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Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Michael,
mmmmmm, the sweet smell of fresh bursting citrus... flooding through-calming the senses... yes my friend and brother, it's all about the journey and knowledge gathered to pass down blood-lines long.
You'd think by now, we'd have garnished enough to put us all on the right track and yes, be able to hold our heads high championing his purpose and dreams for us... yet here we are... within the shadow of serenity's imposing challenge... where a billion heartbeats surround all alone...
as usual brother... your unique-original beauty shine in a radiant heart light... beautiful work!
With our thoughts we create,
the thread of connection,
James vx's
******Stars!!!!!!
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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Hi Michael,
mmmmmm, the sweet smell of fresh bursting citrus... flooding through-calming the senses... yes my friend and brother, it's all about the journey and knowledge gathered to pass down blood-lines long.
You'd think by now, we'd have garnished enough to put us all on the right track and yes, be able to hold our heads high championing his purpose and dreams for us... yet here we are... within the shadow of serenity's imposing challenge... where a billion heartbeats surround all alone...
as usual brother... your unique-original beauty shine in a radiant heart light... beautiful work!
With our thoughts we create,
the thread of connection,
James vx's
******Stars!!!!!!
Comment Written 16-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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Hey Bro...-smile-...ahh just found the song...I think i may have used it once before. Now that I read this...its just a guy..person who ah goes...um takes himself to a place that makes him a poet. -shouldershrug-...you think it'll go platnum...-smile- haha...love ya man michael
Comment from amada
I like those sweet round tangerines you are taking about. A very emotive and enticing work. I don't know what it has to do with books, but I like it anyway, it stretched my mind.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2015
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I like those sweet round tangerines you are taking about. A very emotive and enticing work. I don't know what it has to do with books, but I like it anyway, it stretched my mind.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2015
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this is me...or you...or any of us...going to that place where experience and thought converge and give birth to lasting expression....sometimes maybe. -smile- Big bear squeeze to you Nancy...hope you're smiling. love you Michael
Comment from livelylinda
Michael: this poem is gorgeous. As usual, I'm not quite sure what is all the meaning, but it really sounds and reads well. It is six-star-worthy but I can offer only virtual today. I read it through several times because it swims across the tongue so well. Soft Thunder
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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Michael: this poem is gorgeous. As usual, I'm not quite sure what is all the meaning, but it really sounds and reads well. It is six-star-worthy but I can offer only virtual today. I read it through several times because it swims across the tongue so well. Soft Thunder
Comment Written 14-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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Hi Thunder...-smile- its about a man...feeling and thinking...trying to get some place...-smile-...I guess...as well as the rest. Just wrote it listening to the song. you know I read someone say today...that you and I were pseudonyms that she'll never meet. Very sad she cant see. love you Michael
Comment from Gloria ....
Michael this is a fabulous free verse. Opening with sweet smell oranges peeled is so unique and tangy and the mouth watering begins in earnest and flows right through to the concluding dance with your angel.
Absolutely beautiful.
Gloria
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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Michael this is a fabulous free verse. Opening with sweet smell oranges peeled is so unique and tangy and the mouth watering begins in earnest and flows right through to the concluding dance with your angel.
Absolutely beautiful.
Gloria
Comment Written 14-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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-smile-...well you would know. You do beautiful best....thank you, means much coming from edgar allen Gloria. -smile- Yes, I love that song. I think me and Van were twins in another life's dimension...it...in front of my doctors though -wink- love ya Michael
Comment from Joan E.
Welcome back again--we've been missing you, but I know you are a busy working man! I just bought some fragrant tangerines that could have posed for your picture and been the subject of your poem. Lucky for me, their "taste wakes" up the mornings too. Your poem is a perfect example of "freer verse" "oxygenating every next generation's gap"! Big hugs and "dance" on, my poet friend!! -Joan
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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Welcome back again--we've been missing you, but I know you are a busy working man! I just bought some fragrant tangerines that could have posed for your picture and been the subject of your poem. Lucky for me, their "taste wakes" up the mornings too. Your poem is a perfect example of "freer verse" "oxygenating every next generation's gap"! Big hugs and "dance" on, my poet friend!! -Joan
Comment Written 13-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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Well far be it to make you and Bob worry...so...I've just decided to head your way. Please keep the porch light bright, the cupboards stocked, and make up the spare....there be no more worrying, I'll not have it. love Michael
Comment from l.raven
Hi Michael, I love this..
sweet smell orange peeled
calm as chamomiles taste feels
discrete wakes up this morning contemplate
I watch you dance with every word...
unique to any book written...so glad to see you writing baby... love the picture, so love the song...and love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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Hi Michael, I love this..
sweet smell orange peeled
calm as chamomiles taste feels
discrete wakes up this morning contemplate
I watch you dance with every word...
unique to any book written...so glad to see you writing baby... love the picture, so love the song...and love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 13-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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Hello cherry blossom...-smile- thank you Linda for loving me. You've been there for me when no was....and I love you forever. Michael
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thank you baby...and I love you as well...always...Linda xxoo
Comment from Neonewman
Masterfully crafted piece you have delivered unto your reviewing fans. You hooked me immediately with the first couple of lines. Thank you for sharing this beautiful music.
