2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 53 "5/7/5 ( Our Mother Nature )"A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
14 total reviews
Comment from seaglass
We came from Mother Earth and we will return to her, yet we disrespect her in so many ways. This poem is a good reminder that we should respect the mother of all.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2015
We came from Mother Earth and we will return to her, yet we disrespect her in so many ways. This poem is a good reminder that we should respect the mother of all.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2015
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Thank you seaglass :)
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Mystery Poet
Certainly a timely message conveyed in your short verse. Excellent presentation and I've enjoyed the background noise of the rainforest as I read your poem and write my review. I like the ;attitude' in addressing and creating awareness of the destruction we cause to our natural world. Thanks for the notes ... makes me cry for beauty and wonder why everyone doesn't see it this way. Only dollars and the bottom line for so many. Good alliteration in "green/grass", "Mother/mess/mom". "Snug/warm/tender/hug" entices the reader into your poem. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. A contender for high placement I think. Warmest hugs - Lovinia xoxo
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
Hi Mystery Poet
Certainly a timely message conveyed in your short verse. Excellent presentation and I've enjoyed the background noise of the rainforest as I read your poem and write my review. I like the ;attitude' in addressing and creating awareness of the destruction we cause to our natural world. Thanks for the notes ... makes me cry for beauty and wonder why everyone doesn't see it this way. Only dollars and the bottom line for so many. Good alliteration in "green/grass", "Mother/mess/mom". "Snug/warm/tender/hug" entices the reader into your poem. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. A contender for high placement I think. Warmest hugs - Lovinia xoxo
Comment Written 20-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
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Thank you so much for this detailed and positive review. :)
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My pleasure. You've reminded me to go back and read the other entries and vote. I got side-tracked. :)
Comment from Ben Colder
So very true, poet. Man cares nothing about nature , but only the prosperity of the almighty dollar. So good you wrote this. I shall vote for it.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
So very true, poet. Man cares nothing about nature , but only the prosperity of the almighty dollar. So good you wrote this. I shall vote for it.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
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Thank you Ben, I appreciate your review and your vote :)
Comment from barkingdog
The wonders of nature's medicines, yet to be discovered will be lost forever. Man is an ignorant creature that is killing himself along with the rain forests.
Your 5/7/5 really got me heated up. Don't mess with Mom is right.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
The wonders of nature's medicines, yet to be discovered will be lost forever. Man is an ignorant creature that is killing himself along with the rain forests.
Your 5/7/5 really got me heated up. Don't mess with Mom is right.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
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Thank you barkingdon, I appreciate your review. :)
Comment from ellie6
A thoughtful piece of poetry, it tells a universal truth, that we must all value nature and not pollute her green fields and clear rivers with debris. Well written
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
A thoughtful piece of poetry, it tells a universal truth, that we must all value nature and not pollute her green fields and clear rivers with debris. Well written
Comment Written 20-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
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Thank you ellie, I appreciate your review. :)
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements beautifully with a spot on line and syllable count. This seemed to be more of a statement than imagery followed by observation but it was still well executed - the presentation seemed to overpower the piece itself. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
This meets the contest requirements beautifully with a spot on line and syllable count. This seemed to be more of a statement than imagery followed by observation but it was still well executed - the presentation seemed to overpower the piece itself. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
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Thank you MysticAngel, I appreciate your review. :) I thought 5/7/5 poems are different than haiku, no satari needed.
Comment from angel123
Your poem is well written and I enjoyed reading it. It flows well and good alliteration of words green grass in your first sentence.
Angel123
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
Your poem is well written and I enjoyed reading it. It flows well and good alliteration of words green grass in your first sentence.
Angel123
Comment Written 20-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
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Thank you angel, I appreciate your review. :)
Comment from danpald
Well the move of the poem
The pictures and the song
All for only 15 syllables
I wish I could do as well
Still not able to get any pictures
They accept at the start
Never in the middle
They come when formed but not when saved
So fortune is not my lot
Well the contest has begun
good luck with it all
The voting will be tight
This is nature's song
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
Well the move of the poem
The pictures and the song
All for only 15 syllables
I wish I could do as well
Still not able to get any pictures
They accept at the start
Never in the middle
They come when formed but not when saved
So fortune is not my lot
Well the contest has begun
good luck with it all
The voting will be tight
This is nature's song
Comment Written 20-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
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Thank you danpald, I appreciate your review. :)
Comment from Glasstruth
Mother nature is really not in danger. How arrogant of us to claim that she's in trouble when it's really us. After we're dead and gone, earth will recover. It out lived the dinosaur. Love the last line. Awesome ending! Les
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
Mother nature is really not in danger. How arrogant of us to claim that she's in trouble when it's really us. After we're dead and gone, earth will recover. It out lived the dinosaur. Love the last line. Awesome ending! Les
Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Thank you Les :)
Comment from tfawcus
It takes as long to turn the attention of politicians and profiteers as it does to alter the course of a super-tanker headed for the rocks. What seems obvious to poets and the general population, becomes submerged in the short-term agenda of expediency.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
It takes as long to turn the attention of politicians and profiteers as it does to alter the course of a super-tanker headed for the rocks. What seems obvious to poets and the general population, becomes submerged in the short-term agenda of expediency.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Thank you tfawcus :)