2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "haiku (money tree in spring)"A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
54 total reviews
Comment from cbat
I am unable to keep a money tree alive, what does this sayabout me?
Your art work as usual perfect,and simple words fitting.
Another great piece.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015
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I am unable to keep a money tree alive, what does this sayabout me?
Your art work as usual perfect,and simple words fitting.
Another great piece.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015
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Thank you very much cbat, I really appreciate your review.
Comment from thee-name
Excellent Haiku. I enjoyed reading your writing.
money tree in spring
so easy to grow and feed
leaning to the right
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015
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Excellent Haiku. I enjoyed reading your writing.
money tree in spring
so easy to grow and feed
leaning to the right
Comment Written 11-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015
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Thank you very much for your excellent review. :)
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thank you! :>)
Comment from Pam (respa)
-I am glad you included a picture and author notes. You also hear the expression 'money grows on trees' but I never heard of a money tree. Also, the green thumb for me is nonexistent!
-I like your haiku. It has good format and content.
-Good image in line one and good connection with line two.
-The last line is priceless for the double meaning I wouldn't have thought of at all except for your 'disclaimer' but I am sure some would immediately have gone there.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015
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-I am glad you included a picture and author notes. You also hear the expression 'money grows on trees' but I never heard of a money tree. Also, the green thumb for me is nonexistent!
-I like your haiku. It has good format and content.
-Good image in line one and good connection with line two.
-The last line is priceless for the double meaning I wouldn't have thought of at all except for your 'disclaimer' but I am sure some would immediately have gone there.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015
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Thank you very much for your excellent review. :)
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You are welcome.
Comment from CMac2
I feel like I want to go out and but an money tree. Great words that inspire desire. Loved that you added how to care for a money tree in your notes. Clearly you have a passion for these little trees. <3
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015
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I feel like I want to go out and but an money tree. Great words that inspire desire. Loved that you added how to care for a money tree in your notes. Clearly you have a passion for these little trees. <3
Comment Written 11-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015
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Thank you very much for your excellent review. :)
Comment from Eric1
Hi Gypsy Rose Blue, this is a wonderful statement of words, I'm glad that you added that it is not a political statement - but you could easily sell it to the green party lol! great authors notes too my friend.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015
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Hi Gypsy Rose Blue, this is a wonderful statement of words, I'm glad that you added that it is not a political statement - but you could easily sell it to the green party lol! great authors notes too my friend.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015
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Thank you very much for your excellent review. :)
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You are most welcome my friend.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Nice one. I've seen these in Chinese restaurants, but wouldn't know where to buy one. I wonder why they are called money trees... do you know?
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015
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Nice one. I've seen these in Chinese restaurants, but wouldn't know where to buy one. I wonder why they are called money trees... do you know?
Comment Written 11-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015
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Thank you very much for your excellent review. :) Hello Phyllis, I don't know why they are called money trees but I there is a belief by some that think rubbing the leaves brings good luck and money. I just like the plant. I can't remember where I bought it but it must have been a grocery store, there is where I get my plants.
Comment from flowergl
I love the simplicity of this piece. Very well done. Thanks for the info on the care for the Money tree. Happy Writing!
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015
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I love the simplicity of this piece. Very well done. Thanks for the info on the care for the Money tree. Happy Writing!
Comment Written 11-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015
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Thank you very much for your excellent review. :)
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I truly enjoyed your work. Take care & Happy Writing!
Comment from mfowler
I see why you put in the warning that it's not a political statement. It is indeed a satori line, a juxtaposed perspective of the plant which you've observed so crisply in the first two lines.
money tree in spring
so easy to grow and feed
The name of the plant seems to ahve the double meaning of 'banking' and 'saving', even investment, but I suspect it's just saying what a great plant it is and this example leans over a bit.
Clever writing and particularly well crafted haiku.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015
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I see why you put in the warning that it's not a political statement. It is indeed a satori line, a juxtaposed perspective of the plant which you've observed so crisply in the first two lines.
money tree in spring
so easy to grow and feed
The name of the plant seems to ahve the double meaning of 'banking' and 'saving', even investment, but I suspect it's just saying what a great plant it is and this example leans over a bit.
Clever writing and particularly well crafted haiku.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015
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Thank you for the awesome review :)
Comment from fayesh
I think you did a fine job of maintaining the syllable count, but the last line is kind of flat, in my opinion. I thin you should have extended the "money" symbol. For example, possibly, for the last line - "leaves are not dollars."
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I think you did a fine job of maintaining the syllable count, but the last line is kind of flat, in my opinion. I thin you should have extended the "money" symbol. For example, possibly, for the last line - "leaves are not dollars."
Comment Written 11-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015
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"leaves are not dollars?" that is terrible. LOL
Comment from rjuselius
this is an excellent haiku dear gypsy blue rose! i did think it is a political statement because it would make a brilliant one. however even if you remove the ideology, the poem still stands tall.
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015
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this is an excellent haiku dear gypsy blue rose! i did think it is a political statement because it would make a brilliant one. however even if you remove the ideology, the poem still stands tall.
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 11-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015
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Thank you very much. :)