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Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Tracing Echo's"off the chart genuis
9 total reviews
Comment from amada
Beautiful artwork, a faint Christmas memory, I like. While words on a black setting, nice as well. Great lines, one of my faves "as a forest of gumption gets up and runs..." :-)
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2016
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Beautiful artwork, a faint Christmas memory, I like. While words on a black setting, nice as well. Great lines, one of my faves "as a forest of gumption gets up and runs..." :-)
Comment Written 02-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2016
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Hey you...-smile- what you been up to...? everything well...? I sure hope so. I thank you sweet and peck your cheek....love Michael
Comment from Wabigoon
Reconciled--
Some really nice things in here. Two tons of sun, a forest of gumption. But in the context of lines that, for me, dull the power of these images. Something you manage to do to my pleasure in reading your poems -- maybe part of the point.
Tiny Tim, I know two, I assume you are talking about Dickens's Tim? The last line is nicely ambivalent -- him or Him? She smiled enough light to last a life time. Nice.
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2016
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Reconciled--
Some really nice things in here. Two tons of sun, a forest of gumption. But in the context of lines that, for me, dull the power of these images. Something you manage to do to my pleasure in reading your poems -- maybe part of the point.
Tiny Tim, I know two, I assume you are talking about Dickens's Tim? The last line is nicely ambivalent -- him or Him? She smiled enough light to last a life time. Nice.
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 02-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2016
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Hey Jeff...-smile- ...hm...what your saying...I guess. is my "poems" could be "brighter" if you wrote them or showed me how...? ...-smile-....well alright....I'll think about it.
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whoops...hit the wrong button again. Ah yes it is the lil' kid in the movie....and no...although it could represent God...him this time does not....I would explain but it might not deserrnable unless you did...love Michael
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Reconciled--
No, not saying that at all. In fact, I thought my review generally positive. Yes, I might not "enjamb" those really nice images as you do, but that's you, not me. Something I say, I believe "maybe part of the point" in case you missed it.
You write how you write. Not necessarily to my taste. That's fine. You be you. My words were not meant to suggest you change a thing. Yes, I might "like" the poem more if it was different, but that's not the point, eh?
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
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Reconciled--
No, not saying that at all. In fact, I thought my review generally positive. Yes, I might not "enjamb" those really nice images as you do, but that's you, not me. Something I say, I believe "maybe part of the point" in case you missed it.
You write how you write. Not necessarily to my taste. That's fine. You be you. My words were not meant to suggest you change a thing. Yes, I might "like" the poem more if it was different, but that's not the point, eh?
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
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Okay Jeff...I'm michael...nice to meet you...-smile-
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Great thoughts of people being important. She shines light as he walks in. Christmas memories and people being healed by love. Great poem.
The air flight is amazing. The distance from the mountain top in the air to the valley view is great. I enjoyed watching. Brave guys and great video to share with us. Keep writing and inspiring. fly higher! flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2016
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Great thoughts of people being important. She shines light as he walks in. Christmas memories and people being healed by love. Great poem.
The air flight is amazing. The distance from the mountain top in the air to the valley view is great. I enjoyed watching. Brave guys and great video to share with us. Keep writing and inspiring. fly higher! flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 02-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2016
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yes.....and about making. ..-smile-....thanks...i know...love the video and the song. Hope you have a wonderful day. love michael
Comment from teols2016
An interesting poem. I'm not sure about your word order choices in many lines, so I won't judge those. I will point out that "parallelized" is misspelled...it's "paralyzed". This is an interesting piece.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2016
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An interesting poem. I'm not sure about your word order choices in many lines, so I won't judge those. I will point out that "parallelized" is misspelled...it's "paralyzed". This is an interesting piece.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2016
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ah hey...choices are as individual as there actions and reactions. take forinstance impalas...now on the serengetti when and how you go to the watering hole....is wrought with choice...some wrong...and others a bit more lucky. but hey whose to judge the law of the jungle right- ....well appreciate you un-paralizing me...excellent choice. love Michael
Comment from l.raven
Hi Michael, from an all time low....to an eternal everlasting high...I love the way you worded it...forest of gumption gets up and runs...you do have a way with words....unique to you...I love your poem...and you know I love this picture...beautiful...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2016
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Hi Michael, from an all time low....to an eternal everlasting high...I love the way you worded it...forest of gumption gets up and runs...you do have a way with words....unique to you...I love your poem...and you know I love this picture...beautiful...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 01-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2016
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Hello full bloom...-smile-...I thank you Dear....well evidently my way is not necessarily everyone else's ....it seems my drumbeat has an arithmia
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ah didn't it again....so many buttons, so lil' time. anyhoo mucho gratsius ....love Michael
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Hi Sweetie, you are so welcome...we all dance to a different drumbeat dear...it's fine...love Ya Linda xxoo
Comment from Joan E.
I was drawn into this piece by your resonant title and animated picture. As usual, I liked your references to characters like Tiny Tim and Forest Gump, plus your rhymes. Your "two tons of sun burst" is quite a vivid image as well. Cheers and hugs- Joan
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2016
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I was drawn into this piece by your resonant title and animated picture. As usual, I liked your references to characters like Tiny Tim and Forest Gump, plus your rhymes. Your "two tons of sun burst" is quite a vivid image as well. Cheers and hugs- Joan
Comment Written 01-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2016
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Hi Joan...-smile- ...o yea I can draw....vivid imagination produces high definition naturally....no smart tv required...haha...thank you sweet friend...love Michael.
Comment from AnnaLinda
Michael,
Your unique style always has me reading and re-reading your poem. Here I am again...really mystified by your message and playing with words. "man sunk tiny tim" lol "Trim carpenter measured precise - everything nice"
You've got wonderful alliteration and meaning...as far as I can understand it;)
Lovely presentation as well,
Linda
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Michael,
Your unique style always has me reading and re-reading your poem. Here I am again...really mystified by your message and playing with words. "man sunk tiny tim" lol "Trim carpenter measured precise - everything nice"
You've got wonderful alliteration and meaning...as far as I can understand it;)
Lovely presentation as well,
Linda
Comment Written 01-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Hi Linda...-smile- that old movie "a christmas carol" I think...I remember that kid, Tiny tim suffering from polio excited for a decent Christmas. What I meant by the opening was...man made low...ya know by whatever reason I guess.
its about um believing what you been feeding on and sudden;y knowing differently. -smile-...I thank you Sweet Lady. love Michael
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Yes, I think I got the overall message when I put the puzzle pieces together you clever man.
Comment from Ricky1024
Always been him...
Nice...
Great...
Deminstated...
Belated and sometime....
Hated...
Finish the light with the blow of a single match...,.
Ricky1024....
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Always been him...
Nice...
Great...
Deminstated...
Belated and sometime....
Hated...
Finish the light with the blow of a single match...,.
Ricky1024....
Comment Written 01-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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I wrote this after I reviewed you...you can have it Christmas....love michael
Comment from RGstar
This is a deep write here for those who choose to read properly. So good you are with abstract words, my friend, yet with that uncanny ability in drawing the reader back to that certain reality.
Bravo.
Your style is your own which none can replicate. Signs of a good writer.
Best wishes,
RG
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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This is a deep write here for those who choose to read properly. So good you are with abstract words, my friend, yet with that uncanny ability in drawing the reader back to that certain reality.
Bravo.
Your style is your own which none can replicate. Signs of a good writer.
Best wishes,
RG
Comment Written 01-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Hey Roy...-smile- big thanks of appreciation man. you are the man. love michael