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Comment from lucy marie
As you lay me down
Frenzied thoughts find
Sound of mind
Undressed
Nonplussed
Impulsive
Soft pillow boisterous
Appease please
My wanderlust
Seas long drawn out
Lust
Fulfill you must
Saten sighs as faith dies
His eyes aglow offers
Unknown
So lay me down
Frenzied thoughts find
Sound of mind
Undressed
Impulsive
..... Just because your wonderful... Because your words move me ... When I read them I want to make them mine , in a small way ð???
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2016
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As you lay me down
Frenzied thoughts find
Sound of mind
Undressed
Nonplussed
Impulsive
Soft pillow boisterous
Appease please
My wanderlust
Seas long drawn out
Lust
Fulfill you must
Saten sighs as faith dies
His eyes aglow offers
Unknown
So lay me down
Frenzied thoughts find
Sound of mind
Undressed
Impulsive
..... Just because your wonderful... Because your words move me ... When I read them I want to make them mine , in a small way ð???
Comment Written 17-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2016
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Lucy Marie...Lucy Marie...Lucy Marie....you know you show up just on time all the time...-smile-
you've just made my fifteen minute wander away worth while...certainly sounds exceptional to me. Love you moreover...michael
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Love you too babe x
Comment from Gloria ....
Love how you open your poem with a children's bedtime prayer. And a Hobson's choice? Oh really, I wonder what that was?
It sounds like a mystical dream, the kind you have before you actually pass into the world of sleep.
John Lee Hooker! Yes! I haven't listened to him in a very long time.
As always you pose a thought-provoking poem my friend. I shall stop over and have another read and look at Magdalene later.
Stunning write. It washes over me like ocean waves.
Gloria
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015
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Love how you open your poem with a children's bedtime prayer. And a Hobson's choice? Oh really, I wonder what that was?
It sounds like a mystical dream, the kind you have before you actually pass into the world of sleep.
John Lee Hooker! Yes! I haven't listened to him in a very long time.
As always you pose a thought-provoking poem my friend. I shall stop over and have another read and look at Magdalene later.
Stunning write. It washes over me like ocean waves.
Gloria
Comment Written 11-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015
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ah well...this was my attempt at explaining the overpowering urge to purge our poetry upon paper wings....you really need to be stoned to understand the intricate undertone and ...well music of the night. the hills area live with the sound, if only we would listen. please dont humprey that you bogart....-smile-...love Michael
Comment from Domino 2
Every word is a thought-provoker here, Michael.
Sure no 'blah, blah' boring padding with your writing.
So, I don't understand it all, but that's often better than reading the obvious, 'the cat sat on the mat'.
Brilliant assonance and consonance throughout this inspired quality free verse.
Best wishes, Ray.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015
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Every word is a thought-provoker here, Michael.
Sure no 'blah, blah' boring padding with your writing.
So, I don't understand it all, but that's often better than reading the obvious, 'the cat sat on the mat'.
Brilliant assonance and consonance throughout this inspired quality free verse.
Best wishes, Ray.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015
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Hey Ray...-smile- ah just a lil' somethin' somethin'...appreciate you taking the time. love michael
Comment from amada
This is a very nice song, I never heard it before, I feel sort of a calling call. The same as your words, these are my fave "empty oceans known no peace until appeased." Sweet.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2015
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This is a very nice song, I never heard it before, I feel sort of a calling call. The same as your words, these are my fave "empty oceans known no peace until appeased." Sweet.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2015
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hey happy feet...-smile- ah just messing around....like you I love the song...and just wrote this listening. yea, I think we all do...some more than others...need to create something beautiful..or....explode...-shouldershrug-....at least it aint heroin....right...? haha...love you Michael
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I know, we need to create beauty if even within ourselves. Too much ugliness around...Love to you.
Comment from l.raven
it's truly beautiful Michael...just the thought is beautiful...I'm glad it helped you relax...written in your own words...so unique...could be read two different ways...love...and religion...
now I lay me down
sound of mind found
Hobson's choice unwound
this religion afterlife
Hobson's choice unwound
sound of mind found
I love your poem...and the picture is stunning...
love you Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2015
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it's truly beautiful Michael...just the thought is beautiful...I'm glad it helped you relax...written in your own words...so unique...could be read two different ways...love...and religion...
now I lay me down
sound of mind found
Hobson's choice unwound
this religion afterlife
Hobson's choice unwound
sound of mind found
I love your poem...and the picture is stunning...
love you Linda xxoo
Comment Written 04-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2015
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Hey you...-smile- thank you Sugar plum.....you didn't have to that....I was just restless last night...needed to release. Love you Michael
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it's ok baby....it a great poem...love back at ya...Linda xxoo
Comment from Joyce Long
This is really quite a poem. I didn't know what Hudson's choice was and then when I looked it up, it really revealed the poem. Take it or leave it when you speak of religion is one thing. When I think of religion, I think of selecting a church that follows my believes. Take it or leave it when I think of my belief in Jesus Christ my Lord that is really another thing. The church doesn't do much for me except the Bible says to unite with other believers. But, Jesus is my everything to Hudson's choice Jesus is a very serious matter.
Joyce 12-04-15
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2015
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This is really quite a poem. I didn't know what Hudson's choice was and then when I looked it up, it really revealed the poem. Take it or leave it when you speak of religion is one thing. When I think of religion, I think of selecting a church that follows my believes. Take it or leave it when I think of my belief in Jesus Christ my Lord that is really another thing. The church doesn't do much for me except the Bible says to unite with other believers. But, Jesus is my everything to Hudson's choice Jesus is a very serious matter.
