2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 46 "Haiku (delicate pink leaf)"A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
42 total reviews
Comment from mermaids
I like the feel and flow of your words and the image of the delicate pink leaf floating on the wild river. You have created a picture of nature and I have feelings for the pink leaf. Earth smells like rain is a fitting last line. Your poem appeals to the senses.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2015
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I like the feel and flow of your words and the image of the delicate pink leaf floating on the wild river. You have created a picture of nature and I have feelings for the pink leaf. Earth smells like rain is a fitting last line. Your poem appeals to the senses.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2015
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Thank you very much mermaids, you have captured the meaning of my haiku perfectly. ;)
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku about nature, Delicate Pink Leaf, fits into my definition of a haiku. The pink background certainly overwhelms the page. Makes net ink of Pepto-Bismol.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2015
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This haiku about nature, Delicate Pink Leaf, fits into my definition of a haiku. The pink background certainly overwhelms the page. Makes net ink of Pepto-Bismol.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2015
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Thank Bill :)
Comment from Janet Foor
Wow". So many rules to follow and it looks like you satisfied them beaututifully. Your concrete imagery is lovely. Earth smells like rain is brilliant. Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2015
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Wow". So many rules to follow and it looks like you satisfied them beaututifully. Your concrete imagery is lovely. Earth smells like rain is brilliant. Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much Janet!! I appreciate the six stars. :)
Comment from Eric1
Hi Gysy Rose Blue, this is a really good entry for this particular competition, There are a lot of rules to follow but your beautiful words have won the day. I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2015
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Hi Gysy Rose Blue, this is a really good entry for this particular competition, There are a lot of rules to follow but your beautiful words have won the day. I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2015
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Thank you Eric, I did''t win but I got all time best award. :) go figure.
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You are most welcome my friend and I can't figure.
Comment from MissMerri
A delightful haiku, with two lines of concrete imagery (delicate pink leaf floats wild torrential river) and the sense-stirring closing line... "earth smells like rain." I liked this very much and think it is a perfect response to this prompt. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2015
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A delightful haiku, with two lines of concrete imagery (delicate pink leaf floats wild torrential river) and the sense-stirring closing line... "earth smells like rain." I liked this very much and think it is a perfect response to this prompt. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2015
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thank you Miss Merri :)
Comment from The Reverend Dr Gonzo
I can smell the rain-soaked ground, and see the earthworms spring up from the deluge. I can hear the bubbles of a babbling stream turn into the rush of a flooded river. And I can see the delicate nature of a tiny pink leaf float freely through it all without a care in the world. Nice work.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2015
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I can smell the rain-soaked ground, and see the earthworms spring up from the deluge. I can hear the bubbles of a babbling stream turn into the rush of a flooded river. And I can see the delicate nature of a tiny pink leaf float freely through it all without a care in the world. Nice work.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2015
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Thank you Dr. Gonzo :)
Comment from Rubylou
It seems like there are so many hoops to jump through on this one.
You certainly did an excellent job.
Your sarori line is so simple yet so profound. "Earth smells like rain."
I can close my eyes and inhale that wonderful fresh
Scent.
Wonderful writing.
Rubylou
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2015
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It seems like there are so many hoops to jump through on this one.
You certainly did an excellent job.
Your sarori line is so simple yet so profound. "Earth smells like rain."
I can close my eyes and inhale that wonderful fresh
Scent.
Wonderful writing.
Rubylou
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2015
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Thank you Rubylou, you have capture the meaning of my haiku perfectly.. Thank you for the review. :)
Comment from Alan K Pease
Your haiku (delicate pink leaf) fits the constraints of this form of poetry precisely with an excellent satori. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2015
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Your haiku (delicate pink leaf) fits the constraints of this form of poetry precisely with an excellent satori. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2015
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Thank you Alan, but I didn't win. :( I got really good reviews, even -all time best- but the votes didn't go my way. It is a big gamble when you enter this kind of contest. I appreciate your review and your support and kind words.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
There sure were enough rules for this contest! LOL! But you handled it beautifully. You've said so much with just a few words... An early autumn storm strikes a rural scene. Who doesn't love the smell of the countryside after a rain? :)
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2015
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There sure were enough rules for this contest! LOL! But you handled it beautifully. You've said so much with just a few words... An early autumn storm strikes a rural scene. Who doesn't love the smell of the countryside after a rain? :)
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2015
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thank you Phyllis, I appreciate your review. :)
Comment from Ekim777
There seems to be an abundance of rules for a short, sweet , three liner. The first two lines bear an abundance of 'fillers' adjectives and there is nothing exciting about them. "Earth smells like rain " is a refreshing difference. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2015
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There seems to be an abundance of rules for a short, sweet , three liner. The first two lines bear an abundance of 'fillers' adjectives and there is nothing exciting about them. "Earth smells like rain " is a refreshing difference. -Ekim777
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2015
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thank you Ekim , I appreciate your review. :)