She Didn't Lock Her Door
short story19 total reviews
Comment from emrpoems
a wonderful story told eloquently as usual. You never fail to engage your reader and hold his attention to the end. Thoroughly enjoyed
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a wonderful story told eloquently as usual. You never fail to engage your reader and hold his attention to the end. Thoroughly enjoyed
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
Comment from MissMerri
I love your story Michael. It is so creative and being told in first person makes it seem like a true story, and very believable. The two main characters are very easy to see and to strongly identify with. My only complaint would be that there was a little too much unneeded explanation about nicknames. It gets a little off the track to go into so much detail about Bobby's many faces and distracts from the forward thrust of the story, but I think a little is a good idea. You are an excellent writer and I thoroughly enjoyed this story. The ending was perfect.
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I love your story Michael. It is so creative and being told in first person makes it seem like a true story, and very believable. The two main characters are very easy to see and to strongly identify with. My only complaint would be that there was a little too much unneeded explanation about nicknames. It gets a little off the track to go into so much detail about Bobby's many faces and distracts from the forward thrust of the story, but I think a little is a good idea. You are an excellent writer and I thoroughly enjoyed this story. The ending was perfect.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
Comment from ProjectBluebook
This short story is an excellent contender for story of the month. I was captivated from start to finish, and it has a good plot basis. Romance fills the air. Nice descriptions included. imaginative. wackydo
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This short story is an excellent contender for story of the month. I was captivated from start to finish, and it has a good plot basis. Romance fills the air. Nice descriptions included. imaginative. wackydo
Comment Written 05-Jun-2015
Comment from Linda Engel
Oh What memories. Great names for your characters. Linda was a very popular name of the 1950's . Cute preteen growing up to be the sweetie of a Senior. Heart throb story very well told allowing the readers to travel back into the memories of the writer. I remember my high school boyfriend sneaking around my house begging me to come outside for a make out session. I feel the innocence of that time made the secrets and romance that much sweeter. We weren't exposed to much more than the likes of Peyton Place, A Summer Place and all the Beach Blanket Bingo movies. I grew up behind a drive-in in Jacksonville between the ages of eight and fifteen. I think I was exposed a little more than others.
Mike , we love your stories. Well written and so enjoyable.
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Oh What memories. Great names for your characters. Linda was a very popular name of the 1950's . Cute preteen growing up to be the sweetie of a Senior. Heart throb story very well told allowing the readers to travel back into the memories of the writer. I remember my high school boyfriend sneaking around my house begging me to come outside for a make out session. I feel the innocence of that time made the secrets and romance that much sweeter. We weren't exposed to much more than the likes of Peyton Place, A Summer Place and all the Beach Blanket Bingo movies. I grew up behind a drive-in in Jacksonville between the ages of eight and fifteen. I think I was exposed a little more than others.
Mike , we love your stories. Well written and so enjoyable.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2015
Comment from Nosha17
What a shame you missed the contest because of word count, you could have cut down some of the dialogue, that would probably have done it. The dialogue was good and fitting for kids of that age. The story line was great and it was most romantic. Most enjoyable. Faye
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What a shame you missed the contest because of word count, you could have cut down some of the dialogue, that would probably have done it. The dialogue was good and fitting for kids of that age. The story line was great and it was most romantic. Most enjoyable. Faye
Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
Comment from l.raven
HI Michael, let me say I love her name...LOL...you know Michael you have a way o making a story come to life...you make it so easy to understand...to remember those days of meeting that first guy...and all the emotions that were there...would love to do them over...I think I just did reading this...you could never us to many words my friend...soooooo very well written...luff Linda xxoo
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HI Michael, let me say I love her name...LOL...you know Michael you have a way o making a story come to life...you make it so easy to understand...to remember those days of meeting that first guy...and all the emotions that were there...would love to do them over...I think I just did reading this...you could never us to many words my friend...soooooo very well written...luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
Comment from Green Lake Girl
I love this story and suspect there's a lot of truth to it. Such sweet love. I'm glad you didn't pare down the story. Like it the way it is. Kinda curious--what's Linda doing now?
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I love this story and suspect there's a lot of truth to it. Such sweet love. I'm glad you didn't pare down the story. Like it the way it is. Kinda curious--what's Linda doing now?
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
Comment from Megalips
I really like this, Mikey. You did a great job with character development and introducing several 'players' into the field of discussion. The story focuses on you and Linda, but this is a wonderful journey up to a point where we can center our sights on that relationship....this pseudo-schizophrenia personality explanation is a fascinating prodrome to the main event (and not so much out of the ordinary except for the multitude of characters wrapped so tightly into your being), but even so is quite believable. By the end, you have me tippy toeing down the drive right beside you, intimately invested. Even though it's a short piece, it took me on a bit of a roller coaster.
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I really like this, Mikey. You did a great job with character development and introducing several 'players' into the field of discussion. The story focuses on you and Linda, but this is a wonderful journey up to a point where we can center our sights on that relationship....this pseudo-schizophrenia personality explanation is a fascinating prodrome to the main event (and not so much out of the ordinary except for the multitude of characters wrapped so tightly into your being), but even so is quite believable. By the end, you have me tippy toeing down the drive right beside you, intimately invested. Even though it's a short piece, it took me on a bit of a roller coaster.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
Comment from CR Delport
Yeah, sometimes when the mood strike us, it is difficult to write to a prescribed number of words. Work has kept me awful busy these last few weeks and I didn't have much time to review or write, but hope it will get a little better this week. It would be so nice if I could make enough money with writing that I could do that full time :)
Well done.
Christelle.
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Yeah, sometimes when the mood strike us, it is difficult to write to a prescribed number of words. Work has kept me awful busy these last few weeks and I didn't have much time to review or write, but hope it will get a little better this week. It would be so nice if I could make enough money with writing that I could do that full time :)
Well done.
Christelle.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Nicely done.
It would have been great for the contest and ifeel it surpassed them.
You have such a way with words that they just seem to flow no matter the style.
No problems noted and a wonderful read
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Nicely done.
It would have been great for the contest and ifeel it surpassed them.
You have such a way with words that they just seem to flow no matter the style.
No problems noted and a wonderful read
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015