Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 63 "Unhandled"Assorted poetry
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Nice haiku, although I am not sure it is a haiku. You do have the correct amount of syllables but no kigo. The little poem has a nice tone and flow. Good job!
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
Nice haiku, although I am not sure it is a haiku. You do have the correct amount of syllables but no kigo. The little poem has a nice tone and flow. Good job!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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Thank you, GBR for the excellent review. Another 5-7-5 which looks like a haiku but isn't.
Comment from Ginnygray
You are definitely finding interesting and unique topics to base your poems on! Very good 5-7-5. There are correct amount of syllables and it makes me wonder where you would spend money on such an ornate handle when the door is not going to open! :)
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
You are definitely finding interesting and unique topics to base your poems on! Very good 5-7-5. There are correct amount of syllables and it makes me wonder where you would spend money on such an ornate handle when the door is not going to open! :)
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Ginny, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from robina1978
Excellent photo that complements your poem perfectly. Yet an other 5-7-5, dot on the syllable count. And an utmost original subject: a carved and shaped soft brass handle for an unused door.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
Excellent photo that complements your poem perfectly. Yet an other 5-7-5, dot on the syllable count. And an utmost original subject: a carved and shaped soft brass handle for an unused door.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Ine, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from rspoet
This is very good, Bill.
Exact syllable count
The alliteration and shaping of the words is excellent
It has a soft sound that echoes
Excellent contrast between the carved handle and the bleakness of it's function or lack of function
perfect picture to compliment the poem
Well done
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
This is very good, Bill.
Exact syllable count
The alliteration and shaping of the words is excellent
It has a soft sound that echoes
Excellent contrast between the carved handle and the bleakness of it's function or lack of function
perfect picture to compliment the poem
Well done
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the excellent review. Bill