Epiphany of a Winter Unfortunate
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Comment from Megalips
You may have to help me here, Greg...I'm wondering if there is something deeper, but ( I mean i get old man winter personified) but is this supposed to be you? Surely you're not creaking around yet....you're a 'young buck'!!!! I like creaking.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2015
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You may have to help me here, Greg...I'm wondering if there is something deeper, but ( I mean i get old man winter personified) but is this supposed to be you? Surely you're not creaking around yet....you're a 'young buck'!!!! I like creaking.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2015
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Haha I hope you didn't judge me too much. Just a quick prompt. Silly.
Comment from I am Cat
Well damn... I guess I am! :(
rackin sackin...
I love the hard consonant sounds of creaks,aches,wheezes on the first line...
to take me into the second line to alliterate the 'wheezes within' along with who's/Winter... and the vowel sounds of who's/true and alliteration of the/true
lots of goodies in this wonderful Ode to Winter, but now you have me thinking I might be a man. :(
(maybe it's a side effect of the surgery? ) damn ;(
Good luck in the prompt!
CAt
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2015
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Well damn... I guess I am! :(
rackin sackin...
I love the hard consonant sounds of creaks,aches,wheezes on the first line...
to take me into the second line to alliterate the 'wheezes within' along with who's/Winter... and the vowel sounds of who's/true and alliteration of the/true
lots of goodies in this wonderful Ode to Winter, but now you have me thinking I might be a man. :(
(maybe it's a side effect of the surgery? ) damn ;(
Good luck in the prompt!
CAt
Comment Written 23-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2015
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hi Cat! I just saw this again. I didn't realize I hadn't responded! Thank you so much for reading this. Just a silly one haha.
Comment from RYME4U
Very clever. Well presented and the artwork is a perfect enhancement for the meaning of your subtle poem. I liked this very much. Great job!
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015
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Very clever. Well presented and the artwork is a perfect enhancement for the meaning of your subtle poem. I liked this very much. Great job!
Comment Written 23-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015
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Thanks so very much! Yay!
Comment from angel123
I love your poem. It has the total package. Your artwork choice is exceptional and it enhances your poem. You have an inner rhyme and a great message and your poem ends with a question.
Angel123
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015
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I love your poem. It has the total package. Your artwork choice is exceptional and it enhances your poem. You have an inner rhyme and a great message and your poem ends with a question.
Angel123
Comment Written 23-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015
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Wow! I'm so incredibly honored! Seriously, this means a great deal to me. It really does.
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You are welcome
Comment from Linda Kay
I like the humor here, and think you made great word choice to use such strong descriptive verbs as aches, creaks, and wheezes. With this short of a piece, every word has to contribute, and yours did to show the old man feeling that comes with cold weather. The art was a perfect compliment to your poem.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2015
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I like the humor here, and think you made great word choice to use such strong descriptive verbs as aches, creaks, and wheezes. With this short of a piece, every word has to contribute, and yours did to show the old man feeling that comes with cold weather. The art was a perfect compliment to your poem.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2015
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Thank you Linda! Yay I'm glad it worked.
Comment from visionary1234
Totally cute! Delightful art work to match, too ... especially the pale peach background ... shades of forgotten summers I suspect ... I hear the aches ... I feel your pain ... :):):)
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2015
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Totally cute! Delightful art work to match, too ... especially the pale peach background ... shades of forgotten summers I suspect ... I hear the aches ... I feel your pain ... :):):)
Comment Written 22-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2015
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Thank you! I don't know how I came up with it. I just dug deep I guess. There's no telling what your muse might come up with. Genius? No I don't want to accept that title but I do appreciate the warm reviews I'm getting from amateurs.
Kidding. You're the best.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Love your artwork. Your poem is very cute and easy to read. Comes right to the point with no if, ands, or maybes. A very good description of old man winter. Very true for many of us. Good work
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2015
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Love your artwork. Your poem is very cute and easy to read. Comes right to the point with no if, ands, or maybes. A very good description of old man winter. Very true for many of us. Good work
Comment Written 22-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it!