Comment from K. Lorraine

Good

Sorry...
I didn't see any humor here...
The syllable count was spot on though...
I think you lost sight of what funny is all about.
I didn't think the title worked either...
Maybe shattered Nerves!
Best wishes in the contest. It was a fun 5-7-5
There were a lot of really good entries.

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 Comment Written 29-May-2015

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reply by the author on 29-May-2015

thank you

Comment from TPAC

Excellent

Now this is funny. Poet tell of couple with new arrival, they feel tricked by the entire occurrence, the infant didn't have help instructions, poet conveys their lack concluding thoughts

 Comment Written 28-May-2015

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reply by the author on 28-May-2015

thank you for your comments and the 5 stars

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

I have to laugh at that just as anyone who's had trouble raising the new infant (I remember the first night home..eeeh), they do not have instructions and the mixed advice is usually as helpful as Ikea manuals. Excellent entry. Funny and true.

 Comment Written 28-May-2015

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reply by the author on 28-May-2015

than you mfowler, i appreciate the comments and the 5 stars

Comment from danpald

Excellent

The picture tells it all
First child is a chore
Parents are learning to care
The slightest clue nowhere

How to learn from scratch
The task of such delicate care
Needed to one so small
That has no idea how to share

 Comment Written 28-May-2015

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reply by the author on 28-May-2015

thank you danpald, i appreciate the comments and the 5 stars :)

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This meets the contest requirements nicely with a correct line and syllable count. You deliver a fun and very true piece with the perfect artwork to enhance it. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 27-May-2015

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reply by the author on 27-May-2015

Thank you Mystic. It is always a pleasure to hear from you. I appreciate your comments.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Hah, yeah, but you get better with experience just like with anything else. It might be nice if babies did come with instruction manuals, then again, not all babies are the same. Girls act a bit differently than boys. Boys tend to be more whiny and cry a lot more than girls do as infants...kinda like when we become men too, come to think of it, heh-heh.

Good job, and good luck! ~Dean ;)

 Comment Written 27-May-2015

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reply by the author on 27-May-2015

Thank you Dean, I appreciate the 5 stars and your comments.

reply by Dean Kuch on 27-May-2015

Anytime.

Comment from His Grayness

Excellent

Great photo to carry the brief story and add impact to the thought/message. Not much more can be done with this style of poetry but this one gets the point across, and that's the mission. HIS GRAYNESS

 Comment Written 27-May-2015

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reply by the author on 27-May-2015

Thank you his grayness :) I appreciate your comments and the 5 stars.

Comment from mommerry

Excellent

Your poem rings so true - is there any one of us who as new parents didn't feel we were lost in knowing how to do the job right? Very funny, very well done.

 Comment Written 27-May-2015

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reply by the author on 27-May-2015

Thank you :) I appreciate your comments and 5 stars.

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

This is a great entry into the funny haiku, all the syllables are correct. The words are so true, I believe this to be a great contender for the contest.

Well done,
Mary

 Comment Written 27-May-2015

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reply by the author on 27-May-2015

Thank you Jackarrie, your opinion means a lot to me.

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This is a slice from the old Learning-to-be-Parents decade where we ruin a child's life through over-protection or screaming as to an adult (Why are we screaming?) Good times.

 Comment Written 27-May-2015

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reply by the author on 27-May-2015

Thank you for your comments and generous review.