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off the chart genuis

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Comment from Joan E.
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I was born in Brooklyn, and the photograph looked like it could have been taken at Coney Island. The video seemed to focus on the darker side of the experience, but I chose to identify with the repeating first stanza! Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
    You were...? are you in the Mafia J...? whats really going on...haha....Hello Dear. yea could be Coney Island should be Malibo...but it aiint...-wink-....its Conroe Texas Joan case I hadn't mentioned...-smile-...so you can see were the darker side comes in to play...cant you...haha..ahh give Bob a nudgy for me....love Michael
reply by Joan E. on 18-Oct-2015
    I am 100 percent Italian after all! I didn't realize Conroe, Texas generated such dark vibes. Enjoy the remains of Sunday- Joan
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
    How do I get made J..? i've always wanted to be Michael Corleone....-smile- Dark vibes only after I retire the sunshine of being ...of course Joan...haha
reply by Joan E. on 18-Oct-2015
    No, you don't want to be a made-man. Keep surrounding yourself with the "sunshine of being"! Smiles- Joan
Comment from RGstar
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Such a strong depiction...even on life itself The innocence speaks boundaries and those boudaries are limitless, unless we choose to cramp them.
You have a style, and within there is a sincere and good person. It reflects in all you write.
You have a good day, my good friend.
RGstar

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
    When I was a lil' kid I was afraid of the dark. Still dont really like it, though I dont cry anymore...-smile-...at least when people are looking...haha. Anyway, I slept upstairs alone in ah big loft I guess....I was ah reading, with a lamp on the table next to the bed...and there was a monster who lived in the closet across the way. closet door was open a crack...and my peripheral vision constantly measured its every dimension in size. It was the light that kept that monster from me...and of course the light suddenly went out. In the pitch of the dark...I ah had a fit. heart racing frightened one at that....and I frantically sought its immediate remedy...tried everything fast...but it was the cord...I had to climb over the dresser to barely reach the wall socket...and ew man, I almost had it but...just wasn't a tall, long , big enough....dam was it frustrating...because I also have ah sense...not sure what number, but my left ear twitches like Mel Tillus stutters whenever someone or thing is sneaking up on me....so here we are me , the monster who is now out of the closet and breathing down my back, ass end exposed, desperately trying to save my life by the light that wards off all evil...and just cant reach it...almost ..God almost. I was ....a gonner...so prayed for real for the first time in my life...I prayed.."IF this light does not go on this time...there is no God"....and poof.....the room was a glow of bright white. The closet doors crack hadn't moved one cenimeter...and he was still inside. Ever since that night....I've always known He's watching me...-smile-...so it matters what I do and dont. Hope you're well Bro. .love michael
Comment from Glasstruth
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Yes, the ferris wheel goes round, but sometimes it seems it gets stuck. At first I did stuck on a line: "never close open soon" because I read it as one and it didn't make sense then I realized there should be a commabetween, "close, open" Since you didn't use any punctuation, maybe dividing the line might be better. Of course, I know now how it reads now. Love the up & down atmosphere you've presented. Great job! Les

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
    Hey Les...-smile- no I want it to read as one sentence..statement. I put a "too" in there for a minute...but I like it with out better. yea, I just wrote this real fast listening to the song. appreciate you Bro. love Michael
Comment from gamay
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Hi Friend.
This a very nice poem.
Here in my place many are gamblers.
Name it and you will.
Anyway I love this.
I enjoyed it much.
Have a nice day to you.
gamay

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
    Hey you...-smile- ..your place..do you own a Casino...? haha...ah gambling...we all gamble sooner or later.yea Well...I been naming it...just aint seen it yet. If you do you let me know ya hear...-wink- love Michael
reply by gamay on 19-Oct-2015
reply by gamay on 19-Oct-2015
    LOL.
    I not own Casino here and I don't know much in gambling. I seen it in my neighbors mostly housewife with no work sometimes there husband growled them and soon there fighting.hehehehe
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
    yes, marriage is always a gamble....wear protective gear and make sure you adhere to the Geneva convention guidelines...good luck -salute-
Comment from royowen
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As a former gambler, I can tell tell nothing is for certain even though people will tell you they can predict things for certain! Truth of the matter is, one can't eat gold or silver, and one can only do the best we can. Well done, some beautifully modulated metaphors Michael, this is a remarkable clear narrative, you've written, I enjoyed this very much, well done, blessings, Roy.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
    Hey Roy...-smile- you do kind of remind me of younger Kenny Roger...are you...are you "the Gambler"...haha...thank you Sir. love Michael
reply by royowen on 18-Oct-2015
    That's me Michael, without the facelift, well done
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
    yep...I dont know why they do that Wayne Newton looks frightening now
reply by royowen on 19-Oct-2015
    Well done
Comment from Neonewman
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Another masterfully crafted piece you have delivered for your viewing fans. Love Gary Allen and this is one of my favorite songs. The artwork is epic.

God bless!
Steve

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
    Hey Steve...-smile- thank you sir...much appreciated. love Michael
reply by Neonewman on 18-Oct-2015
    My pleasure!
Comment from l.raven
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Michael, it's like Forest Gump would say...life is like a box of chocolates...you never know what your gonna get...but no matter what it is...there's a wisdom that we learn from our lives...and life isn't always beautiful baby...there's good and there's bad...but there is beauty out here...I promise... just want it...and live for it...glad to see again...makes me smile...love your poem...and I've never heard this song...but I love it...uniquely yours...love you Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
    Forrest Gump.....love that "made up man". everything about that book...movie...leads to true love's simple trust. some say "simple mind"...and what the pick-up truck is wrong with that. I had a friend once..when I was real young grade school still, Danny...big, beast of a boy/man...we played football together and went to school the same way. He would do anything for me...Anyway, if there were more Gumps in every life there would be much more awareness of just what were missing. I pray your Mom and sister are doing better. love you michael
reply by l.raven on 22-Oct-2015
    love you too baby...I love the person he played...innocent to hate...true to his love...and thank you for your prayers...talk later...Linda xxoo
Comment from DALLAS01
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You have some awesome combinations here. When strung together; verse, music and video it makes for an impressive presentation. the repetition of the first and last stanza with that small reverse n the last line is effective. Nice job, Michael.

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
    Hi D...-smile-...thank you Beautiful. if your impressed , I'm on the right track. love Michael