God bless!
Steve
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Masterfully crafted piece you have delivered unto your reviewing fans. You hooked me immediately with the first couple of lines. Thank you for sharing this beautiful music.
God bless!
Steve
Comment Written 13-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Hey Steve...-smile-.. mucho gracious is your review. Yes love that dude. thanks again Bro. love Michael
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You are welcome my friend!
Comment from Joyce Long
Interesting how you were able to move from a fresh orange to a poet dancing. "Books are written" and have been written for so long for the 'next generation' that we can study the development of the world in several different ways. However, the poet will always have a place in carrying on the written word with his dance and challenging purpose.
This is well done and I didn't see any errors.
Joyce 10-13-15
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Interesting how you were able to move from a fresh orange to a poet dancing. "Books are written" and have been written for so long for the 'next generation' that we can study the development of the world in several different ways. However, the poet will always have a place in carrying on the written word with his dance and challenging purpose.
This is well done and I didn't see any errors.
Joyce 10-13-15
Comment Written 13-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Hi Joyce...-smile-..ah I just start...don't ever really know where I'm going or will end up. It comforts me at times..to write like that. thank you sweet Lady. love Michael
Comment from sbedian
This piece is very charged with emotion and packed with metaphor. Oxygenating each next generation gap" seems to mean something about breathing life into the youth. "Within the shadow of serenities imposing challenge" seems like a struggle to find peace of mind in a life full of turmoil. It is a deep piece, i'd give it six stars if I could, nice job!
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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This piece is very charged with emotion and packed with metaphor. Oxygenating each next generation gap" seems to mean something about breathing life into the youth. "Within the shadow of serenities imposing challenge" seems like a struggle to find peace of mind in a life full of turmoil. It is a deep piece, i'd give it six stars if I could, nice job!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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Well...not only youth but all mankind...the poet makes impression that out lives his mortal being...ya know if he was "called". I really dont know...what I was thinking when I wrote this...because I wasn't. ahh...I mean I can...take a concept and run with it...but what relaxes me...is just writing what comes in the moment...then primping its apperance a lil' bit afterward. -headtilt-....is that wierd....-smile- love Michael
Comment from Linda Engel
Don't you just love poets that do what they want to do when they write no worry about rhyme or meter? I love the line : watch the poet dance....and champion his purpose. Sometimes I feel that is what I do just dance around the page and somehow bring it together. That is my purpose.
Good imagery in this free verse .
(I love the smell of fresh peeled oranges)
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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Don't you just love poets that do what they want to do when they write no worry about rhyme or meter? I love the line : watch the poet dance....and champion his purpose. Sometimes I feel that is what I do just dance around the page and somehow bring it together. That is my purpose.
Good imagery in this free verse .
(I love the smell of fresh peeled oranges)
Comment Written 13-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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yes...though I dont know that I've read any who didn't...well, I mean...because I wanted to...-smile-...I've never ah studied..or even read most of "them" considered poetic greats. I bought "leaves od grass"...and honestly I wasnt impressed...at least back then...one poem though, I'll remember forever. "Mother and Babe"...I see the sleeping babe, nestle the breast of its Mother. Mother and babe...hushed...i study them long and long....yea, I guess Walts okay with me...-smile-...Amen, me too...my purpose when I'm predesposed. thanks again. love Michael.
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I find that a lot of people , under the age of 55 did not have to learn poems in grammar school let alone high school. I did. Two poets stand out as i will always remember them. Rudyard Kipling's IF". If you can keep your head when all about you are losing theirs and blaming it on you......
The other is Robert Frost's Two Roads Diverged in a Snowy Woods (or something to that affect) Talks about a horse and buggy ride into the woods and he comes to a fork in the road and has to choose which way to go. So he chooses the one less traveled. I learned all this in sixth grade.
I am not trained and I get impressed with fan people talking about rhyme and meter. If it sounds good , I like it. Love, Linda
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yes...I've read some Frost...one followed..."miles to go before I sleep...and miles to go before I sleep" i'm sure its titled something else though...-smile- ah I'm afraid my high school daze were wrought with rope in tug of war, between burn-out and jock. I liked to experiment but I could run with the jocks too...I never really thought of it as poetic until later in years...haha. have a great night...love-