Comment from ann marie mazz

Excellent

hello brett

congratulations on your winning entry

I see both seriousness and humor within the entry
both sides are conveyed well and clear
I however always see the humor so I adore that part here
I enjoyed your mention of "buffoon"

I also enjoyed the voice and tone as you are talking to the reader for it brought a chuckle as one reads

thank you for sharing
this was fun to read
congratulations again
ann marie

 Comment Written 22-Jul-2015

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Comment from Mr. Dark

Excellent

This was so good! Something entirely unique, and that, more than anything, draws me in. The personal narration--speaking to the reader directly--was a beautiful touch. Your imagery was unfaltering. Not only that, but to take something so flowers and butterflies as a rainbow and turn it into something darkly disturbing, well, I for one appreciate the living shit out of that :)

This was highly original and well written. Your voice on the page was realistic enough to suspend my disbelief. That's a sign of good writing if ever there was one. You took the prompt of this contest to the outer limits of the imagination, and that, sir, is testament to the bats that live in your belfry :)

This was wonderful. I loved it :)

--Sara

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2015

Thank you for your very nice and kind comments. Appreciate them very much. Wait until you read Bug Out. My newest little creation I plan to have posted within the next two days.

Comment from Green Lake Girl

Excellent

Congratulations on your contest win. It's best not to pursue anything at the end of any rainbow. Just let it be. So, the trolls are the guards of the gold, eh? Who knew? Well done story!

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2015

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Comment from Michaelk

Excellent

The siren song of precious metal is trumped only by the sight of a willing, beautiful woman. Yes, we men are fools. Be it greed or lust, we set our own traps. Little or no effort is needed to ensnare us. Your pretty little rainbow becomes nothing more than a road map to our own doom.
It might as well have letters emblazoned in the colors saying, 'Over here, stupid!'
A well written story. I especially liked the numerous times that you talked to the readers as your audience.

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2015

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Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I liked the way your title and picture selection beckoned us into your story. Then, characterizing yourself as the "Rainbow Maker" and speaking in the first person added to the immediacy. I was intrigued by the history of the troll and his ability to transform himself into a beautiful female for a deadly trap. Here's to your strong imagination and best wishes in the contest- Joan

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2015

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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Exceptional

Hello ananymous writer. Rainbow Maker, proposes the question, What if you found that elusive pot of gold? I am too terrified to even try.
I thought leprechauns were the ones garding the pot of gold. The troll is much carrier. Congratulations, you wrote an excellent story and you have my vote.

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2015

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Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

An interesting tale. Anytime anyone contemplates taking what doesn't belong to them should remember your chilling story. Gold fever, I think it's called. As fun for the reader as it probably was for you to write. Marilyn

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2015

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Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This meets the contest requirements beautifully. The way in which you speak directly to the reader throughout the story is quite inventive and thoroughly engaging - you leave no doubt at all whose gold it is LOL. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2015

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Comment from jpduck

Excellent

I thought this was great while you were writing fantasy, but I didn't think the historical research products fitted very well with it.

Some suggestions, typos and SPAGs. (Square brackets indicate suggested deletions, and asterisks, suggested insertions):

'it is nothing more than a [reflection] *refraction* of light in water droplets'

'Nothing more than an optical illusion' (I'm sorry, no, it's not an optical illusion; it's real. 'Optical illusion' describes something visual which the brain misinterprets for various reasons. Perhaps all this science is inappropriate for a piece of writing that is a fantasy. If you feel that, I apologise -- just ignore me).

'I have lived *to* a ripe old age'

'are also *creatures,* violent by nature*,* [creatures] who delight in capturing and torturing our victims.'

'the pot of gold I [sat out] *placed* at the end of the rainbow I made this morning.'


Adrian

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2015

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Comment from ellie6

Exceptional

An excellent piece of writing. The shape shifting rainbow maker is creepy. The lust for gold is one that has captivated man since time began.

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2015

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