Comment from BOO ghost

Exceptional

speaks of a season which is autumn --tells
action, capturing the moment, it falls
a have not -- leaf is separated from the green canopy inside the green house
not included, a have not
overall, nice example of the season. nature, tree's leaf
BOO

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2016

Wow. You have analyzed this exactly as I hoped it would be perceived. What a great review. Your analysis is spot on and beautifully put. anon

reply by BOO ghost on 05-Jan-2016

yep, Mikey, I been having company, hard to get motivated for new year, working on a poem and my synopsis right now, while my company is gone.

Comment from angel123

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your poem. It flows well and I would have liked to see an artwork choice, but your poem does well standing alone without it. Best wishes!

Angel123

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2016

That's so nice to hear. I agree about the artwork and usually chose a cool font, colors and artwork, but many here criticize that and say, "the words should stand alone". :))

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Oh my goodness, this is excellent. You've described with haiku that horrible feeling of being left on the outside while merriment and life is happening inside.

So much said, in so few words.

Terrific and I wish you all the best in the contest.

Gloria

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016

I worry that folks won't understand my lengthy pieces so, needless to say, I always have my doubts with these. I'm so pleased you have this on the money. A relieved smile. I was thinking of rich/poor as well along with the more general feeling you describe perfectly. Wow, what more could I ask for. Thank you so much. :))

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

Excellent haiku form that creates a clear scene of nature. I enjoyed reading this poem, love to think of Autumn colors and leaves this time of year. Your poetic form is smooth and love the line falls on warm greenhouse.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016

Thank you so much. I'm pleased you enjoyed that line and found this to be a good read. Very encouraging. :))

Comment from Jacob Collins

Excellent

I liked this haiku and I thought that it was well written. I liked the imagery of the falling autumn leaf, preparing the way for winter to come. A well written piece, good luck in the contest...Jacob

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016

That's awesome to hear. Thank you so much. :))