Joyce 12-04-15
Comment Written 04-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2015
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I didn't either...hi Joyce...-smile-..what I'm speaking of here...is the "religion" of laying ourselves down on paper or keyboard anymore. Religion ...the definition according to Merriam Webster for kids...haha..."the belief and worship of God and or gods....and for me anyway...the later is the root of all evil at least where I attended for twenty some odd years. The Church is a body of people...and people screw everything up I'm afraid...-smile-...Joyce I'm sure there are "bodies of believers" who worship and honor in true Spirit...but that certainly wasn't the case in a small.."thank God...Baptist bunch...I once knew. I hope you find what you look for. but true religion begins in the heart and soul of the individual. Yes indeed...serious matter of fact for all. love Michael
Comment from Joan E.
Your animated artwork selection is mesmerizing. As usual, I enjoyed your references--this time the "Hobson's choice" along with all your echoing "ound" and "ust" sounds. Big hugs and happy, upcoming weekend- Joan
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2015
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Your animated artwork selection is mesmerizing. As usual, I enjoyed your references--this time the "Hobson's choice" along with all your echoing "ound" and "ust" sounds. Big hugs and happy, upcoming weekend- Joan
Comment Written 04-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2015
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Hi Joan...-smile- Well thank you Dear....always my pleasure. and the same to you plus a big bear squeeze...love Michael
Comment from Liberty Justice
Intrigying! Makes the reader wonder if the character dies. Is this his or her last testimant. His wild free personification is breath taking and suspenseful.liberty justice
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2015
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Intrigying! Makes the reader wonder if the character dies. Is this his or her last testimant. His wild free personification is breath taking and suspenseful.liberty justice
Comment Written 04-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2015
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Hey Liberty...-smile- why thank you very much...um...hm...yea, sometimes. this is about us...you know all of us...when we lay our souls sold out. uh..I mean when we...um bloodlet...or write...as some lame ass would say. ahhaha...thanks again...love Michael
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery through you wording. Great job. Hugs, Teri
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2015
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This is a very interesting poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery through you wording. Great job. Hugs, Teri
Comment Written 04-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2015
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Hi Teri...-smile- thank you....I just needed relax so I wrote this listening to the song...happy you enjoyed ....love Michael
Comment from I am Cat
A Hobson's choice is a free choice in which only one option is actually offered...
So you have only one choice, but it's a free one, is it?
Since all your poems seem to intertwine a sensual/sexual undertone and also
a religious one... I'm never quite sure which choice you'll be offering OR the one you'll be choosing either... ;)
But, since it's free... I suppose I know which one I'd choose.. .and we all have to choose for ourselves...
;)
Well done Sweet one... well done. Always, your words are quite lilting, lovely and just plain sublime...
Ever see the Divine Miss M do her Mermaid skit onstage? When she gets out of her wheelchair, struts around with her mermaid fin, if you can imagine, sways this way and that and says, "The question before us... is where's the clitoris?"
(that's what your lady coming out of the book reminds me of) ;) lol
lol
Mwah
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2015
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A Hobson's choice is a free choice in which only one option is actually offered...
So you have only one choice, but it's a free one, is it?
Since all your poems seem to intertwine a sensual/sexual undertone and also
a religious one... I'm never quite sure which choice you'll be offering OR the one you'll be choosing either... ;)
But, since it's free... I suppose I know which one I'd choose.. .and we all have to choose for ourselves...
;)
Well done Sweet one... well done. Always, your words are quite lilting, lovely and just plain sublime...
Ever see the Divine Miss M do her Mermaid skit onstage? When she gets out of her wheelchair, struts around with her mermaid fin, if you can imagine, sways this way and that and says, "The question before us... is where's the clitoris?"
(that's what your lady coming out of the book reminds me of) ;) lol
lol
Mwah
Comment Written 04-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2015
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Hey you...-smile-...yep no choice at all. ...really all my poems...? why...why thank you Cat...but why would it be either or anyway...when were all both. In my sense of what you mean by religion...but my religion is not dressing up once a week to socialize with liked minded folk, listen to the Word of God and forget about it over lunch. but an everyday awareness that my sojourn is mapped...recorded if you will, both in the individual soul and the whole of heaven and One most worthy Host. Who by the way created us as sensual beings. I'm not advocating immorality gone crazy just honesty.
Divine Miss M...yes yes I did ...I was married to her I'm afraid. oh shes working the stage in a wheelchair these days huh...? yep,I told her there'd be consequences. the clitoris...? hmm...wwell the clitorus Cat is a very special part of the female anatomy...as well you know, according to your recent release about ...ah ya know....your secret desire and stuff all kinda shouldn't go there...are you trying to work me up Cat. When you wind up the top...sooner or later ya gotta let it go ya know....ah haha...good night Dream Kitty. love Michael
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LOLOL, you're so funny. It's just a POEM, Michael! ;)
You're silly. Go to sleep. You've gone off the deep end... no wait.. .that's MY end. ;)
goodnight sweet boy. ;)
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oh yea...yea...thats not what you said a minute ago -headshake-...I thought you were gonna write crush poem about me...and instead you broke my heart ...too..........ah haha...night night-
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((((((hugs))))) sleep well Michael... ;)