you for sharing it with us.
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Your story sent chills up my spine. I appreciate that your viewpoint was that of the eight year old child and not an adult in retrospect.
Your words are honest and convey the grim reality of that time. Your inner strength was obvious at that time and it radiates from your works of art today.
Thank you for sharing it with us.
Comment Written 04-May-2015
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Marylou, thank you for consenting to review this humble piece and for the Exceptional rating!! My story unfortunately is not uncommon :(...Bless you again for your review!!
Always,
Justafan
Missy
Comment from Tatarka2
I'm so very sorry that this happened to you and your family. However, I commend you for making the best possible use of these memories - making art with them, and, with your courageous words, probably encouraging some other little 8-year-old girl, or someone who has suffered similar trauma in their past. So well done. So far, this is my favorite entry in this contest.
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I'm so very sorry that this happened to you and your family. However, I commend you for making the best possible use of these memories - making art with them, and, with your courageous words, probably encouraging some other little 8-year-old girl, or someone who has suffered similar trauma in their past. So well done. So far, this is my favorite entry in this contest.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2015
Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT
My dear Ms Fan..This was a very moving work that describes what you are made from..Strength !! Think it projected what it was supposed to project.. Fear and also why..The why.. Why do they stay? Kids maybe? Humm that situation does not call for a stay it calls for a get away. I do not know how old you are now but perhaps" the times they are a changing" per Mr Dylan.
As far as your writing goes... I do think you will even get better..I suggest again you make as many people your fans as you deem worthy. You will be surprised how many more reviews you will receive.. Keep up this and you will be "A Verbal Ballerina " in no time.. Just had to add that line as it is one I wrote before which you can access on my portfolio..See to get others to review your work you have to be a bit sneaky too hehehehe ...
Tally Ho my dear!!
tk
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My dear Ms Fan..This was a very moving work that describes what you are made from..Strength !! Think it projected what it was supposed to project.. Fear and also why..The why.. Why do they stay? Kids maybe? Humm that situation does not call for a stay it calls for a get away. I do not know how old you are now but perhaps" the times they are a changing" per Mr Dylan.
As far as your writing goes... I do think you will even get better..I suggest again you make as many people your fans as you deem worthy. You will be surprised how many more reviews you will receive.. Keep up this and you will be "A Verbal Ballerina " in no time.. Just had to add that line as it is one I wrote before which you can access on my portfolio..See to get others to review your work you have to be a bit sneaky too hehehehe ...
Tally Ho my dear!!
tk
Comment Written 15-Apr-2015
Comment from danpald
Terrific presence of mind at such a tender age
Courage to confront a beast full of rage
This memory has helped you to be strong in the end
Still the fear of this beast must haunt now and again
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
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Terrific presence of mind at such a tender age
Courage to confront a beast full of rage
This memory has helped you to be strong in the end
Still the fear of this beast must haunt now and again
Comment Written 15-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
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Thank you for such a great review danpald. Yes, there are lasting scars. I have no patients for alcoholics or abuser's of any sort!
Again, Thank you
Always,
Melissa
Comment from K. Lorraine
This is a sad event in your life. My heart feels your pain. I think this sentence needs a little clarification... 'So my little 8-year-old ass went outside to see where she was.' Perhaps, 'so my little eight year old ass of a brother'
I see you have included some author's note, but the contest requirements are to add your word count there too. I don't know if you would be disqualified for not including the word count, but I wouldn't take the chance. Thanks for sharing your story and best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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This is a sad event in your life. My heart feels your pain. I think this sentence needs a little clarification... 'So my little 8-year-old ass went outside to see where she was.' Perhaps, 'so my little eight year old ass of a brother'
I see you have included some author's note, but the contest requirements are to add your word count there too. I don't know if you would be disqualified for not including the word count, but I wouldn't take the chance. Thanks for sharing your story and best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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Thank you for such a wonderful review. I have made the necessary corrects you mentioned.
Always,
Melissa
Comment from Nosha17
She suffered so long and so badly, what injustice, it is no wonder she passed away so young. I feel so bad for you having to witness your loving mother being treated that way. You are brave to write about it and I admire your courage. This problem needs to be highlighted. Good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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She suffered so long and so badly, what injustice, it is no wonder she passed away so young. I feel so bad for you having to witness your loving mother being treated that way. You are brave to write about it and I admire your courage. This problem needs to be highlighted. Good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 14-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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First, let me thank you for such a great review. Secondly, I believe as you that the problem of abuse in all forms needs to be addressed.
Always,
Melissa
Comment from TAB_that's me
I never understand why they stay over and over again. Good story for the prompt. One change needed: "Get back inside you little bitch or your next". -your (you're)
Good luck.
Teresa
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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I never understand why they stay over and over again. Good story for the prompt. One change needed: "Get back inside you little bitch or your next". -your (you're)
Good luck.
Teresa
Comment Written 14-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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Thank you...and I am on it!!!