2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "haiku (raindrops on cold)"A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
23 total reviews
Comment from lightink
Beautiful winter fall scene! I love your playfulness and sensitivity to the images! With a form like this it really stands out how much of a visual person you are :)!
The satori line is just pure joy: 'breathe hearts on glass "
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Beautiful winter fall scene! I love your playfulness and sensitivity to the images! With a form like this it really stands out how much of a visual person you are :)!
The satori line is just pure joy: 'breathe hearts on glass "
Comment Written 26-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Thank you Jiyoti, I appreciate your kind words :)
Comment from ciliverde
Very, very nice. The raindrops on the cold glass windowpane...
Locked outside, implying a warm person within.
"Breathe hearts on glass" makes it for me - I don't know exactly what this means, but it captures my imagination:)
Well done!
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2015
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Very, very nice. The raindrops on the cold glass windowpane...
Locked outside, implying a warm person within.
"Breathe hearts on glass" makes it for me - I don't know exactly what this means, but it captures my imagination:)
Well done!
Comment Written 24-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2015
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When I was little and couldn't go out to play because it was raining outside, I would look through the window, fogging up the glass and then I would draw hearts on the glass. Thank you for the great review and happy holidays :)
Comment from ann marie mazz
hello gypsy
true is the form
also true are the voice and tone
you grace us with imagery
as long as the rain stays outside its fine with me (ha ha)
but seriously
the entry is well executed
you have met the challenge
thank you for sharing your talent
best of luck with the contest
ann marie
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
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hello gypsy
true is the form
also true are the voice and tone
you grace us with imagery
as long as the rain stays outside its fine with me (ha ha)
but seriously
the entry is well executed
you have met the challenge
thank you for sharing your talent
best of luck with the contest
ann marie
Comment Written 23-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
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Thank you very much Ann Marie, you are very kind. Happy Holidays!
Comment from AnnaLinda
Gypsy,
You've written a really creative haiku for the contest.
I especially like your longer middle line with original
imagery and personification.
Lovely presentation as well,
Linda
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
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Gypsy,
You've written a really creative haiku for the contest.
I especially like your longer middle line with original
imagery and personification.
Lovely presentation as well,
Linda
Comment Written 23-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
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Thank you Linda :) Happy Holidays!
Comment from I am Cat
A very pretty and visual thought, Sister Gypsy...
I wish you luck in the contest, big sister...
Well done!
Mwah
Sister Cat
Merry Christmas!
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
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A very pretty and visual thought, Sister Gypsy...
I wish you luck in the contest, big sister...
Well done!
Mwah
Sister Cat
Merry Christmas!
Comment Written 22-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
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thank you little sister :) I love you. Merry Christmas (((((gypsy kisses)))))
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, MariVal
= Great haiku.
= Your formatting really amplifies the raindrops and mood of the piece.
= Well written and presented. Good luck in the contest.
* Merry Christmas to you and yours *
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jackie / Jax (*>*)
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
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Hi, MariVal
= Great haiku.
= Your formatting really amplifies the raindrops and mood of the piece.
= Well written and presented. Good luck in the contest.
* Merry Christmas to you and yours *
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jackie / Jax (*>*)
Comment Written 22-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
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Tank you very much for the kind review, I appreciate it. :)
Comment from judiverse
After having it drummed into me that a Haiku was strict 5-7-5, now they say, not necessarily. So confusing. Excellent imagery in yours, the idea of raindrops knocking but not coming in. Nice rhyme with pane and rain. Breathe hearts on glass is great. There might be a way you could word the first line without ending it with cold. It seems like you could a noun there. Best of luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
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After having it drummed into me that a Haiku was strict 5-7-5, now they say, not necessarily. So confusing. Excellent imagery in yours, the idea of raindrops knocking but not coming in. Nice rhyme with pane and rain. Breathe hearts on glass is great. There might be a way you could word the first line without ending it with cold. It seems like you could a noun there. Best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 22-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words. :)
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You're welcome. judi
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day my talented mate. Beautifully done and a wonderful contest entry. I have all sorts of trouble trying to make these little pieces work, so I very rarely attempt them because they stress me out lol. You have nailed it my friend. Fantastic entry to this contest and I wish you luck (You'll go close.) Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
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G'day my talented mate. Beautifully done and a wonderful contest entry. I have all sorts of trouble trying to make these little pieces work, so I very rarely attempt them because they stress me out lol. You have nailed it my friend. Fantastic entry to this contest and I wish you luck (You'll go close.) Cheers Fez
Comment Written 22-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
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Thank you so much for the kind review, I really appreciate it. (((( hugs my friend)))))
Comment from MacMhuirich
This is a delightful haiku. I love to hear the rain especially when I hear it hitting on something. This is a nice soothing read. Best wishes for the contest.
Bless you
John
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
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This is a delightful haiku. I love to hear the rain especially when I hear it hitting on something. This is a nice soothing read. Best wishes for the contest.
Bless you
John
Comment Written 22-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
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Thank you so much for the kind review, I really appreciate it.
Comment from MizKat
Hi Gypsy,
I love you Haiku poem for the contest. You did a topnotch job in writing it. the pictures you used with you poem are wonderful too. It wouldn't surprise me at all if you'd win this contest.
Kat
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
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Hi Gypsy,
I love you Haiku poem for the contest. You did a topnotch job in writing it. the pictures you used with you poem are wonderful too. It wouldn't surprise me at all if you'd win this contest.
Kat
Comment Written 22-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
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Thank you so much for the kind review, I really appreciate it.
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Welcome!